Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm và từ vựng không phù hợp. Hãy: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn nêu địa điểm và thời gian; 2) Sử dụng chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tên địa điểm, hoạt động bạn làm); 3) Dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp đúng (thì quá khứ) và tránh từ sai/không phù hợp; 4) Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu và dùng liên từ khi cần để nối ý.

例: Last summer I went to Hainan Island with my family. It was a wonderful place with fresh air and clear blue sea. We spent our days swimming and walking along the beach, which made me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Ý chính rõ nhưng dùng từ sai (ví dụ 'genetic') và cấu trúc rời rạc. Hãy: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích lý do rõ ràng; 2) Dùng từ phù hợp (relaxed, refreshed, escape); 3) Viết các câu ngắn, mạch lạc và thêm ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn thích làm trong kỳ nghỉ.

例: Yes, I really like holidays because they help me relax and forget about stress. For example, I usually hang out with friends or go to the beach, which refreshes me after a busy period.

提案: Câu trả lời hợp lý nhưng lộn xộn và có nhiều từ không đúng (ví dụ 'spill the tea' không phù hợp ở ngữ cảnh này). Hãy: 1) Nói rõ ngày lễ và lý do; 2) Nêu một hoặc hai hoạt động cụ thể (ví dụ: ăn tối, trao quà, chơi trò chơi gia đình); 3) Dùng liên từ để nối ý và tránh lặp từ, giữ 2–4 câu.

例: My favourite public holiday is Christmas because I can spend quality time with my family. We usually have a special dinner, exchange presents and play board games together, which makes the day very warm and memorable.

提案: Câu trả lời mơ hồ, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ không đúng. Hãy: 1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề nêu hoạt động chính; 2) Liệt kê 2–3 hoạt động cụ thể với chi tiết (ví dụ: shopping, cooking, visiting relatives); 3) Dùng thì phù hợp và kết hợp liên từ để câu mạch lạc.

例: On holidays I usually spend time with my parents. We often go shopping for essentials and sometimes buy decorations for the house. We also visit relatives or watch movies together at home.

提案: Ý rõ ràng nhưng cấu trúc câu và ngữ pháp sai (ví dụ 'considering myself as a household person', 'when I staying'). Hãy: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp; 2) Sử dụng cấu trúc chính xác để giải thích lý do; 3) Cho ví dụ cụ thể về những việc bạn làm ở nhà; 4) Giữ câu ngắn, tránh lặp.

例: Yes, I prefer spending time at home because it helps me relax. For example, I usually read books, cook simple meals and listen to music, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

提案: Câu rất khó hiểu, nhiều lỗi nghiêm trọng khiến ý chính không rõ. Hãy: 1) Trả lời rõ ràng (leisurely/busy) với một câu chủ đề; 2) Giải thích lý do bằng 1–2 câu đơn giản và cụ thể; 3) Tránh dùng từ không đúng, kiểm soát thì và cú pháp; 4) Thêm một ví dụ ngắn nếu cần.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I need time to recover after a stressful period. For instance, I enjoy slow mornings, sightseeing at a relaxed pace and having long meals with family.

提案: Ý chính (thích yên tĩnh vì là người hướng nội) tốt nhưng dùng từ lộn xộn và câu thiếu trôi chảy. Hãy: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp; 2) Giải thích lý do ngắn gọn; 3) Nêu ví dụ hoạt động cụ thể cho kỳ nghỉ yên tĩnh; 4) Dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc và giới hạn dưới 5 câu.

例: I would prefer a peaceful holiday because I'm an introvert and enjoy quiet time. For example, I like staying in a small guesthouse with my partner, reading, walking by the sea and having relaxed meals together.

× Well, in the last summer I went to book Taobao bed with my family.

✓ Well, last summer I went to a beach resort with my family.

The phrase 'in the last summer' is unnatural; use 'last summer'. 'book Taobao bed' is incorrect vocabulary and word order — likely meant 'booked a beach resort' or 'went to a beach resort'. Use simple past 'went' to match the time reference. Suggestion: say 'Last summer I went to a beach resort with my family.'

