Plants— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and use correct grammar. Add one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') to make your answer coherent and within five sentences.

例: No, I don't keep plants at home because I don't have enough time or patience to care for them. For example, I work long hours and often travel, so I can't water them regularly. Also, I worry about the cost of buying and replacing plants if they die.

提案: Start with a clear, grammatical topic sentence and give one or two specific details or a short story. Avoid repetition and use correct verb tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'apple tree' not 'apples card').

例: When I was young, I grew an apple tree in our backyard. My mother helped me plant it and I watered it every weekend, so I remember watching the apples appear each autumn.

提案: Give a concise, structured answer: state a general rule then support with specific details using linking words such as 'for example' or 'also'. Use correct grammar and avoid repetitions.

例: Yes, I know some basics about growing plants. They need regular watering and plenty of sunlight, and you should use good soil and fertiliser. Also, you need patience and a routine, for example watering every three days and pruning when necessary.

提案: Answer directly and include specific examples and a brief reason. Use linking words ('for example', 'because') and avoid hesitations and vague language.

例: Yes, many Chinese people give plants as gifts, especially during festivals. For example, potted flowers or lucky plants like orchids and money trees are popular because they symbolise prosperity and good luck.

× No, I'm not keep playing because I, I think, uh, take care of that. Need more time and, uh, money and the patience. I think I'm not enough patient to, uh, take, take care of them, uh, you know.

✓ No, I don't keep plants because I think taking care of them needs more time, money, and patience. I don't have enough patience to take care of them.

Original contains incorrect use of continuous 'I'm not keep' and fragmented clauses. Use the simple present negative 'I don't keep' to state a habitual fact (Verb + base form after do). Use the gerund 'taking care' after 'think' to describe the activity. Combine fragments into complete sentences and change 'not enough patient' to 'don't have enough patience' for correct adjective/noun usage and word order.

× When I when I were young, when I was young, I, uh, grow 1 apples. I ask my mother the apples card.

✓ When I was young, I grew apples. I asked my mother for the apple seeds.

Use past tense 'was' not 'were' with singular subject 'I' and use past tense verb 'grew' for past habitual action. 'Grow 1 apples' is ungrammatical; use plural 'apples' and 'grew'. 'I ask my mother the apples card' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely intended 'asked my mother for the apple seeds'—use 'asked' (past) and 'for' to indicate request.

× I need plant, plant, need more, need enough water and sunshine, uh and uh. Patient people need to regular time to take care of them.

✓ Plants need enough water and sunshine. Patient people need to spend regular time taking care of them.

Use plural 'plants' for general statements (singular/plural issue). 'Need to regular time' is incorrect; use 'spend regular time' or 'set aside regular time' and the gerund 'taking care' after verbs that describe activities. 'Patient' should be 'patient people' is fine but the sentence needed rewording for clarity.

× Yes, definitely. I think people, Chinese people prefer to plan to, to plant uh, such as vegetable, umm, beautiful flower or, or something, umm.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think Chinese people prefer to give plants as gifts, such as vegetables or beautiful flowers.

Original misuses pronouns/phrasing 'prefer to plan to, to plant' and has redundancy. Replace with clear verb phrase 'prefer to give plants as gifts'. Use plural nouns 'vegetables' and 'flowers' for general categories and remove filler words. This corrects pronoun/reference and collocation errors.