Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and use correct tense and article. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief details (when, who with, what you did) using linking words like "with" or "to". Avoid unclear phrases like "that Monday lake."

例: Last holiday I went to Monday Lake with my family. We stayed there for two days and went swimming and had a picnic by the shore.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use plural/singular consistently and reduce repetition. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example."

例: Yes, I really like holidays because they give me a break from work and time to relax. For example, I often read books or meet friends on holidays, which helps me recharge.

提案: Answer directly with the name of the holiday and give one or two clear reasons or a memory. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases. Use linking words like "because" or "mainly because."

例: My favourite public holiday is Eid al-Fitr because I can visit my relatives and we celebrate with special food. I also enjoy the festive atmosphere and traditional music.

提案: Start with a general topic sentence about your usual holiday activities, then give specific examples for Eid al-Fitr. Use correct verb tense and clearer sentence structure, and link ideas with words like "for example" or "during."

例: On holidays I usually visit family and relax at home. For example, during Eid al-Fitr I go to my village where we share special meals, visit relatives and enjoy time together.

提案: Avoid inappropriate remarks and answer politely. Begin with a clear opinion, then explain when and why you might stay at home. Use linking words like "but" and "sometimes" and correct verb forms.

例: Generally I prefer to go out on holidays, but sometimes when I feel tired or bored I like to stay at home and rest. For instance, I might watch movies or read a book to relax.

提案: Provide a clear opinion and give a specific reason using better grammar and linking words. Replace filler sounds and correct singular/plural agreement. One or two examples will help.

例: I prefer busy holidays because they keep me active and entertained. For example, I enjoy sightseeing and trying local activities so I don't get bored.

提案: Answer directly and then give a brief reason or example. Use complete sentence structure and link reason with "because."

例: I would prefer a peaceful holiday because I want to relax and recover from stress. For example, I enjoy quiet beaches or countryside retreats where I can read and sleep well.

× In last holiday I went to that Monday lake.

✓ Last holiday I went to Monday Lake.

Incorrect use of demonstrative 'that' and article; 'There is/are' not needed. Use 'Last holiday' or 'Last holiday, I went to Monday Lake.' Also capitalize proper noun 'Monday Lake' and omit 'that'. Suggestion: say 'Last holiday I went to Monday Lake.' or 'During my last holiday, I went to Monday Lake.'

× I like holiday because holiday is a day.

✓ I like holidays because a holiday is a day off.

Countable noun 'holiday' needs plural or article. Use plural 'holidays' for general preference, and 'a holiday' when defining. Also 'day off' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: 'I like holidays because a holiday is a day off.'

× This day we don't have any work to do, any job like this day we are totally free.

✓ On that day we don't have any work to do; we are totally free.

Use preposition 'on' for days. Repetition and punctuation fix improves clarity. 'Any job like this day' is incorrect phrasing; use 'we don't have any work to do' and 'we are totally free.' Suggestion: 'On that day we don't have any work to do; we are totally free.'

× I think it's a public holiday. It was, it is like. It will Ajah and Eid al Fitr holiday. It was good. I like.

✓ I think my favorite public holidays are Ashura and Eid al-Fitr. They are very good; I like them.

Multiple issues: article and noun forms. Use plural 'holidays' for multiple items. Proper names must be correct ('Ashura' or 'Ajah' unclear; I used 'Ashura'). Use 'Eid al-Fitr' spelling and plural pronoun 'them'. Avoid mixing tenses. Suggestion: 'I think my favorite public holidays are Ashura and Eid al-Fitr. I enjoy them.'

× If I talk about a Eid UL Fitr holiday I went to in my village and we enjoy our holiday, our eat day and we meet each other, everyone.

✓ If I talk about Eid al-Fitr, I go to my village and we enjoy the holiday: we eat special food and meet everyone.

Tense consistency: use present simple for habitual actions. Article error 'a Eid' should be 'Eid'. 'Our eat day' is incorrect; use 'we eat special food'. Clarify sequence and use commas appropriately. Suggestion: 'If I talk about Eid al-Fitr, I go to my village and we enjoy the holiday: we eat special food and meet everyone.'

× You are silly. In my holiday I didn't like it, but when I was feeling bored, uh, feeling upset, that time I think uh spent spend my day at home is good.

✓ No, I don't like staying at home during holidays, but when I feel bored or upset, I think spending the day at home is good.

Pronoun 'You are silly' is inappropriate reply; replace with 'No' or 'I don't'. Tense and verb form: use present simple 'I don't like' for general preference, 'when I feel' for present habitual feelings, and gerund 'spending' after 'think'. Remove repeated words and filler. Suggestion: 'I don't like staying at home during holidays, but when I feel bored or upset, I think spending the day at home is good.'

× I prefer busy holidays. Uh, well, because uh, busy day our not feeling boring. That's why I think it's like.

✓ I prefer busy holidays because busy days are not boring.

Subject-verb agreement: 'busy day' should be plural 'busy days' to match general statement, and verb 'are' is needed. 'Our' is incorrect here. Remove fillers and unclear ending. Suggestion: 'I prefer busy holidays because busy days are not boring.'

× I prefer is a peaceful holiday.

✓ I prefer a peaceful holiday.

Unnecessary verb 'is' inserted. For preferences use 'I prefer a peaceful holiday' or 'I prefer peaceful holidays.' Ensure correct article usage. Suggestion: 'I prefer a peaceful holiday.'