Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks clarity and contains some redundancy and grammatical errors. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating family members unnecessarily, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with sentence structure and vocabulary to sound more natural.

例: I went to Vancouver for a short holiday this summer with my family, including my husband and parents. We stayed at my aunt and uncle's house, which was very comfortable. During our stay, we enjoyed the pleasant weather and explored the beautiful city. One highlight was visiting Whistler, a nearby hill station, which was truly mesmerizing.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like 'definitely' twice and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons for liking holidays.

例: Yes, I really enjoy holidays because they help me relax and recharge after a busy workweek. I usually take trips during summer and winter to visit new places, which makes my holidays exciting and refreshing.

提案: Your answer has good content but is somewhat disorganized and contains grammatical errors. Avoid vague phrases like 'at all' and improve sentence flow with linking words. Provide clearer reasons and examples to support your preference.

例: My favorite public holiday is Christmas because I enjoy spending time with my family decorating the Christmas tree. Additionally, I appreciate that it is a paid holiday, which allows me to relax without worrying about work. I also love playing in the snow by making snowballs and building a snowman during winter.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your response logically, use correct verb tenses, and avoid hesitation sounds. Provide specific examples with clear descriptions.

例: On holidays, my husband and I usually plan trips to visit different cities. For example, last year we went to Toronto and visited Niagara Falls, which was amazing. This year, we are planning to visit Montevideo to enjoy its beautiful mountain views.

提案: Your answer is relevant but repetitive and has some grammatical errors. Avoid repeating 'definitely' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your activities at home.

例: Yes, after a long workweek, I prefer to stay at home during the weekends. I usually complete household chores and also dedicate time to studying for my French course, which helps me improve my language skills.

提案: Your answer communicates your preference but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear expressions like 'busy scared person.' Use linking words and clearer vocabulary to express your ideas naturally.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I usually have a very busy schedule at work and home. Taking time to relax helps me feel calm and enjoy inner peace during my breaks.

提案: Your answer shows flexibility but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide a more natural response.

例: It depends on the situation. If my husband or family members can join me, I prefer an exciting holiday where we can travel together. However, if they are unavailable, I would rather stay at home and enjoy a peaceful holiday.

× We had aunt, uncle and aunt.

✓ We had an aunt and an uncle.

The original sentence incorrectly omits articles before 'aunt' and 'uncle' and repeats 'aunt' unnecessarily. The correct form uses 'an' before singular nouns starting with a vowel sound and lists the relatives properly.

× I work full time five days in weekday to refresh my mind and to stress out from all other responsibilities and tensions.

✓ I work full time five days a week to refresh my mind and to relieve stress from all other responsibilities and tensions.

The phrase 'in weekday' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'five days a week'. Also, 'stress out' is informal and should be replaced with 'relieve stress' for clarity and correctness.

× I enjoy with my family by making a Christmas tree at all.

✓ I enjoy spending time with my family by making a Christmas tree.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund ('spending'), and 'at all' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'with my family' needs to be connected properly to the verb.

× Enjoy making snowballs and a snowman in the winter.

✓ I enjoy making snowballs and building a snowman in the winter.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it a fragment. Adding 'I enjoy' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Every holidays I always make plan with my husband to go out and visit another city.

✓ Every holiday, I always make plans with my husband to go out and visit another city.

The phrase 'Every holidays' is incorrect; 'Every holiday' is singular. Also, 'make plan' should be pluralized to 'make plans' to be grammatically correct.

× For instance, in last year I I went to Toronto.

✓ For instance, last year I went to Toronto.

The phrase 'in last year' is incorrect; 'last year' is sufficient. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error.

× We visit the Niagara Falls.

✓ We visited Niagara Falls.

The verb tense should be past ('visited') to match the past time reference. Also, 'Niagara Falls' does not require 'the' before it.

× Uh, this year, never This year we. Decorum and add Montevideo. Fascinating Mountain View.

✓ This year, we went to Decorum and Montevideo. The mountain views were fascinating.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. They need to be restructured into complete sentences with proper subjects and verbs.

× Definitely after a long working hours in the weekday, I would definitely recommend myself to stay at home on weekends.

✓ Definitely, after long working hours during the week, I would definitely recommend staying at home on weekends.

'Recommend myself' is incorrect; one cannot recommend oneself in this context. Also, 'a long working hours' is incorrect; 'long working hours' is correct. 'In the weekday' should be 'during the week'.

× I also took a French course for which I have to study during weekends.

✓ I am also taking a French course for which I have to study during weekends.

The tense should be present continuous ('am taking') to indicate an ongoing activity, matching 'have to study'.

× I always prefer to be a relaxed holiday.

✓ I always prefer to have a relaxing holiday.

'Relaxed' describes a person, not a holiday. 'Relaxing' is the correct adjective to describe the holiday experience.

× I am very busy scared person.

✓ I am a very busy and stressed person.

'Scared' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'stressed'. Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'very busy'.

× I always have a busy schedule of at work.

✓ I always have a busy schedule at work.

The phrase 'of at work' is incorrect; 'at work' alone is sufficient.

× I always recommend myself to stay relaxed and calm so that I can enjoy the internal peace of life.

✓ I always advise myself to stay relaxed and calm so that I can enjoy inner peace in life.

'Recommend myself' is incorrect; 'advise myself' or 'encourage myself' is better. Also, 'internal peace of life' is better expressed as 'inner peace in life'.

× It always depending on the situation.

✓ It always depends on the situation.

The verb 'depending' should be in the simple present tense 'depends' to agree with the subject 'It'.

× if I have somebody such as my family member, my husband to go on a holiday then I would definitely plan a holiday.

✓ If I have someone such as a family member or my husband to go on a holiday with, then I would definitely plan a holiday.

'Somebody' is less appropriate than 'someone' here, and the sentence needs 'with' to indicate accompaniment. Also, 'my family member' should be 'a family member'.

× if my husband doesn't have a holiday for to go for a trip, I would recommended to stay at home.

✓ If my husband doesn't have a holiday to go on a trip, I would recommend staying at home.

'For to go' is incorrect; 'to go on a trip' is correct. 'Would recommended' should be 'would recommend'. Also, 'recommend staying' is the correct structure.