Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear in parts. Try to make your response more natural and concise by avoiding repeated words and unclear phrases. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific details about what you enjoyed in Manali.

例: I went to Manali with my family during my 12th standard. I really enjoyed the beautiful mountains and the pleasant weather there. Moreover, spending quality time with my near and dear ones made the trip unforgettable and nostalgic for me.

提案: Your answer is good but has some repetition and incomplete sentences. Try to avoid repeating words and finish your thoughts clearly. Use linking words like 'also' or 'furthermore' to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of activities you do during holidays.

例: I definitely love holidays because I get to spend quality time with my near and dear ones. Also, I help my mother with household chores. Furthermore, I enjoy visiting relatives and chatting with them, which makes the holidays special.

提案: Your answer covers good points but has some repetition and ends abruptly. Try to avoid repeating words and complete your sentences. Use linking words like 'also' and 'in addition' to make your answer coherent and provide more specific details about Diwali traditions.

例: I like Diwali the best because everyone in my country spends time with their family and enjoys together. People usually burn fireworks and eat sweets. In addition, many visit religious places to pray, which makes the festival very special.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has repeated phrases. Try to complete your sentences clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'also' and 'besides' to connect your ideas and provide specific activities you do with your family on holidays.

例: On holidays, I prefer to stay at home and play games with my brother. Besides, I help my mother with household work. I also enjoy spending quality time with my father, which strengthens our bond.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and incomplete thoughts. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like 'also' and 'in addition' to connect your points and provide specific reasons why you enjoy staying at home.

例: I definitely love spending most of my time at home because I like helping my mother with her work. Also, I enjoy reading books and listening to music whenever I am at home, which makes my day relaxing.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to avoid repeating phrases and express your ideas more clearly. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to explain your preference and provide specific reasons for liking leisurely holidays.

例: I prefer leisurely holidays at home because I can do many things during my free time. For example, I mostly read books since I love exploring different stories, which makes me feel curious and happy.

提案: Your answer has repeated words and incomplete sentences. Try to avoid repetition and complete your thoughts clearly. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to explain your preference and provide specific reasons why you like peaceful holidays.

例: I prefer peaceful holidays because my college schedule is very hectic. So, I like to stay at home, stay calm, and after resting, I talk to my family members and share my feelings, which helps me relax.

× I still remember when I was in my 12th standard at that time, my family made a trip to Manali.

✓ I still remember when I was in my 12th standard; at that time, my family made a trip to Manali.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence. Adding a semicolon or splitting into two sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× At that time I enjoyed I, I enjoyed there a lot with the near and dear 1.

✓ At that time, I enjoyed myself a lot there with my near and dear ones.

The original sentence has repetition and incorrect pronoun usage ('near and dear 1'). Correcting to 'myself' and 'near and dear ones' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× So I think that that vacation I would I will never ever replace you from my mind.

✓ So I think that vacation I will never ever forget.

The original sentence has incorrect modal verb usage and awkward phrasing. 'Will never ever forget' is the correct future tense expression for memory retention.

× Definitely I love holidays because because at that time I spend quality time with my near and dear ones.

✓ Definitely, I love holidays because at that time I spend quality time with my near and dear ones.

The sentence has repeated 'because' which is redundant. Removing the repetition improves clarity.

× Apart from this, I do all the activities at my home and I help my mother in household chores.

✓ Apart from this, I do all the activities at my home and help my mother with household chores.

The phrase 'help my mother in household chores' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with'. Also, 'I help' can be simplified to 'help' for parallel structure.

× Moreover, I I love to go to the I love to go to the relatives homes and spend spend time with them and do chatting and.

✓ Moreover, I love to go to my relatives' homes, spend time with them, and chat.

The original sentence has repetition and incomplete phrasing. Correcting repetitions and completing the sentence structure makes it grammatically correct.

× On the occasion of Diwali, I think I love that holiday because at that time each and every individual in my country love to stay with their family members and enjoy with them a lot.

✓ On the occasion of Diwali, I think I love that holiday because at that time each and every individual in my country loves to stay with their family members and enjoy with them a lot.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'each and every individual' is singular, so the verb should be 'loves' not 'love'.

× And people usually burn fireworks.

✓ People usually burn firecrackers.

The term 'fireworks' refers to the display, while 'firecrackers' are the items people burn. Using 'firecrackers' is more appropriate here.

× Apart from this they they eat sweets and moreover they love to go to the religious places.

✓ Apart from this, they eat sweets and moreover, they love to go to religious places.

Removed repeated 'they' and unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'religious places' for grammatical correctness.

× On holidays, I do a lot of things I I prefer.

✓ On holidays, I do a lot of things. I prefer

The original sentence is a run-on and has repetition. Splitting into two sentences and removing repetition improves clarity.

× I prefer to stay at home and play games with my brother.

✓ I prefer to stay at home and play games with my brother.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Apart from this, I love to help my mother in the household work and moreover, I love to I love to spend quality time with my father because as he is also he is also.

✓ Apart from this, I love to help my mother with the household work and moreover, I love to spend quality time with my father because he is also...

Removed repeated phrases and corrected preposition 'in' to 'with'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected up to the point given.

× Definitely I love to spend most of the time at my home because my my mother is very my mother is very inclined to all the work.

✓ Definitely, I love to spend most of the time at my home because my mother is very inclined to all the work.

Removed repeated words for clarity and correctness.

× So I always prefer to help her.

✓ So I always prefer to help her.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× And moreover I love to read books.

✓ Moreover, I love to read books.

Starting a sentence with 'And moreover' is redundant and incorrect. Using 'Moreover' alone is sufficient.

× So whenever I whenever I am at home, I read books.

✓ So whenever I am at home, I read books.

Removed repeated phrase for clarity.

× Apart from this, I love to listen to the music so.

✓ Apart from this, I love to listen to music.

Removed unnecessary 'the' before 'music' and incomplete 'so' at the end.

× I prefer leisure time at my home because I think whenever I whenever I'm at home, I do a lot of things in my leisure time.

✓ I prefer leisure time at my home because I think whenever I'm at home, I do a lot of things in my leisure time.

Removed repeated phrase for clarity.

× I mostly read books because I love to, I love to read the books because I just want to grab all the stories and I just have I, I was I always feel more curious.

✓ I mostly read books because I love to read them; I just want to learn all the stories and I always feel more curious.

Removed repeated phrases and corrected awkward expressions for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I I like peaceful holiday because as I'm a student and I I go for college all day so at that time I get my schedule is very hectic.

✓ I like peaceful holidays because as a student, I go to college all day, so my schedule is very hectic.

Removed repeated words, corrected plural 'holiday' to 'holidays', and improved sentence structure for clarity.

× So for that I want to stay at home and I always stay calm and whenever I take rest at that time after that I talk to my family members and share my feelings to.

✓ So for that, I want to stay at home and always stay calm. Whenever I take rest, after that I talk to my family members and share my feelings with them.

The original sentence is a run-on with awkward phrasing. Splitting into sentences and correcting prepositions improves clarity and grammar.