Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

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例: Two months ago, I went to Tashkent, the capital of Uzbekistan, for my holiday. I enjoyed relaxing exercises and had a very pleasant time there.

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例: Yes, I like holidays because they give people a chance to relax, recharge their energy, and improve their well-being.

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例: Navruz is my favorite public holiday in Uzbekistan. Most people enjoy celebrating it every spring.

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例: During Navruz, which is a popular holiday in Asia, we prepare many traditional and local meals to celebrate.

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例: Yes, I like spending my day at home because I enjoy relaxing, watching TV, and reading.

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例: Usually, I am an introvert and prefer quiet holidays alone. I don't like busy holidays because they can be stressful.

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例: I like both exciting and peaceful holidays because sometimes I want adventure, and other times I prefer to relax quietly.

× Two months ago I went to Tashkent, the capital of Uzbekistan, for my holiday and I enjoyed my holiday in my holiday with relaxing exercises and pleasure.

✓ Two months ago I went to Tashkent, the capital of Uzbekistan, for my holiday and I enjoyed my holiday with relaxing exercises and pleasure.

The phrase 'in my holiday' is redundant and incorrect here. The sentence already states 'for my holiday', so repeating 'in my holiday' is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect. Removing the second 'in my holiday' corrects the sentence.

× I like holidays because holidays create some opportunities to people to relax, to retire to their batteries and to refine and something else.

✓ I like holidays because holidays create some opportunities for people to relax, to recharge their batteries, to refine themselves, and more.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'people'; the correct preposition is 'for'. Also, 'retire to their batteries' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'recharge their batteries'. 'Refine and something else' is incomplete; it should be 'refine themselves, and more' or similar to complete the thought.

× Navroji is the best holiday in Uzbekistan, which is I like, which I like and most Uzbek people enjoy in this holiday every every spring.

✓ Navroji is the best holiday in Uzbekistan, which I like, and most Uzbek people enjoy this holiday every spring.

The phrase 'which is I like' is incorrect; the correct form is 'which I like'. Also, 'enjoy in this holiday' is incorrect; the verb 'enjoy' does not require 'in'. The repetition of 'every' is a mistake and should be removed.

× As I mentioned below question, Navarro's is very popular holiday in Asia. Naurus. In Nauru's holiday, we prepare. We prepare many meals, traditional meals, local meals.

✓ As I mentioned in the previous question, Navruz is a very popular holiday in Asia. During Navruz, we prepare many traditional local meals.

The sentence is fragmented and contains spelling errors ('Navarro's' instead of 'Navruz', 'Naurus' instead of 'Navruz'). The phrase 'As I mentioned below question' is incorrect; it should be 'As I mentioned in the previous question'. The repetition of 'We prepare' is unnecessary and should be combined into one sentence.

× Absolutely yes, because I try to spend my day my all day at home because at home I enjoy my pleasurements and watching TV and reading.

✓ Absolutely yes, because I try to spend my whole day at home where I enjoy my pleasures, watching TV, and reading.

The phrase 'my day my all day' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'my whole day'. 'Pleasurements' is not a correct word; 'pleasures' is appropriate. The sentence structure is improved by combining related ideas.

× Usually I'm a introvert person which is like enjoy enjoying alone. I don't prefer busy holidays especially because busy holidays is.

✓ Usually I'm an introverted person who likes enjoying time alone. I don't prefer busy holidays, especially because busy holidays are tiring.

The article 'a' before a vowel sound should be 'an'. 'Which is like enjoy enjoying alone' is incorrect; it should be 'who likes enjoying time alone'. The sentence 'busy holidays is' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'busy holidays are tiring' or similar to complete the thought.

× Both of them, because sometimes I prefer an exciting holiday, sometimes not. Both of them have a useful saddest for me.

✓ Both of them, because sometimes I prefer an exciting holiday, sometimes not. Both of them are useful and satisfying for me.

The phrase 'have a useful saddest' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'are useful and satisfying' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'sometimes not' is informal; it is acceptable here but could be improved for clarity.