Holidays— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь отвечать полными предложениями, соблюдая грамматику и порядок слов. Дайте чёткую тему в первом предложении, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали (куда именно вы ходили, с кем, почему). Избегайте лишних пауз и неясных слов, заменяйте разговорные «uh» паузами и связками.

例: I spent my last holiday shopping at a mall. I visited several stores to buy new cosmetics and some fast food, and I went with a friend so we had a pleasant day together.

提案: Улучшите грамматику и связность: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте конкретные причины с связками (because, so, therefore). Избегайте дословного перевода с русского и исправьте порядок слов в конструкциях про чувства.

例: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they help me feel relaxed and calm. I usually spend time walking with friends and family, which makes the break more enjoyable.

提案: Отвечайте по существу: назовите конкретный праздник или период и объясните почему. Избегайте повторов (например «in summer» несколько раз) и избегайте вопросов в конце. Используйте связки (for example, also) для перечисления деятельности.

例: My favourite holiday is the summer break because I can meet my friends every day and visit the beach or the mountains. It is also nice not to have school, so I have more free time to relax.

提案: Сформулируйте простое начало («Usually I…») и следите за формой глаголов. Давайте 2–3 конкретных занятий и добавляйте краткое объяснение, чтобы звучать естественнее.

例: Usually I walk with my friends or watch new movies. Sometimes I also try new restaurants or visit nearby places to relax.

提案: Используйте правильные времена и ясные структуры: ответьте прямо, затем добавьте детали. Можно объяснить, почему вы предпочитаете оставаться дома или что именно готовите/смотрите.

例: Yes, I like spending a day at home sometimes. When I stay in, I often watch movies or cook simple meals like pasta or stir-fry.

提案: Чётко выберите один вариант и поясните выбор. Избегайте разговорных сокращений («wanna») и неточных фраз («make a center»). Используйте связки (because, so) и приведите 2–3 конкретных примера спокойных занятий.

例: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I like to relax and recharge. For example, I enjoy going to the park with friends, eating casual food, and taking long walks to feel calm.

提案: Выберите одно предпочтение или скажите, что вы сочетаете оба, и объясните, как именно. Уберите неясные выражения («press groups») и используйте ясные примеры с логическими связками (however, but).

例: I prefer a mix of exciting and peaceful holidays. For instance, I enjoy going to parties and walking with friends, but I also like visiting the mountains to relax and appreciate nature.

× Was whole day I was in magazine tour and to buy new cosmetics and uh, fast food.

✓ I spent the whole day shopping at the mall to buy new cosmetics and fast food.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verb usage. Use 'I spent the whole day' to indicate duration, 'shopping at the mall' as the activity, and 'to buy new cosmetics and fast food' as the purpose. Improve by placing subject before verb and using correct verb phrases.

× Yeah, I like holidays because in holiday I feel myself relaxed and calm and I also can walk with my friends, family.

✓ Yes, I like holidays because during holidays I feel relaxed and calm and I can also go for walks with my friends and family.

Use 'during holidays' or 'on holiday' instead of 'in holiday'. 'Feel myself relaxed' is incorrect; use 'feel relaxed'. 'Walk with' should be 'go for walks with' for natural phrasing. Maintain present simple tense for general preferences.

× I like summer holiday because in summer I can walk with my friends every day, I can go to the beach, I can go to the mountains in summer. Don't have school?

✓ I like the summer holidays because in summer I can walk with my friends every day, go to the beach, and go to the mountains. There is no school then.

Use definite article 'the' with 'summer holidays' in this context. Combine repeated clauses for fluency and use 'There is no school' to state absence of school (there be issue and article correction). The question 'Don't have school?' is informal and ungrammatical; replace with a full sentence.

× Usually I what to do in holidays is walk with my friends or watching new movies.

✓ Usually what I do on holidays is walk with my friends or watch new movies.

Incorrect word order 'I what to do' should be 'what I do'. Use parallel verb forms: 'walk' and 'watch' (both base forms) after 'is'. Use 'on holidays' or 'during holidays'.

× Yes, if I spent my day at home, I often watch movies or cook.

✓ Yes, if I spend my day at home, I often watch movies or cook.

The conditional structure requires present simple 'If I spend' for habitual conditional; using past 'spent' is incorrect here. Keep present simple in both clauses for general habits.

× I prefer leisurely holiday because I don't like bad holidays.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday because I don't like stressful holidays.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'leisurely holiday'. 'Bad holidays' is vague; use a more appropriate adjective like 'stressful' to convey meaning.

× I want go with my friends to the park or make a center, eat fast food.

✓ I want to go with my friends to the park, hang out at a center, and eat fast food.

After 'want' use the infinitive 'to go'. 'Make a center' is unclear; 'hang out at a center' is a more natural expression. Use parallel verb forms connected by commas.

× I wanna feel myself calm and relax.

✓ I want to feel calm and relaxed.

Do not use 'myself' here; 'feel calm' is correct. Also use 'relaxed' (adjective) to describe state. Avoid colloquial 'wanna' in formal responses.

× I want enjoy life.

✓ I want to enjoy life.

After 'want' use the infinitive 'to enjoy'. Missing 'to' caused incorrect sentence structure.

× I think I prefer exciting holiday and peaceful holiday because I like walk with my family, friends, go to the parties, go to the press groups, but I like to go to the mountains and see nature.

✓ I think I prefer both exciting and peaceful holidays because I like walking with my family and friends, going to parties and group events, but I also enjoy going to the mountains and seeing nature.

Use plural 'holidays' and 'both' to show preference for two types. Use gerunds for parallel activities: 'walking', 'going'. 'Press groups' is unclear; 'group events' or 'meetups' is better. Ensure parallel structure and natural word choice.