Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınızda təkrarlanan sözlərdən və qeyri-dəqiq ifadələrdən qaçın. Daha aydın və qısa cümlələr qurmağa çalışın. Məsələn, "I went to Turkey last summer to visit several places. It was a wonderful experience."

例: I went to Turkey last summer to visit several places. It was a wonderful experience.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha təbii və axıcı etmək üçün sadə və düzgün ifadələrdən istifadə edin. Məsələn, "Yes, I love holidays because I don't have to go to school or do homework. I can spend time with my friends or enjoy my hobbies like watching movies and reading books."

例: Yes, I love holidays because I don't have to go to school or do homework. I can spend time with my friends or enjoy my hobbies like watching movies and reading books.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha aydın və məntiqli etmək üçün əlaqələndirici sözlərdən istifadə edin və ifadələrinizi sadələşdirin. Məsələn, "My favorite holiday is New Year's Eve because all my family members come together to celebrate. Also, I receive gifts, which makes the day special."

例: My favorite holiday is New Year's Eve because all my family members come together to celebrate. Also, I receive gifts, which makes the day special.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha qısa və aydın edin, əlaqələndirici sözlərdən istifadə edin. Məsələn, "On holidays, I usually visit my grandparents' house where my cousins and family gather. We celebrate my birthday, play games, and enjoy the evening together."

例: On holidays, I usually visit my grandparents' house where my cousins and family gather. We celebrate my birthday, play games, and enjoy the evening together.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha təbii və qısa edin, təkrarlardan qaçının. Məsələn, "Yes, I enjoy spending time at home because it helps me relax. I'm an introvert, so I prefer staying in rather than going out."

例: Yes, I enjoy spending time at home because it helps me relax. I'm an introvert, so I prefer staying in rather than going out.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha aydın və qısa edin, əlaqələndirici sözlərdən istifadə edin. Məsələn, "I prefer busy holidays because I have more free time then. I like exploring new places with my family and hanging out with friends."

例: I prefer busy holidays because I have more free time then. I like exploring new places with my family and hanging out with friends.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha aydın və məntiqli edin, təkrarlardan qaçının. Məsələn, "I prefer exciting holidays because I enjoy lively activities. Although I like peaceful days, I don't want the entire holiday to be quiet."

例: I prefer exciting holidays because I enjoy lively activities. Although I like peaceful days, I don't want the entire holiday to be quiet.

× I went to the Turkey for, for visiting some places and, uh, for doing whole day and it was a great place for a whole day.

✓ I went to Turkey to visit some places and spend the whole day there; it was a great place to spend a whole day.

The definite article 'the' is not used before country names like 'Turkey'. Also, the phrase 'for doing whole day' is incorrect; it should be 'to spend the whole day'. The sentence structure was improved for clarity.

× Why Definitely yes, I love holidays because in the holidays we usually don't have any schools in school or any tasks to do.

✓ Definitely yes, I love holidays because during holidays we usually don't have school or any tasks to do.

The word 'Why' at the beginning is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'any schools in school' is incorrect; it should be 'school'. The phrase 'in the holidays' is better expressed as 'during holidays'.

× That's why I can spend my time with my friends or I can even can have a lot of free time for watching my movies or reading my books.

✓ That's why I can spend my time with my friends or even have a lot of free time to watch my movies or read my books.

The phrase 'I can even can have' contains a redundant modal verb 'can'. Also, 'for watching' should be 'to watch' and 'reading' should be parallel as 'read'.

× My favorite holiday is a New York evening because it's the only time that all the family members come together for celebrating New Year.

✓ My favorite holiday is New Year's Eve because it's the only time when all the family members come together to celebrate the New Year.

'A New York evening' is incorrect; the correct term is 'New Year's Eve'. Also, 'for celebrating' should be 'to celebrate'. The phrase 'that all the family members come together' is better as 'when all the family members come together'.

× On holidays usually I go to my grandparents house because all my cousins and all my family members gather together there.

✓ On holidays, I usually go to my grandparents' house because all my cousins and family members gather there.

'Grandparents house' needs a possessive apostrophe: 'grandparents''. Also, adding a comma after 'On holidays' improves readability.

× That's why I go there for celebrating my birthday and we usually play different kinds of games with my cousins and celebrate the night.

✓ That's why I go there to celebrate my birthday, and we usually play different kinds of games with my cousins and celebrate the night.

The phrase 'for celebrating' should be 'to celebrate' to express purpose correctly. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence flow.

× I love spending time at home because it's the only time that I relax and recharge when I stay at home and I I'm not a extrovert person that's why I don't have lots of friends and I don't like going out, that's why usually I prefer at home.

✓ I love spending time at home because it's the only time I relax and recharge. I'm not an extrovert person; that's why I don't have many friends and don't like going out. That's why I usually prefer to stay at home.

The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity. 'I I'm' is a typo. 'a extrovert' should be 'an extrovert'. 'Lots of friends' is better as 'many friends'. 'Prefer at home' should be 'prefer to stay at home'.

× That's why I want to spend those time with my family members for going like exploring new places and hang out, hanging out with my friends.

✓ That's why I want to spend that time with my family members, exploring new places and hanging out with my friends.

'Those time' is incorrect; it should be 'that time' because 'time' is uncountable. The phrase 'for going like exploring' is awkward and corrected to 'exploring'. Parallel structure is maintained with 'exploring' and 'hanging out'.

× Actually, I prefer an exciting holiday because I love exciting things. I don't like something like quiet and peaceful.

✓ Actually, I prefer an exciting holiday because I love exciting things. I don't like things that are quiet and peaceful.

The phrase 'something like quiet and peaceful' is awkward and ungrammatical. It is corrected to 'things that are quiet and peaceful' for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I really like peaceful days, but not in the whole days, because in whole days I usually want to cheer up.

✓ Yes, I really like peaceful days, but not for the whole day, because during the whole day I usually want to cheer up.

'Not in the whole days' is incorrect; it should be 'not for the whole day'. Also, 'in whole days' should be 'during the whole day' to express time correctly.