Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答内容完整，但句子较长且有些重复。建议使用更简洁的句子结构，并适当使用连接词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: No, I don't keep plants at home because I live in a small apartment in a big city. Moreover, I am quite busy during workdays, so I don't have much time to take care of them.

提案: 回答较好，但可以避免使用口头语“umm”，并且可以用更连贯的连接词来增强表达的逻辑性。

例: I didn't grow plants at home when I was young. However, in my science and biology classes, we kept small plants in the classroom to observe their growth, which I found very interesting.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达上的重复，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达。

例: I have some basic theoretical knowledge about growing plants from biology classes, but I don't have much practical experience.

提案: 回答中有多处口头语“umm”，且句子不够连贯。建议减少口头语，使用连接词使句子更流畅，并补充具体细节。

例: Yes, of course. Nowadays, plants have become a practical gift because they can be used as decorations in offices or homes. Moreover, they help relax our eyes after busy work.

× I didn't keep planting at home when I was young either, but I remember in science and biology class umm, we did keep some small plants in the classroom to observe them growing and it was interesting.

✓ I didn't keep plants at home when I was young either, but I remember in science and biology class umm, we did keep some small plants in the classroom to observe them growing and it was interesting.

The word 'planting' is a gerund or verb form and is incorrectly used here instead of the plural noun 'plants'. The sentence talks about keeping plants, so the plural noun 'plants' is appropriate.

× I just know some basic and theoretical knowledge about growing a plant that I learned from biology classes, but I really don't have many hands on experience with them with growing them.

✓ I just know some basic and theoretical knowledge about growing plants that I learned from biology classes, but I really don't have much hands-on experience with growing them.

The phrase 'hands on experience' should be hyphenated as 'hands-on experience' to function as a compound adjective. Also, 'many' is used with countable nouns, but 'experience' is uncountable, so 'much' is correct. The phrase 'with them with growing them' is redundant; 'with growing them' suffices.

× Because umm, they are. They help relax our eyes from the busy work.

✓ Because umm, they help relax our eyes from the busy work.

The sentence 'Because umm, they are.' is incomplete and lacks a verb or complement, making it a sentence fragment. It should be combined with the following sentence to form a complete thought.