Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct vocabulary. For example, say "I don't keep plants at home because I find it inconvenient." Then briefly explain if needed.

例: No, I don't keep plants at home because I find it inconvenient. However, when I lived with my parents, I used to take care of some plants occasionally.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Use a clear topic sentence and provide specific details with correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases like "I don't know how they could." Instead, describe the plants clearly and use linking words to organize your answer.

例: When I was a child, I grew some flowers that were pink and yellow. They were quite large compared to me, and I enjoyed watching them bloom every spring.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, avoid repeating 'just' and use correct phrases like 'water the plants' and 'keep them in the sun.'

例: I don't know much about professional plant care, but I understand the basics. For example, I know that plants need to be watered regularly and placed in sunlight to grow well.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and use correct sentence structure. Also, provide specific information or examples if possible. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I don't know much about Chinese culture, but I have heard that in many Asian countries, people don't usually give flowers as gifts. In contrast, giving flowers is a popular tradition in Russia.

× I consider this way some kind of inconvenient for me and not sweets.

✓ I consider this way somewhat inconvenient for me and not sweet.

The word 'inconvenient' is an adjective and should be preceded by an adverb like 'somewhat' to modify it correctly. Also, 'sweets' is a noun, but the intended meaning is likely the adjective 'sweet' to describe the experience. Using the correct adjective form improves clarity.

× So actually when I lived in my home time I maintained some plans, but I don't.

✓ So actually when I lived at home, I maintained some plants, but I don't now.

The word 'plans' is incorrect; the intended word is 'plants'. Also, 'in my home time' is awkward; 'at home' is the correct prepositional phrase. Adding 'now' clarifies the contrast with the past.

× I am not engaged in keeping plans at my home

✓ I am not engaged in keeping plants at my home

The word 'plans' is a plural noun meaning intentions or arrangements, but the context is about living plants. The correct plural noun is 'plants'.

× When I was a child I had some flowers, to be honest I don't know how they could but they were pink and a bit yellow and they were a large to comparison with me little.

✓ When I was a child, I had some flowers. To be honest, I don't know how they grew, but they were pink and a bit yellow, and they were large compared to me when I was little.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'could' is incorrect here; 'grew' is the correct past tense verb. 'A large to comparison with me little' is ungrammatical; it should be 'large compared to me when I was little.' Proper punctuation and sentence division improve clarity.

× I just need to feed some water for plants and keep on the sun.

✓ I just need to give some water to the plants and keep them in the sun.

The verb 'feed' is incorrect for watering plants; 'give' or 'water' is appropriate. The preposition 'for' should be 'to' when giving something to someone or something. Also, 'keep on the sun' should be 'keep them in the sun' to indicate location.

× Actually I don't have a lot of knowledge about their culture, but I heard that Asian country don't send flowers as a gift but in Russian is very popular phenomenon for gifting a flower for them.

✓ Actually, I don't have a lot of knowledge about their culture, but I heard that Asian countries don't send flowers as gifts, whereas in Russia it is a very popular phenomenon to give flowers as gifts.

'Asian country' should be plural 'Asian countries' to match the plural verb 'don't'. 'Russian' should be 'Russia' as the country name. 'Gifting a flower for them' is awkward; 'to give flowers as gifts' is clearer. Also, 'flowers as gifts' is plural to match general usage.