Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Avoid redundancy and ensure the answer is natural and concise. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words.

例: I keep artificial plants at home because I don't have much time to care for real ones. However, when I was a child, my favorite hobby was growing plants in my yard.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Be specific and concise in your description.

例: I grew a sunflower plant in our garden with my father. He helped me a lot because he had extensive knowledge of seeds and crops, having been a farmer in his youth.

提案: Clarify unclear phrases and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make the answer coherent. Keep sentences natural and grammatically correct.

例: I have some basic knowledge about growing plants. However, if I need to grow one, I usually search on YouTube and Google for guidance. Therefore, I prefer to keep artificial plants on my balcony.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to contrast ideas clearly. Provide a complete and natural answer with specific details.

例: Giving plants as gifts is not very popular in my country nowadays because people prefer expensive gifts to show their status. However, older generations still believe that plants make meaningful and memorable presents.

× Nike artificial plants at home because I don't have a really much time to take care about the real plants.

✓ I have artificial plants at home because I don't have much time to take care of real plants.

The phrase 'a really much time' is incorrect. 'Much' is used without 'a' and 'really' is unnecessary here. Also, the preposition 'about' after 'take care' is incorrect; it should be 'take care of'. The sentence is corrected to use proper quantifier and preposition.

× When I was kid I my favorite hobby was growing plants in my yard.

✓ When I was a kid, my favorite hobby was growing plants in my yard.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'kid' and has an extra pronoun 'I'. Adding 'a' and removing 'I' corrects the sentence structure.

× No, I grew a sunflower plant plant in our world garden with my father.

✓ No, I grew a sunflower plant in our world garden with my father.

The word 'plant' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× My father helped me a lot because he had a vast knowledge of plant seeds and crops.

✓ My father helped me a lot because he had vast knowledge of plant seeds and crops.

The article 'a' before 'vast knowledge' is unnecessary because 'knowledge' is an uncountable noun. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× He used to be a farmer in at at his younger age, so he helped me to grow sunflower plant.

✓ He used to be a farmer at his younger age, so he helped me to grow a sunflower plant.

The phrase 'in at at' is incorrect; 'at' is the correct preposition here. Also, 'sunflower plant' needs an article 'a' before it. Correcting these fixes the sentence.

× Did you get your nest?

✓ Do you get my point?

The sentence 'Did you get your nest?' is unclear and likely a mishearing or miswriting. The intended phrase is probably 'Do you get my point?' which fits the context better.

× I have a little knowledge of growing plants.

✓ I have little knowledge of growing plants.

Using 'a little' implies some knowledge, which may be acceptable, but 'little' without 'a' emphasizes limited knowledge, which fits better here. Both can be correct depending on intended meaning.

× However in case if I have to grow a plant, I always search on YouTube and Google just to grow a plant.

✓ However, if I have to grow a plant, I always search on YouTube and Google to learn how to grow it.

The phrase 'in case if' is redundant; 'if' alone suffices. Also, the sentence is improved by clarifying the purpose of searching online.

× That's why I always buy artificial plants to keep at my at my balcony in house.

✓ That's why I always buy artificial plants to keep on my balcony at home.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect before 'balcony'; 'on' is correct. Also, 'at my at my' is repeated and 'in house' should be 'at home'.

× Giving plants as a gift is is not popular in my country these days.

✓ Giving plants as gifts is not popular in my country these days.

The phrase 'is is' is a repetition error. Also, 'a gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match the general statement.

× People prefer to get or or give expensive gifts to show their standard and lifestyle to the others.

✓ People prefer to get or give expensive gifts to show their status and lifestyle to others.

The phrase 'or or' is repeated. Also, 'standard' is better replaced with 'status' in this context. 'The others' should be 'others'.

× However, old people in my country still believe by giving plants as a gift would be the best memory for the.

✓ However, old people in my country still believe that giving plants as gifts would be the best memory for them.

The sentence is incomplete and missing 'that' after 'believe'. Also, 'as a gift' should be plural 'as gifts' to match general meaning. 'For the' is incomplete and should be 'for them'.