Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy chú ý sử dụng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn.

例: My last holiday was two weeks ago. I went to Japan and stayed there for a week. During my trip, I visited many famous places and enjoyed trying my favorite foods.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I'm really love'.

例: I really love holidays because they give me time to relax, improve myself, and spend more time with my family. Also, I can do whatever I want, which makes me feel comfortable.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu sự rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn và cấu trúc câu mạch lạc, tránh lỗi như 'have a money' và 'in together'.

例: I particularly enjoy the Lunar New Year holiday because it is an important cultural tradition in Vietnam. During this holiday, we receive lucky money and spend quality time with our family.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lặp từ và sử dụng thì đúng. Hãy sắp xếp câu hợp lý hơn.

例: I enjoy sleeping during holidays because I have to spend a lot of time studying and doing tasks at school. I don't have much free time on weekends, so holidays are a great chance for me to rest.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi mơ hồ và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp để diễn đạt ý muốn nói.

例: Not really. I like meeting my friends and going out to have fun with them. Of course, I also enjoy staying at home sometimes, but I prefer going out as well.

提案: Bạn nên dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn và câu ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'recommend a leisure holiday for myself'. Hãy dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I work a lot during the week and need time to recharge. A busy holiday would not be comfortable for me.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I prefer a peaceful holiday because I work a lot during the week. It helps me relax and refresh my mind.

× My last holiday was just two weeks ago and I went to Japan and stayed there for a week and we went to a lot of different places, famous places and eat a lot and ate a lot of favorite food.

✓ My last holiday was just two weeks ago and I went to Japan and stayed there for a week. We went to a lot of different famous places, ate a lot, and enjoyed a lot of my favorite food.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present tense 'eat' with past tense context. Since the holiday happened in the past, all verbs describing actions should be in the past tense. Also, the sentence is long and run-on; breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity.

× I'm really love holidays because that the time I can spend to relax, to improve myself, to spend more time with my family or just do something I want to do is so comfortable.

✓ I really love holidays because that is the time I can spend relaxing, improving myself, spending more time with my family, or just doing something I want to do. It is so comfortable.

The phrase 'I'm really love' is incorrect; 'I really love' is correct. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and uses incorrect verb forms after 'can spend'. Using gerunds ('relaxing', 'improving', 'spending', 'doing') after 'can spend' is appropriate. The sentence is split for clarity.

× I particularly enjoy the Lunar New Year holiday the most because it's with our cultural tradition in Vietnam and in that holiday we can have a money or just spend time with family in together.

✓ I particularly enjoy the Lunar New Year holiday the most because it is part of our cultural tradition in Vietnam. During that holiday, we can receive money or just spend time together with family.

The phrase 'it's with our cultural tradition' is incorrect; 'it is part of our cultural tradition' is better. 'Have a money' is incorrect; 'receive money' is correct. 'Spend time with family in together' is incorrect; 'spend time together with family' is correct.

× I particularly enjoy sleeping time because I'm have to spend a lot of time in doing task or study at school and I don't have I don't have time to live in the weekend, so in the holiday I enjoy to sleep.

✓ I particularly enjoy sleeping because I have to spend a lot of time doing tasks or studying at school, and I don't have time to rest on weekends. So during the holiday, I enjoy sleeping.

The phrase 'I'm have to' is incorrect; 'I have to' is correct. 'In doing task or study' should be 'doing tasks or studying'. 'I don't have time to live' is incorrect; likely meant 'rest'. 'Enjoy to sleep' should be 'enjoy sleeping'.

× Not really because I want to meet my friends, go to somewhere to play with them, but not really enjoy myself outside. Of course I'm really love staying at home, but I need to go out too.

✓ Not really, because I want to meet my friends and go somewhere to play with them, but I don't really enjoy being outside. Of course, I really love staying at home, but I need to go out too.

'Go to somewhere' is incorrect; 'go somewhere' is correct. 'Not really enjoy myself outside' is awkward; 'don't really enjoy being outside' is better. 'I'm really love' is incorrect; 'I really love' is correct.

× I really recommend a leisure holiday for myself because at the weekend I need to spend a lot of time to work and I need to recharge for myself. So a busy holiday is not a really good idea for me and it's not really comfortable.

✓ I really recommend a leisurely holiday for myself because on the weekend I need to spend a lot of time working and I need to recharge. So a busy holiday is not a very good idea for me and it's not really comfortable.

'Leisure holiday' should be 'leisurely holiday' to use the correct adjective form. 'Spend a lot of time to work' should be 'spend a lot of time working'. 'Not a really good idea' is better as 'not a very good idea'.

× Just a peaceful holiday is a really good idea for me because I am work a lot during the week so I need to have to go to some places. So really peaceful to relax for myself to help my emotion refresh.

✓ Just a peaceful holiday is a really good idea for me because I work a lot during the week, so I need to go to some places. It is really peaceful to relax and helps refresh my emotions.

'I am work' is incorrect; 'I work' is correct. 'I need to have to go' is redundant; 'I need to go' is correct. The last sentence is fragmented and awkward; rephrased for clarity and correctness.