Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“a place that feel of beautiful views”应为“a place full of beautiful views”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达。

例: On my last holiday, I went to Yunnan with my mom. I loved it because the scenery was beautiful and the climate was very comfortable. I enjoyed dining there twice, and I would definitely visit again if I have the chance.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，如“not except me”应为“including me”，句子较长且结构混乱。建议使用简洁明了的句子，避免语法错误。

例: Yes, I like holidays because they help me escape from busy work and daily routines. Holidays give me a chance to relax, clear my mind, and recharge for future work.

提案: 回答中存在重复和表达不完整的问题，如“International Day”应为“National Day”，句子未完整表达。建议注意用词准确，避免重复，并完整表达观点。

例: My favorite public holiday is National Day because we have seven days off. This long break allows me to travel or visit my family, which is not possible during shorter holidays.

提案: 回答中用词不当，如“distorted about my job”应为“stressed about my job”，句子结构重复且不够连贯。建议使用准确词汇，丰富句型，并使用连接词。

例: Usually, I stay at home and watch TV to relax because my job can be stressful. However, sometimes I prefer traveling with my friends or family, which is also a great way to unwind.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如“do some ex relaxation”和“Is it is not a perfect option to go outside with?”。建议注意语法准确性，避免口语化错误。

例: Yes, I like spending my holidays at home to relax and clear my mind. Also, the weather in Guangdong is very hot and humid, so staying indoors is more comfortable.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但时态使用不准确，如“If I did have”应为“If I have”。建议注意时态一致性，并适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: It depends. If I have had a busy month at work, I prefer a leisurely holiday at home. But if I have finished all my work, I like to have a busy holiday visiting different places.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，存在语法和词汇错误，如“excited emotion”和“very umm, luxury”。建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁句子表达观点。

例: It depends on my situation. When I am busy at work, I prefer a peaceful holiday to rest. But when I have free time, I enjoy an exciting holiday to have fun and explore new places.

× On my last vacation I went to Yunnan with my mom together.

✓ On my last vacation, I went to Yunnan with my mom.

句中“with my mom together”中的“together”多余，且“mom”是单数，符合语境，无复数错误。此处主要是表达冗余，去掉“together”更自然。

× Yunnan was a place that feel of beautiful views and always a very comfortable climate.

✓ Yunnan was a place that had beautiful views and always a very comfortable climate.

动词“feel”用错，应使用“had”来描述拥有美丽的景色。这里是形容词用法错误，需用正确动词表达。

× And I went to dinner for twice and if I had another chance I would definitely will go there for the third time.

✓ And I went to dinner twice, and if I had another chance, I would definitely go there for the third time.

“for twice”应改为“twice”，且“would definitely will go”中“will”多余，虚拟语气中用“would”即可。

× Definitely people love holiday, not except me and this is the best way to escape from the busy work and the daily routine, how they give you a sense of relaxation and also it can help you to clean up your mind and recharge again and prepare for your next stage of working.

✓ Definitely, people love holidays, me included, and this is the best way to escape from busy work and the daily routine, as they give you a sense of relaxation and also help you clear your mind, recharge, and prepare for your next stage of work.

“holiday”应为复数“holidays”，且“not except me”表达错误，应为“me included”。“busy work”前不加冠词，“clean up your mind”改为“clear your mind”更自然。

× I really like the National Day because in National Day we have 7 days off, which is really, really long because at the normal holiday we only have three or five days off.

✓ I really like National Day because during National Day we have 7 days off, which is really, really long because on normal holidays we only have three or five days off.

“in National Day”应改为“during National Day”，“at the normal holiday”应改为“on normal holidays”，介词使用错误。

× But International Day we have 7 days, seven days.

✓ But on International Day, we have 7 days, seven days.

缺少介词“on”，且“International Day”应加冠词或介词。

× You can, you can go wherever you go and you also can go back home and.

✓ You can go wherever you want, and you can also go back home.

句子结构不完整，“wherever you go”应为“wherever you want”，且句尾“and”多余。

× Normally I will stay at home and just watch some TV and just stay there and clean up my mind because I'm so distorted about my job.

✓ Normally, I will stay at home and just watch some TV and relax my mind because I'm so stressed about my job.

“distorted”用错，应为“stressed”，且“clean up my mind”表达不自然，改为“relax my mind”。

× So once I get a chance, I would like to just stay there and do some relaxation.

✓ So once I get a chance, I would like to just stay there and relax.

“do some relaxation”表达不自然，动词“relax”更合适。

× But sometimes I prefer to go to travel with my friends or my families.

✓ But sometimes I prefer to travel with my friends or my family.

“go to travel”错误，应直接用“travel”，“families”应为单数“family”。

× Yes definitely, just like I mentioned before, once I have the holiday I would like to stay at home and clean up my mind and do some ex relaxation.

✓ Yes, definitely. Just like I mentioned before, once I have a holiday, I would like to stay at home, clear my mind, and relax.

“the holiday”应为不定冠词“a holiday”，“clean up my mind”改为“clear my mind”，“do some ex relaxation”表达错误，改为“relax”。

× And besides the weather in Guangdong province, the South part in China is extremely hot and humid. Is it is not a perfect option to go outside with?

✓ Besides, the weather in Guangdong province, the southern part of China, is extremely hot and humid. It is not a good option to go outside.

“the South part in China”应为“the southern part of China”，“Is it is not a perfect option to go outside with?”句子结构错误，改为“It is not a good option to go outside.”

× If I did have a very busy month to finish my work, I prefer to stay at home and have a leisurely holiday and do nothing.

✓ If I have had a very busy month finishing my work, I prefer to stay at home and have a leisurely holiday and do nothing.

条件句时态错误，应使用现在完成时“have had”表示过去一段时间的经历。

× But once I get all my work done and I have nothing special to plan, I would like to have a busy holiday to go outside and visit some places.

✓ But once I get all my work done and have nothing special planned, I would like to have a busy holiday to go outside and visit some places.

“to plan”应改为“planned”，形容词用法错误。

× Well, I think the answer is quite familiar with the previous one. And the answer is also depends.

✓ Well, I think the answer is quite similar to the previous one, and the answer also depends.

“familiar with”用错，应为“similar to”，“is also depends”语法错误，应为“also depends”。

× Because sometimes when you're very busy at work, you don't have, you don't want to have a very excited emotion because it will exhaust you.

✓ Because sometimes when you're very busy at work, you don't want to have very exciting emotions because it will exhaust you.

“excited emotion”应为“exciting emotions”，形容词和名词搭配错误。

× But sometimes when you are very umm, luxury, you might want a very excited holiday.

✓ But sometimes when you are very relaxed, you might want a very exciting holiday.

“luxury”用错，应为“relaxed”或“comfortable”，“excited holiday”应为“exciting holiday”。