Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Жауабыңыз табиғи және түсінікті, бірақ сөйлем құрылымын жақсарту керек. Мысалы, артық "uh" деген сөздерді азайтып, сөйлемдерді нақты әрі қысқа етіп айтуға тырысыңыз. Сонымен қатар, "the city" дегенде нақты қай қала екенін айту жақсы болады.

例: For my last holiday, I went to Barcelona, a city with a beautiful beach. It was a perfect place to relax and unwind after a long school term.

提案: Жауабыңызда артық "umm" деген сөздер көп, оларды азайтыңыз. Сондай-ақ, "I have a lot of time to spend" дегенді нақтырақ және қысқа етіп айтуға болады. Мысалы, "I have more free time to relax and be productive."

例: Yes, I like holidays because they give me more free time to relax and be productive compared to busy workdays.

提案: Жауабыңызда мағынасы түсініксіз сөздер бар, мысалы "all realities are together" деген тіркес. Оның орнына нақты және түсінікті сөздерді қолданыңыз. Мысалы, "I like weddings because they bring family and friends together in a warm atmosphere."

例: I like weddings the most because they bring family and friends together, creating a warm and joyful atmosphere.

提案: Жауабыңызда қайталанатын сөздер бар ("I try to I try to"). Оларды алып тастаңыз және "all stuff I want" дегеннің орнына нақты әрекеттерді атаңыз. Мысалы, "I usually chat with friends and family, and relax."

例: On holidays, I usually chat with my friends and family, and spend time relaxing.

提案: Жауабыңызда қайталанатын сөздер және түсініксіз сөйлемдер бар. "It is better to be outside at home" дегенді нақтылап, қарапайым әрі түсінікті етіп айтыңыз. Мысалы, "I like spending time at home, but I also enjoy being outside to connect with nature."

例: I like spending time at home, but I also enjoy being outside to connect with nature.

提案: Жауабыңыз түсінікті, бірақ қайталанатын сөздер көп. "Leisurely holiday" және "leisure holidays" сөздерін қайталамаңыз. Мысалы, "I prefer a leisurely holiday because it's a time to relax and enjoy."

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because it's a time to relax and enjoy myself.

提案: Жауабыңызда сөздер қайталанып, сөйлем толық емес. "Just make make" дегенді алып тастаңыз және сөйлемді толық аяқтаңыз. Мысалы, "I prefer an exciting holiday because it helps me recharge and create memorable moments."

例: I prefer an exciting holiday because it helps me recharge and create memorable moments.

× It has a beach there and it is really convenient place to relax and unwind after a long school term.

✓ It has a beach there and it is a really convenient place to relax and unwind after a long school term.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'really convenient place'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Here, 'place' is a singular countable noun, so 'a' is necessary before it.

× I have a lot of time to relax and I can spend them more productively than I used to spend them on my work week work days.

✓ I have a lot of time to relax and I can spend it more productively than I used to on my workweek workdays.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrectly used to refer to 'time', which is uncountable and singular. The correct pronoun is 'it'. Also, 'work week work days' should be combined as 'workweek workdays' for clarity.

× The best. I like the weddings because it is a it is a place where all realities are together and it has a warm atmosphere.

✓ The best. I like weddings because it is a place where all relatives are together and it has a warm atmosphere.

The definite article 'the' before 'weddings' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Also, 'realities' is a wrong word; the correct word is 'relatives'. The phrase 'it is a it is a' is repetitive and should be corrected to 'it is a'.

× On holidays, I try to I try to do all stuff I want.

✓ On holidays, I try to do all the stuff I want.

The phrase 'all stuff' is incorrect; 'stuff' is uncountable and usually preceded by 'all the' to specify. Also, the repetition 'I try to I try to' is redundant and should be simplified.

× Yes, I really like when I spend my time at home, but however, it is better to be outside at home because you can, you can be in the environment, you can connect with the environment.

✓ Yes, I really like spending my time at home, but it is better to be outside the home because you can be in the environment and connect with it.

The phrase 'outside at home' is contradictory; 'outside the home' is correct. Also, 'when I spend' is better expressed as 'spending' for fluency. Repetition of 'you can' is unnecessary. 'Connect with the environment' is fine, but 'connect with it' avoids repetition.