Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, đồng thời cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về địa điểm và hoạt động bạn đã làm để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Last holiday, I went to Da Nang, a beautiful city in central Vietnam. I enjoyed the stunning long sandy beaches and the nearby mountains. I also tried some local seafood, which was delicious.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trình bày câu trả lời một cách tự nhiên, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các câu để câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because I have a busy schedule. During holidays, I can relax and relieve stress, which helps me refresh my mind and body.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn thích kỳ nghỉ đó để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: As a teacher, I have two long vacations each year. My favorite is the summer vacation because I have a whole month to relax. Usually, I go back to my hometown to spend time with my family and friends.

提案: Bạn cần sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về các hoạt động bạn làm trong kỳ nghỉ.

例: During my holidays, I usually travel around my city or visit my hometown with my family. I enjoy outdoor activities like playing football or volleyball on the beach.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết.

例: Yes, sometimes I like to spend my time at home after a hard working week. On weekends, my husband and I stay at home, prepare meals together, and talk about work or studies.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trình bày câu trả lời rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do bạn thích kỳ nghỉ thư giãn.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I am always busy. I like holidays where I can wake up anytime I want, have a relaxed breakfast, and then explore my city at my own pace.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I like both exciting and peaceful holidays, depending on my mood. For long vacations, I prefer exciting holidays where I can visit new places, like beautiful beaches I have never been to before.

× In like this holiday, I went to a province in the middle of Vietnam, I suppose for stunning scenery in there, such as long sandy beaches and beautiful mountains.

✓ In this holiday, I went to a province in the middle of Vietnam because of the stunning scenery there, such as long sandy beaches and beautiful mountains.

The phrase 'In like this holiday' is incorrect; 'In this holiday' is appropriate. 'I suppose for stunning scenery in there' is incorrect; 'because of the stunning scenery there' correctly expresses the reason and location.

× I enjoy resource service.

✓ I enjoyed the resort service.

The phrase 'resource service' is incorrect; likely intended 'resort service'. Also, past tense 'enjoyed' fits better as the holiday is in the past.

× I have a hard disk schedule so I always like vacations.

✓ I have a busy schedule so I always like vacations.

'Hard disk schedule' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'busy schedule' to express a full or demanding timetable.

× In that time I can release my stress and it's time to me to refresh myself.

✓ At that time, I can relieve my stress and it's time for me to refresh myself.

'In that time' should be 'At that time' to indicate a specific moment. 'Release my stress' is incorrect; 'relieve my stress' is the correct collocation. 'It's time to me' should be 'It's time for me'.

× I work as a teacher so I have two long vacation in a year and I like the best is summer vacation at that time I have a month to relax and I usually come back my hometown to enjoy my vacation.

✓ I work as a teacher so I have two long vacations in a year and my favorite is the summer vacation; at that time, I have a month to relax and I usually go back to my hometown to enjoy my vacation.

'Two long vacation' should be plural 'vacations'. 'I like the best is summer vacation' is awkward; 'my favorite is the summer vacation' is correct. 'Come back my hometown' needs preposition 'go back to my hometown'.

× I can go out with my.

✓ I can go out with my family.

The sentence is incomplete; 'my' needs an object such as 'family' to complete the meaning.

× In my holiday, I spend time to travel around my city or come back hometown with my family.

✓ During my holiday, I spend time traveling around my city or going back to my hometown with my family.

'In my holiday' should be 'During my holiday'. 'Spend time to travel' should be 'spend time traveling'. 'Come back hometown' needs 'going back to my hometown'.

× I am and each other person so I I like outside activity such as play football or play volleyball in the beaches.

✓ I am a social person so I like outdoor activities such as playing football or volleyball on the beach.

'I am and each other person' is incorrect; likely intended 'I am a social person'. 'Outside activity' should be 'outdoor activities'. 'Play football or play volleyball' should be 'playing football or volleyball'. 'In the beaches' should be 'on the beach'.

× Yes, sometime I want to spend my time at home after a hard working week.

✓ Yes, sometimes I want to spend my time at home after a hard working week.

'Sometime' is an adverb meaning 'at some point'; 'sometimes' means 'occasionally' and is correct here.

× I want to spend my weekend with my family and me and my husband's staying home.

✓ I want to spend my weekend with my family, and my husband and I stay at home.

'Me and my husband's staying home' is incorrect; the subject pronoun 'I' should be used and possessive 'husband's' is incorrect here; 'my husband and I stay at home' is correct.

× We prepare the meal together and sometimes we talk about work or studying.

✓ We prepare meals together and sometimes we talk about work or studies.

'The meal' can be plural 'meals' if referring generally. 'Studying' is a gerund; 'studies' is more appropriate as a noun here.

× I prefer leisurely holiday because I always busy so I just want to have a camp holidays such as I can wake up anytime I like.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday because I am always busy, so I just want to have a camping holiday where I can wake up anytime I like.

'Leisurely holiday' needs an article 'a'. 'I always busy' needs verb 'am'. 'Camp holidays' is incorrect; 'camping holiday' is correct.

× After that I eat breakfast and I go go to travel around my city more.

✓ After that, I eat breakfast and I go to travel around my city more.

Repeated 'go go' is a typo; should be single 'go'. The sentence is acceptable otherwise.

× I like both of them, it depend on my mood.

✓ I like both of them; it depends on my mood.

'Depend' needs third person singular 'depends' to agree with 'it'.

× When I have a long vacation I want to exciting holiday.

✓ When I have a long vacation, I want an exciting holiday.

'Exciting' is an adjective and needs an article 'an' before it. 'Want to exciting holiday' is incorrect; 'want an exciting holiday' is correct.

× I can go anywhere I never come before such as chance beaches. Explore.

✓ I can go anywhere I have never been before, such as beautiful beaches to explore.

'I never come before' is incorrect; 'I have never been before' is correct. 'Chance beaches' is unclear; likely 'beautiful beaches'. 'Explore' is a fragment; needs to be connected properly.