Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct vocabulary. Also, keep your answer concise and coherent by using linking words.

例: Yes, I keep many plants at home because they make the environment fresh and pleasant. In my garden, I have both small and large plants, which add a lot of greenery. I really enjoy taking care of them as they brighten my day.

提案: Your answer has many unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and supporting details with correct vocabulary. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: When I was young, I used to grow roses because I loved their beautiful colours and pleasant smell. There are many varieties of roses, and I enjoyed taking care of them in my garden.

提案: Your answer is quite confusing and lacks clarity. Try to give a simple and direct response with clear supporting details. Use correct grammar and vocabulary, and organise your ideas logically with linking words.

例: I don't know much about growing plants, but I understand that they need fresh air and regular watering. When I was young, I used to water my plants every two days to help them grow well.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and provide clear reasons or examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid unnecessary information.

例: I am not sure, but I think Chinese people might give plants as gifts because they care about the environment. Giving plants can be a meaningful and eco-friendly present.

× And plants are also useful and their plans are very organized, organized at my garden because I just love plans.

✓ And plants are also useful and my plants are very organized in my garden because I just love plants.

The word 'plans' is incorrectly used instead of 'plants'. 'Plans' refers to intentions or arrangements, whereas 'plants' refers to living organisms. Also, 'their plans' is incorrect here; it should be 'my plants' to refer to the plants in the garden.

× I have small plants and big plants also and I have so greenery in my garden.

✓ I have small plants and big plants also and I have so much greenery in my garden.

The phrase 'so greenery' is incorrect because 'greenery' is an uncountable noun and requires a quantifier like 'much'.

× When I was young I grew up lunch of rules because when I was young I just love roses.

✓ When I was young I grew a bunch of roses because I just loved roses.

The phrase 'grew up lunch of rules' is incorrect. It should be 'grew a bunch of roses'. Also, 'love' should be in past tense 'loved' to match the past time frame.

× Roses are sold, smells good and I have so many varieties of France nowadays.

✓ Roses are sold, smell good and I have so many varieties of roses nowadays.

The verb 'smells' should be 'smell' to agree with the plural subject 'roses'. Also, 'varieties of France' is incorrect; it should be 'varieties of roses'.

× But I used to do grow a rose because I just love the smell after EUR and also the color are so refreshing and I made a colors from the Rose so I grow the roses.

✓ But I used to grow roses because I just loved the smell and also the colors are so refreshing. I made colors from the roses so I grew the roses.

The phrase 'used to do grow' is incorrect; it should be 'used to grow'. 'Love' should be 'loved' to match past tense. 'Color are' should be 'colors are' to agree in number. 'Grow' should be 'grew' in past tense.

× Not much but I know about the plants are also need Arctic air because plants are a small so when I grow up plan when I was young I give them a water in now in our two days like anyone daizan but there are not much going but our when I was start to give of water in one day it wants to.

✓ Not much but I know that plants also need fresh air because plants are small. When I grew plants when I was young, I gave them water every two days like anyone does, but there was not much growth. Then I started to give water every day and it wanted to grow.

The sentence has multiple errors including incorrect prepositions ('in now in our two days' should be 'every two days'), incorrect verb forms ('grow up plan' should be 'grew plants'), and unclear phrases. Correct prepositions and verb tenses improve clarity.

× I don't know much about it because I'm Indian, but I know that the Chinese people's are also a good and they are so conscious about the environment.

✓ I don't know much about it because I'm Indian, but I know that Chinese people are also good and they are very conscious about the environment.

'Chinese people's' is incorrect; it should be 'Chinese people' without the possessive apostrophe. Also, 'a good' is incorrect; 'good' is an adjective and does not need an article here.

× So maybe as a gift of the environment they give a gift as a plant.

✓ So maybe as a gift for the environment, they give a plant as a gift.

The phrase 'gift of the environment' is incorrect; it should be 'gift for the environment'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by reordering for clarity.

× So that's depends on the person to forgive take you.

✓ So that depends on the person to forgive or take you.

The phrase 'that's depends' is incorrect; it should be 'that depends'. Also, 'forgive take you' is unclear and likely meant to be 'give or take you' or 'give or take'. The sentence needs clarification.