Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors; include one specific detail (activity or sight) to enrich the answer. Use a clear topic sentence then one supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'very beautiful village').

例: I spent my last holiday in Khandruk, a Gurung village in Nepal. I went with my family and we stayed for two nights in a small hotel. We hiked to a nearby viewpoint to watch the sunset and learned about local Gurung traditions at a community house.

提案: Correct grammar and reduce redundancy. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix pronouns and plural forms.

例: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they help me recharge and relax. For example, I can spend quality time with my family and catch up on sleep and hobbies.

提案: Be precise: name one festival and give specific reasons and a short example. Avoid filler sounds (MMM) and overlong sentences; use linking words to organize the answer.

例: My favorite public holiday is Tihar, one of Nepal’s biggest festivals. During Tihar we have nearly a month of celebrations, and I enjoy visiting relatives and taking part in traditional rituals and feasts with friends.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific typical activities with linking words. Remove filler words like 'Umm' and correct phrasing (e.g., 'relaxing myself' -> 'relaxing').

例: On holidays I usually spend time with friends or go shopping. Alternatively, I sometimes stay home to watch movies and relax, which helps me unwind.

提案: Complete the sentence and correct grammar ('families' -> 'family', 'relatives house' -> 'relatives' house'). Provide a reason and one example. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I enjoy spending a day at home because it helps me relax and catch up with my family. For example, I often use that time to cook with my parents or call relatives I haven't spoken to recently.

提案: Make a clear, grammatical topic sentence and explain why with one specific detail. Avoid fragmented sentences and repetitions. Use linking words to clarify contrast if needed.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because it gives me time to rest and recover from work. For instance, I like slow mornings and light walks instead of tightly scheduled activities.

提案: Good balance of preference and contrast; improve grammar and conciseness ('recharge myself' -> 'recharge'). Replace vague phrase 'it's an adventurous' with a noun or phrase. Keep to two to three sentences.

例: I usually prefer peaceful holidays because they calm my mind and help me recharge. However, occasionally I enjoy an exciting holiday for the adventure, such as rafting or trekking, which breaks the routine.

× For my last holiday, I visited a village called Khandruk. It's a Gurung village. I went there with my family and it was very beautiful village and we spent around 2-3 days in a hotel.

✓ For my last holiday, I visited a village called Khandruk, a Gurung village. I went there with my family; it was a very beautiful village and we spent around two to three days in a hotel.

The original contains run-on sentences and article omission. Combine related ideas and add the article 'a' before 'very beautiful village'. Write numbers in words for formality. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to avoid run-on structure. Grammar problem type id:26

× Yes, I like holidays because it is a time where I can regenerate my myself and spend some quality time with my families and.

✓ Yes, I like holidays because they are a time when I can recharge myself and spend some quality time with my family.

Multiple issues: 'it is a time' should be 'they are a time' because 'holidays' is plural (subject-verb agreement), 'where' is better replaced by 'when' for time, 'regenerate my myself' is incorrect reflexive/pronoun use—use 'recharge myself' or just 'recharge', and 'families' should be singular 'family' in this context. Also remove trailing 'and'. Grammar problem type id:15

× Among all the public holidays, mainly in our country, MMM, we celebrate Thosai and Tihar which is the biggest festival of Nepal where we get around one month of holiday and it is the best time because we get to celebrate it with our friends and families.

✓ Among public holidays in our country, we mainly celebrate Dashain and Tihar, which are the biggest festivals in Nepal; we get around one month of holidays and it is the best time because we celebrate with our friends and family.

Problems: plural/singular and quantifier issues—'which is the biggest festival' should be plural 'which are the biggest festivals' because two festivals are mentioned. 'One month of holiday' is better as 'one month of holidays'. 'Families' should be 'family' when referring collectively. Also unclear 'MMM' likely filler and 'Thosai' corrected to 'Dashain' if intended; if not, keep original. Restructure sentence for clarity. Grammar problem type id:14

× On holidays I normally spend time with my friends or I do shopping. Umm, sometimes I just sit in my home watching some movies or just relaxing myself.

✓ On holidays I normally spend time with my friends or go shopping. Sometimes I just stay at home, watch movies, or relax.

Preposition errors: use 'go shopping' rather than 'do shopping', and 'stay at home' rather than 'sit in my home'. 'Relaxing myself' is nonstandard; use 'relax'. Streamline the sentence and remove filler. Grammar problem type id:11

× Yes, I do like to spend my time at home because it gives me some time to catch up with my families and sometimes I visit my relatives house just to.

✓ Yes, I like to spend time at home because it gives me a chance to catch up with my family, and sometimes I visit my relatives' houses.

Use singular 'family' for collective reference and 'relatives' houses' requires possessive apostrophe and plural 'houses' if visiting more than one relative, or 'relative's house' for one. Remove unnecessary 'do' for naturalness and complete the trailing clause. Grammar problem type id:12

× I think I prefer leisurely holiday because it's holidays, the only day that I get to relax and if I'm busy during that day, and I don't think it will be. Compared to a holiday.

✓ I think I prefer a leisurely holiday because it's the only time I get to relax; if I'm busy then, I don't enjoy it as much as I would a holiday.

Original is fragmented and repetitive. Add article 'a' before 'leisurely holiday', replace 'holidays' with 'the only time', and combine clauses coherently. Remove awkward fragments 'and I don't think it will be. Compared to a holiday.' Grammar problem type id:26

× Normally I prefer a peaceful holiday because it helps me to calm my mind and to recharge myself. However, sometimes I do like exciting holidays because it's something that we don't do every day, so it's an adventurous.

✓ Normally I prefer a peaceful holiday because it helps me calm my mind and recharge. However, sometimes I like exciting holidays because they are something we don't do every day, so they are adventurous.

Article and pronoun agreement issues: 'it's an adventurous' is incorrect; use 'they are adventurous' or 'it's an adventure'. Also 'helps me to calm' can be simplified to 'helps me calm'. Avoid unnecessary reflexive 'myself' and ensure plural agreement when talking about 'holidays'. Grammar problem type id:22