Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly state the location and activities, avoid filler phrases like 'do you know', and use correct prepositions. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: I went to Turkey with my family for our last holiday. We mainly went shopping and spent some relaxing time together.

提案: Your answer is too long and contains filler phrases like 'do you know' and some unclear pronouns. Try to make your points clear and concise, and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I love holidays because they give me a chance to relax and forget about daily problems. Also, I enjoy spending quality time with my family and loved ones.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid filler words and try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details.

例: My favorite public holiday is New Year because we visit our elders, receive gifts from our parents, and enjoy delicious food during family gatherings.

提案: Your answer has some grammar issues and awkward phrasing. Try to use clear sentences and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Since my parents love traveling, we usually take trips during holidays. Sometimes we travel within the country, especially to the northern regions, and other times we go abroad to experience different cultures.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains filler phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct prepositions. Also, keep your sentences concise and coherent.

例: As an introvert, I enjoy spending time at home. However, I also understand the importance of going outside occasionally, even for small errands like driving or shopping.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains many filler words. Try to give a clear preference with reasons, avoid fillers, and complete your thoughts.

例: Currently, I prefer busy holidays because as an adult, I enjoy spending time with friends and doing various activities to make the most of my free time.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structure. Avoid repeating phrases like 'you know' and try to express your ideas more fluently.

例: I enjoy both exciting and peaceful holidays, but if I had to choose, I would prefer a peaceful holiday because it's a time to rest and relax.

× I went to the travel with my family to the Turkey and it was nice.

✓ I went traveling with my family to Turkey and it was nice.

The phrase 'went to the travel' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'went traveling' or 'went on a trip'. Also, 'to the Turkey' is incorrect because country names like Turkey do not take the definite article 'the'.

× It was like, do you know we just go for shopping and having some leisure time together.

✓ It was like, you know, we just went shopping and had some leisure time together.

The verb forms should be consistent in tense. 'Go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'went shopping'. Also, 'having' should be 'had' to match the past tense narrative.

× Actually, I love holidays because do you know it's the only time you can live on your own and have the best time and just rest And you know your mind is in the rest and peace and you don't have to think about many problem or issues in your daily life.

✓ Actually, I love holidays because, you know, it's the only time you can live on your own, have the best time, and just rest. And, you know, your mind is at rest and peace, and you don't have to think about many problems or issues in your daily life.

The sentence needed punctuation for clarity. 'Mind is in the rest and peace' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'mind is at rest and peace'. Also, 'problem' should be plural 'problems' to match 'many'.

× And he can just have fun time with your family and the people you love and.

✓ And you can just have fun time with your family and the people you love.

The pronoun 'he' is inconsistent with 'your family'; it should be 'you' to maintain the subject's perspective.

× I can't say our new year is my favorite public holiday because we go for in like visiting elder people and gather together and do you know our parents give us some souvenir and gifts.

✓ I can say our New Year is my favorite public holiday because we visit elder people and gather together, and, you know, our parents give us some souvenirs and gifts.

The phrase 'go for in like visiting' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'we visit'. Also, 'souvenir' should be plural 'souvenirs' to match 'some'.

× So it's very and you have also delicious foods and can enjoy the family gathering and visit.

✓ So it's very nice, and you also have delicious food and can enjoy the family gathering and visits.

The phrase 'very and you have also delicious foods' is incomplete and awkward. 'Foods' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'food' is correct. Added 'nice' to complete the thought.

× As my parents are a great traveler so we usually go for a trip and usually we kind of like to overland to north side of the country or we go to the overseas to see different countries and different cultures.

✓ As my parents are great travelers, we usually go on trips, and we kind of like to travel overland to the north side of the country or go overseas to see different countries and cultures.

'Parents' is plural, so 'traveler' should be 'travelers'. 'Go for a trip' should be 'go on trips'. 'Overland to north side' should be 'travel overland to the north side'. 'Go to the overseas' should be 'go overseas'.

× As I am an introvert person, I like to spend time on the home.

✓ As I am an introverted person, I like to spend time at home.

The phrase 'spend time on the home' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at home'. Also, 'introvert person' should be 'introverted person'.

× But do you know kinda I can understand to be much at home and I have to go outside even for like simplest and the smallest thing but I have to go and like driving or buy something really small.

✓ But, you know, I kind of understand staying at home a lot, and I have to go outside even for the simplest and smallest things, like driving or buying something small.

The sentence was awkward and had incorrect conjunctions and phrasing. 'Kinda' should be 'kind of'. 'Understand to be much at home' is incorrect; 'understand staying at home a lot' is better. 'Like simplest and the smallest thing' should be 'the simplest and smallest things'.

× I can say for now, I prefer to have a like busy holiday, you know, because it's just sort of my adulthood.

✓ I can say for now, I prefer to have a busy holiday, you know, because it's just part of my adulthood.

The phrase 'a like busy holiday' is incorrect; it should be 'a busy holiday'. 'Sort of my adulthood' is better expressed as 'part of my adulthood'.

× So I prefer to have a holiday with my friends and having fun and like, you know, too busy do different things because maybe.

✓ So I prefer to have a holiday with my friends, have fun, and, you know, be busy doing different things.

The sentence had incorrect verb forms and conjunctions. 'Having fun' should be parallel with 'have fun'. 'Too busy do different things' should be 'be busy doing different things'. The sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring.

× In my opinion, the best holiday is a holiday that you have the exciting thing and also you have the peaceful part as well.

✓ In my opinion, the best holiday is one where you have exciting experiences and also a peaceful part as well.

'Have the exciting thing' is awkward; 'have exciting experiences' is better. Also, 'a holiday that you have' is better expressed as 'one where you have'.

× I like both of them but if I have to choose one, I can say the peaceful holiday because you know, holiday is just the time you have to rest and peace.

✓ I like both of them, but if I have to choose one, I would say a peaceful holiday because, you know, a holiday is just a time to rest and find peace.

'The peaceful holiday' should be 'a peaceful holiday' as it is a general statement. 'Holiday is just the time you have to rest and peace' is incorrect; it should be 'a time to rest and find peace'.