Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use clear sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, mention the duration clearly and describe the experience with linking words to improve coherence.

例: My family and I went to New Zealand for our summer holiday last year. We spent nearly two weeks there and travelled on a luxury cruise from Melbourne. The views during the trip were absolutely incredible, which made the holiday very memorable.

提案: Focus on clear and natural expression. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why you like holidays.

例: I really enjoy holidays because they help me relax and unwind. During holidays, I can clear my mind and take a break from daily stress, which makes me feel refreshed.

提案: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary to sound more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about why you like Christmas.

例: My favourite public holiday is Christmas because it gives me a warm and joyful feeling. It brings my family and friends together, and we enjoy Christmas parties and spend precious time with each other.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words for coherence. Provide more specific details about activities you do during holidays.

例: During Christmas holidays, we exchange gifts and catch up with each other. These activities make the holiday more memorable and enjoyable.

提案: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words and provide specific reasons why you enjoy staying at home.

例: I really enjoy spending time at home because it helps me relax and feel comfortable. My home is cozy, and I like spending time with my family and friends there.

提案: Clarify your ideas and use correct grammar. Avoid hesitation sounds and be more specific about your preferences. Use linking words to compare leisurely and busy holidays.

例: Nowadays, I prefer a leisurely holiday because it allows me to relax and enjoy the scenery at my own pace. In contrast, busy holidays can be intense and rushed, which I find stressful.

提案: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary for clarity. Use linking words to explain your preference and provide specific reasons.

例: I prefer peaceful holidays because they help me recharge and relieve stress. Since I am an introverted person, I find calm and quiet holidays more enjoyable and energising.

× My family and I went to New Zealand for our summer holiday last year and our trip is less was less 14 days.

✓ My family and I went to New Zealand for our summer holiday last year and our trip was less than 14 days.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'is less was less' which is a tense inconsistency. Since the trip happened in the past, the past tense 'was less than 14 days' is correct. Also, 'less than' is the correct phrase to indicate duration.

× We took the luxury cruises to from Melbourne to New Zealand.

✓ We took a luxury cruise from Melbourne to New Zealand.

The phrase 'to from' is incorrect and redundant. The correct preposition is 'from' to indicate the starting point. Also, 'cruise' is singular and 'a' is the correct article here.

× The view is so incredible.

✓ The view was so incredible.

Since the trip happened in the past, the past tense 'was' should be used to describe the view experienced during the trip.

× I really love holiday holidays makes me feel relaxed and chill during the holidays I can release my mind, release my shirts from the so I really love holiday.

✓ I really love holidays because they make me feel relaxed and chill. During the holidays, I can clear my mind and release my stress, so I really love holidays.

The sentence has singular/plural confusion with 'holiday holidays' and incorrect sentence structure. 'Holidays' should be plural to match the verb 'make'. Also, 'release my shirts from the' is unclear and likely a mistake; 'release my stress' is appropriate. The sentence is split for clarity.

× Christmas can give me a warmest feeling.

✓ Christmas can give me a warm feeling.

'Warmest' is a superlative adjective and should be used when comparing more than two things. Here, 'warm' is the correct adjective to describe the feeling.

× It can gather all my family and friends together, we have some Christmas party and spend some treasure time to each other.

✓ It brings all my family and friends together. We have some Christmas parties and spend some treasured time with each other.

'Gather' is not used with 'can' in this context; 'brings together' is better. 'Christmas party' should be plural if more than one. 'Treasure time' is incorrect; 'treasured time' is correct. Also, 'spend time with each other' is the correct preposition usage.

× During the Christmas, we also have a Christmas holiday.

✓ During Christmas, we also have a Christmas holiday.

The definite article 'the' is not used before 'Christmas' when referring to the holiday period.

× We would exchange some gifts and spend some time to catch up with each other, which make the holiday more memorable.

✓ We exchange some gifts and spend time catching up with each other, which makes the holiday more memorable.

'Spend some time to catch up' is incorrect; the correct form is 'spend time catching up'. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'which'.

× I really like spending time at home.

✓ I really like spending time at home.

This sentence is correct in present tense and needs no correction.

× Staying at home a whole day can make me feel relax and chill.

✓ Staying at home for a whole day can make me feel relaxed and chilled.

'Relax' and 'chill' are verbs or informal adjectives; the correct past participle adjectives are 'relaxed' and 'chilled' to describe feelings.

× Also, my home is quite cozy with my family and friends we can exchange.

✓ Also, my home is quite cozy, and my family and friends can visit and spend time together.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'We can exchange' is incomplete; likely intended to say 'exchange visits' or 'spend time together'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Nowadays I prefer luxury holiday, umm not say holiday give me some relax and so step to enjoy the view or schedule.

✓ Nowadays, I prefer luxury holidays because they help me relax and enjoy the view and schedule at a slow pace.

'Luxury holiday' should be plural 'luxury holidays' to match general preference. The original sentence is fragmented and unclear; rephrased for clarity and correct quantifier use.

× But busy holiday tend to very intense and hurry trip.

✓ But busy holidays tend to be very intense and hurried trips.

'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays' to match 'tend'. 'Hurry trip' is incorrect; 'hurried trip' is the correct adjective form.

× I prefer peaceful holiday too.

✓ I prefer peaceful holidays too.

'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays' to match the general preference.

× Maybe holiday means to recharge my mind, release my stress during the holidays I can get more energy from that.

✓ Maybe holidays mean to recharge my mind and release my stress. During the holidays, I can get more energy from that.

'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays' to match the general meaning. Also, the sentence is split for clarity and correct verb agreement.

× And also I'm obviously is interval person so I prefer peaceful holiday.

✓ Also, I am obviously an introverted person, so I prefer peaceful holidays.

'Interval person' is incorrect; likely meant 'introverted person'. 'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.