Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details about the types of plants you keep. Avoid repeating words and aim for clarity.

例: Yes, I keep several plants at home, including flowering plants and small indoor trees. They add beauty and fresh air to my living space.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence and then specify which plants you grew. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: When I was young, I grew many plants, mostly vegetables and fruit plants like tomatoes and strawberries, in my home garden.

提案: Your answer contains unclear phrases and some incorrect vocabulary. Use correct terms related to planting and organize your answer logically with linking words.

例: Yes, I know some basic tips for growing plants. First, you need to plant the seed in soil, then water it regularly, and ensure it gets enough sunlight to grow well.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding hesitation and using more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, Chinese people often give plants as gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries. For example, the money plant is a popular choice because it symbolizes good luck.

× Well, they're at various types of plants that I keep at home, like the plants of plants.

✓ Well, there are various types of plants that I keep at home, like different kinds of plants.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'they're' (they are) instead of 'there are' to indicate existence. Also, 'the plants of plants' is unclear and redundant. The correction uses 'there are' to correctly express existence and clarifies the phrase.

× When I was a young, I was young that time I planted so many plants, but mostly I grow plants, uh, related to vegetables and fruits at my home.

✓ When I was young, I planted many plants, but mostly I grew plants related to vegetables and fruits at my home.

The phrase 'a young' is incorrect; 'young' is an adjective and does not need an article here. Also, 'I was young that time' is redundant and awkward. The verb 'grow' should be in past tense 'grew' to match the past time frame. The correction removes unnecessary words and fixes verb tense.

× Yes, I know some tips and tricks to group dance, like we have to take a seat and we have to sew that seed in the soil and we have to give the water so in that way we can grow some plants.

✓ Yes, I know some tips and tricks to grow plants, like we have to take a seat and we have to sow the seed in the soil and we have to give water, so in that way we can grow some plants.

The phrase 'to group dance' is incorrect; it should be 'to grow plants'. Also, 'sew' (to stitch) is incorrect; the correct verb is 'sow' (to plant seeds). 'Give the water' is unnatural; 'give water' is correct. The correction fixes these verb errors and improves clarity.

× Chinese people send some plants as a gift to others.

✓ Chinese people send plants as gifts to others.

The phrase 'some plants as a gift' is awkward because 'plants' is plural but 'a gift' is singular. It is better to say 'plants as gifts' to match plural nouns. The correction aligns quantifiers and nouns properly.