Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured and clear by using complete sentences and linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words like 'and' or 'also'.

例: Last week, I went to Whistler with my husband. We brought some homemade food and enjoyed the snowy mountains. We took many pictures and shared them on social media.

提案: Your answer is good but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to be more concise.

例: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they provide a much-needed break from hectic schedules. They allow me to relax, recharge, and spend quality time with friends and family. Additionally, holidays are perfect for planning picnics or longer trips.

提案: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be specific about the events you enjoy. Avoid awkward phrasing and ensure your sentences are complete.

例: My favourite public holiday in Canada is Canada Day on July 1st. On this day, many events are organized across the country, and I enjoy participating in various celebrations. It is also a great opportunity to experience Canadian traditions.

提案: Try to answer directly with clear sentences and use linking words to explain your ideas. Avoid vague phrases and improve grammar for better clarity.

例: It depends on the length of the holiday. If I have only one day, I prefer to spend it at home with my family. However, if I have four or five days off, I usually plan a trip outside the city, sometimes even abroad.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Be more specific about why you enjoy spending time at home.

例: Yes, I love spending time at home, especially with my husband. Since we are often busy during the day, holidays give us a chance to share our happiness and support each other.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid minor grammatical errors.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because it helps me relax. I enjoy trying my favourite foods at home, going for long walks, and catching up on my favourite TV shows that I usually miss.

提案: Try to answer more directly and clearly. Use linking words to explain your preferences and avoid unclear phrases. Also, improve grammar and sentence structure for better understanding.

例: It depends on the season and weather. In winter, I prefer peaceful holidays because the days are shorter. However, in summer, I enjoy exciting holidays, like going to the beach and enjoying the sunshine.

× In the last week I went to the Whistler and enjoy the time with my husband and we always carried some homemade food and we enjoyed the some mountain which covered with the snow at like some pictures and share on the social media.

✓ In the last week I went to Whistler and enjoyed the time with my husband. We always carried some homemade food and enjoyed some mountains covered with snow, like in pictures, and shared them on social media.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'Whistler' and 'some mountain'. 'Whistler' is a proper noun and does not require 'the'. Also, 'some mountain' should be plural 'some mountains' without 'the'. Additionally, verb tenses were inconsistent and needed correction to past tense to match the context.

× In the last week I went to the Whistler and enjoy the time with my husband and we always carried some homemade food and we enjoyed the some mountain which covered with the snow at like some pictures and share on the social media.

✓ In the last week I went to Whistler and enjoyed the time with my husband. We always carried some homemade food and enjoyed some mountains covered with snow, like in pictures, and shared them on social media.

The verbs 'enjoy' and 'share' should be in the past tense 'enjoyed' and 'shared' to maintain consistency with the past tense context of the sentence.

× Yes, I like holidays because it helps us to take a break from our hectic schedules and we can feel relaxed. It helps us to recharge our battery and we can spend quality time with friends and family members. We can plan any picnic, any long tour and help us.

✓ Yes, I like holidays because they help us take a break from our hectic schedules and feel relaxed. They help us recharge our batteries and spend quality time with friends and family members. We can plan picnics or long tours, and they help us.

The modal verb 'can' is used correctly, but the sentence structure and pronoun usage needed correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy. 'It' should be 'they' to refer to 'holidays' (plural). Also, 'help us' at the end needed clarification.

× In Canada I mostly like public holiday is the Canada Day on the 1st July, because that day the number of function organized and whole country and we can easily enjoy the every type of function events and I can go through the traditions of this country.

✓ In Canada, my favourite public holiday is Canada Day on July 1st because on that day many functions are organized throughout the whole country, and we can easily enjoy every type of event. I can also experience the traditions of this country.

'The Canada Day' is incorrect; 'Canada Day' does not require 'the'. 'The number of function' should be 'many functions'. 'The every type' should be 'every type' without 'the'. Also, sentence structure was improved for clarity.

× Let's depend on the time. If I get a one day, that time I give reference to spend my time with my family at home. And if I get a holiday for a four to five days, then I mostly plan to go outside home. Any out of country.

✓ It depends on the time. If I have one day off, I prefer to spend it with my family at home. If I have a holiday of four to five days, I usually plan to go away from home, sometimes even out of the country.

The original sentences had awkward phrasing and incorrect expressions like 'Let's depend on the time' and 'I give reference'. These were corrected to standard English expressions. 'Any out of country' was unclear and corrected to 'sometimes even out of the country'.

× Yes of course I love to spend my time at home especially with my husband because in the day we have we have to spend time less so. So that's why I love I can share my happiness and sorrow with him.

✓ Yes, of course I love to spend my time at home, especially with my husband, because during the day we have to spend less time together. That's why I love it; I can share my happiness and sorrow with him.

Pronoun usage was unclear and incorrect. 'I love I can share' is incorrect; it was corrected to 'I love it; I can share'. Also, 'we have we have to spend time less so' was corrected for clarity.

× I prefer to a leisurely holiday because I can feel more relaxed, I can try my favorite food at home and I can enjoy my long walk. And for the long time I don't watch my favorite show so I can watch them also.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday because I can feel more relaxed, try my favourite food at home, and enjoy long walks. Also, I haven't watched my favourite shows for a long time, so I can watch them then.

The preposition 'to' after 'prefer' is incorrect and removed. 'My long walk' changed to 'long walks' for natural expression. 'For the long time I don't watch' was corrected to 'I haven't watched... for a long time' to express the intended meaning.

× Oh, does it depend on the situation or the S? Especially season and weather? In the winter time I like to enjoy my peaceful holidays because it's not as mostly effect of the daytime and in the summer time I like to go outside specially on beach and I like to enjoy the sunlight.

✓ Oh, it depends on the situation, especially the season and weather. In winter, I like to enjoy peaceful holidays because the daytime effect is less. In summer, I like to go outside, especially to the beach, and enjoy the sunlight.

The original sentence had unclear conjunctions and phrasing like 'does it depend' and 'not as mostly effect of the daytime'. These were corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness. 'Specially on beach' was corrected to 'especially to the beach'.