Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够连贯，句子结构不完整，且有语法错误。建议回答时先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体细节支持，避免语无伦次。

例: Last holiday, I traveled to Hong Kong with my mother and sibling because I had to take the SAT exam there. After the exam, we explored some famous bubble tea restaurants, which made the trip very memorable.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子不完整。建议先直接回答喜欢假期，然后用具体原因和细节支持，避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, I really like holidays because I study from Monday to Friday and have a lot of homework. Holidays help me relieve stress and recharge my energy.

提案: 回答中有语法错误且表达不完整。建议先明确回答喜欢哪个节日，再具体说明原因，使用连词使句子更流畅。

例: My favorite public holiday is the National Day of China because it lasts about seven days. This long break allows us to rest and travel freely, which is very enjoyable.

提案: 回答较好，内容具体且连贯。可以注意避免数字“7”出现错误，表达更准确。

例: On holidays, I usually go out with my friends or do fun activities. If the break is long enough, I like to visit a foreign city or even another country to explore famous local attractions, which helps me relax and experience new cultures.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清楚的问题。建议先直接回答喜欢在家，然后用具体原因支持，注意语法和句子完整性。

例: Yes, I like spending time at home because I am an introverted person. Staying alone helps me recharge since I find it difficult to interact with others outside.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，语法有误。建议先明确表达偏好，然后用具体原因支持，避免重复和语法错误。

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I am busy with work from Monday to Friday. Therefore, I try to relax and avoid planning many activities during holidays.

提案: 回答思路清晰，但语法和表达有待改进。建议用更准确的时态和表达方式，使句子更自然。

例: It depends on how I feel. When I am tired, I prefer a peaceful holiday. But if I have a lot of energy, I choose an exciting holiday.

× Last holiday I traveled to Hong Kong with my mother and sibling because I was having a umm SAT exam.

✓ Last holiday I traveled to Hong Kong with my mother and siblings because I was taking the SAT exam.

这里“sibling”应使用复数形式“siblings”，因为通常指不止一个兄弟姐妹。同时，“was having”用于描述考试不太合适，应该用“was taking”表示参加考试。

× And after the exam we plan to explore some restaurant in Hong Kong which is famous in bubble tea and it was a memorable trip because we got to explore in.

✓ And after the exam we planned to explore some restaurants in Hong Kong which are famous for bubble tea and it was a memorable trip because we got to explore them.

“restaurant”应为复数“restaurants”，因为指多个餐厅；“plan”时态应与上下文一致，改为过去式“planned”；“which is”应改为“which are”，因为指复数餐厅；“famous in”应改为“famous for”；句尾“explore in”不完整，应补充宾语“them”。

× Hi yes I really like holidays because due to the theory schedule of my work day which I need to study from Monday to Friday every day and also having a lot of homework which having a holiday really helped me to umm relieve my stress and also.

✓ Hi yes I really like holidays because due to the tight schedule of my workdays, I need to study from Monday to Friday every day and also have a lot of homework, so having a holiday really helps me to relieve my stress.

“theory schedule”应为“tight schedule”；“work day”应为复数“workdays”；“having a lot of homework which having a holiday”结构混乱，应拆分为“have a lot of homework, so having a holiday”；时态应保持一致，改为一般现在时“helps”。

× So one of the public holiday I like it best is the national holiday of China because it can umm take around 7 days to for us to rest and also we can travel to everywhere we want in umm sufficient umm day to go outside, which is not really.

✓ So one of the public holidays I like best is the national holiday of China because it can take around 7 days for us to rest and also we can travel everywhere we want with sufficient days to go outside, which is really nice.

“public holiday”应为复数“public holidays”；“like it best”中“it”多余，应去掉；“travel to everywhere”应为“travel everywhere”；“sufficient umm day”应为复数“sufficient days”；句尾“which is not really”不完整，改为“which is really nice”。

× On holiday, I usually go out with my friends or enjoy some fun activities.

✓ On holidays, I usually go out with my friends or enjoy some fun activities.

“On holiday”通常指假期整体，若指多次假期应用复数“On holidays”。

× If the break is long enough, I'd like to visit a foreign city or 7 or even another country to explore famous local attractions which help me relax and experience new cultures.

✓ If the break is long enough, I'd like to visit a foreign city or even another country to explore famous local attractions which help me relax and experience new cultures.

“or 7”无意义，应删除。

× Yes, I really like spend my time in home because I think staying individually really helped me to recharge because I'm kind of introverted person so I'm not I'm interested going outside and talk interact with other because it's really difficult for me.

✓ Yes, I really like to spend my time at home because I think staying alone really helps me to recharge because I'm kind of an introverted person so I'm not interested in going outside and interacting with others because it's really difficult for me.

“like spend”应为“like to spend”；“in home”应为“at home”；“staying individually”表达不自然，应为“staying alone”；“helped”时态应为一般现在时“helps”；“I'm not I'm interested”重复，应删去一个“I'm”；“interested going”应为“interested in going”；“talk interact with other”应为“interacting with others”。

× I prefer leisurely holiday because umm because I was busy on the work day from Monday to Tuesday to Friday, so on the weekday I try to like make my life more relaxed.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday because I am busy on workdays from Monday to Friday, so on weekdays I try to make my life more relaxed.

“leisurely holiday”前应加冠词“a”；“was busy”时态应为一般现在时“am busy”；“on the work day from Monday to Tuesday to Friday”表达不清，应改为“on workdays from Monday to Friday”；“on the weekday”应为复数“on weekdays”；“try to like make”应简化为“try to make”。

× So it depends on my emotion that day. So when I was feel tired, I will find some peaceful holiday to do.

✓ So it depends on my emotion that day. So when I feel tired, I will find some peaceful holiday to do.

“was feel”时态错误，应为一般现在时“feel”，因为描述习惯或常态。

× But if I was I'm having a lot of energy, I I will go with umm, exciting holiday.

✓ But if I have a lot of energy, I will go on an exciting holiday.

“was I'm having”结构错误，应为“have”；“go with umm, exciting holiday”应为“go on an exciting holiday”。