× It's such a wonderful place. It with fresh air and blue sea make me feel so beautiful and and genetic.

✓ It was such a wonderful place. The fresh air and the blue sea made me feel so relaxed and refreshed.

Tense should match narrative past: use 'was' and 'made' (past tense). 'It with fresh air and blue sea' is incorrect sentence structure and missing articles ('the'). 'Beautiful and genetic' is wrong word choice; likely intended 'relaxed' or 'refreshed'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb order and correct adjectives.

× Definitely yes. Holiday just make me feel like I'm a genetic girl throughout the bad time in my life, so hang out with my friend in holiday is the best way to finish my boring after a long day.

✓ Definitely yes. Holidays just make me feel like I'm a happier person during difficult times in my life, so hanging out with my friends on holiday is the best way to get rid of boredom after a long day.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'Holiday just make' should be 'Holidays just make' (plural) and 'make me feel' is present simple. Use gerund 'hanging out' for activities. Use plural 'friends' and preposition 'on holiday' or 'during holidays'. 'Finish my boring' is ungrammatical; use 'get rid of boredom' or 'shake off boredom'.

× I will say that is Christmas is the best time of the year for me because I can spend time with my family and do some family oriented activity like build, spill the tea with my friends or talk, uh, they talk with my family.

✓ I would say Christmas is the best time of the year for me because I can spend time with my family and do family-oriented activities like having meals together, chatting with friends, or talking with my relatives.

Redundant words: 'I will say that is Christmas is' should be 'I would say Christmas is'. Use plural 'activities' and correct collocations: 'family-oriented' and 'chatting' or 'talking'. 'Spill the tea' is informal slang and not appropriate here. Clarify who is talking with whom.

× Well, I do have many activity with my parents, so I often go to malls with them to buy some necessary items and buy some colorful the correct item from my house. Yeah.

✓ Well, I do many activities with my parents, so I often go to malls with them to buy necessary items and sometimes buy colorful decorations for our home.

'Many activity' should be 'many activities' (plural). Phrase 'buy some necessary items' is OK but redundant 'buy' repeated; rephrase. 'Colorful the correct item from my house' is ungrammatical — likely meant 'colorful decorations for our home'. Use clearer vocabulary and plural nouns.

× Yes, I'm considering myself as a household person because I feel like when I staying at home and spend time for myself, it's just uh, the way to unwind myself and make me feel like I'm can enjoy my time rather than spending time with uh.

✓ Yes, I consider myself a home person because when I stay at home and spend time on myself, it's a way to unwind and it makes me feel that I can enjoy my time rather than going out.

Use simple present 'I consider' instead of 'I'm considering myself as'. 'When I staying' should be 'when I stay'. Use 'spend time on myself' or 'spend time by myself'. 'Make me feel like I'm can' is incorrect: use 'it makes me feel that I can'. Remove filler words.

× Personally I refer literally holiday rather than busy holiday because I just want to myself can and why after a headache schedule so less holiday is just the way to make me feel UN unwise.

✓ Personally I prefer a relaxing holiday rather than a busy one because I want to recover after a hectic schedule, so having fewer activities helps me feel less stressed.

'Refer literally holiday' is incorrect — use 'prefer a relaxing holiday'. 'I just want to myself can and why' is ungrammatical; clarify intention: 'I want to recover after a hectic schedule'. 'UN unwise' is meaningless here; use 'less stressed' or 'recharged'.

× Well, we'll say that umm I'm a big fan of B4 holidays because I'm introvert person so you can know that I will spend time with myself or my girlfriend to do everything that we like.

✓ Well, I'd say that I'm a big fan of quiet holidays because I'm an introverted person, so I usually spend time alone or with my girlfriend doing things we enjoy.

'We'll say' should be 'I'd say'. 'B4 holidays' is unclear; use 'quiet' or 'peaceful' holidays. 'Introvert person' should be 'an introverted person'. Use natural phrasing: 'spend time alone or with my girlfriend doing things we enjoy'.