Stories— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Избегайте повторений и грамматических ошибок. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и добавьте конкретные детали.

例: Yes, I loved stories during my childhood. My parents often bought me dolls and toys, which inspired many imaginative stories. Thinking back on those times makes me feel nostalgic and emotional.

提案: Ответ неясен и неполный. Следует отвечать прямо на вопрос, использовать правильную грамматику и связующие слова, чтобы сделать ответ логичным и понятным.

例: I prefer reading stories because it allows me to imagine the scenes in my own way. However, some people enjoy listening to stories as it can be more relaxing.

提案: Ответ слишком короткий и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует использовать полные предложения, объяснять и добавлять детали, используя связующие слова.

例: Yes, I loved writing stories and poems when I was a child. It was one of my favorite hobbies because it helped me express my creativity.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие формулировки. Следует использовать правильную грамматику, связующие слова и конкретные детали для ясности.

例: When I was a child, I enjoyed writing horror stories. I was fascinated by scary tales and often spent entire days imagining new plots.

× In my childhood life I have many stories and memories.

✓ In my childhood, I had many stories and memories.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'have' in present tense instead of past tense 'had' to match the past time frame 'childhood'. Also, 'childhood life' is unnatural; 'childhood' alone is sufficient.

× My parents buy me some dolls and toys and I play with dolls and toys.

✓ My parents bought me some dolls and toys and I played with them.

The verbs 'buy' and 'play' should be in past tense 'bought' and 'played' to match the past time frame. Also, 'play with dolls and toys' is repetitive; 'played with them' is clearer.

× And if I remember my childhood life, I want to cry.

✓ And when I remember my childhood, I want to cry.

The phrase 'if I remember' is better replaced with 'when I remember' to indicate a habitual action. Also, 'childhood life' is unnatural; 'childhood' suffices.

× I think some people like listen musics or reading stories.

✓ I think some people like listening to music or reading stories.

After 'like', the verb should be in '-ing' form: 'listening'. Also, 'musics' is uncountable and should be 'music'. Preposition 'to' is needed after 'listening'.

× I think if people love listen music, I think prefer is the people listening to stories if people love reading book, I think they.

✓ I think if people love listening to music, they prefer it, and if people love reading books, they prefer that.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correct sentence structure and verb forms are needed. 'Listen' should be 'listening to', 'book' should be plural 'books', and pronouns should be clear.

× Yes I love them and I write some stories and poems and they was my hobbies and.

✓ Yes, I loved them and I wrote some stories and poems; they were my hobbies.

The verbs 'love' and 'write' should be in past tense 'loved' and 'wrote' to match the past time frame. 'They was' is incorrect; it should be 'they were'.

× Yeah.

✓ Yes.

'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is more appropriate in formal speaking test context.

× In my childhood time I love writing about horror stories and thinking about all day.

✓ In my childhood, I loved writing horror stories and thinking about them all day.

The verbs 'love' and 'thinking' should be in past tense 'loved' and 'thinking about them' to match the past time frame. 'Thinking about all day' is incomplete; 'thinking about them all day' is clearer.

× In my 5 years I say a horror and I write about them.

✓ When I was 5 years old, I saw a horror story and wrote about it.

'Say' should be past tense 'saw'. 'In my 5 years' is unnatural; 'When I was 5 years old' is correct. 'Them' should be 'it' referring to 'a horror story'. 'Write' should be past tense 'wrote'.