Stories— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意时态、单复数和冠词的使用，回答要更自然和简洁，并补充具体细节来支持观点。可以把主题句和细节分开，用连接词使表达连贯。避免不必要的词（如“uh”）并把描述变得更具体（例如为什么这些故事让你兴奋）。

例: Yes, I loved stories as a child, especially Barbie and Disney cartoons. They excited me because of the bright visuals and imaginative worlds, which made me curious about how beautiful life could be.

提案: 注意语法（动词形式和介词用法），语气要礼貌自然。用更清楚的原因和连接词来解释偏好，并提供一个具体例子说明何时听故事更合适。避免极端词如“refuse”。

例: I prefer listening to stories rather than reading them because I often get sleepy when I read long passages in English. For example, I enjoy audiobooks on my commute because they keep me engaged without straining my eyes.

提案: 注意时态一致性和动词形式（过去式），并使故事描述更连贯具体。用一到两句话概述故事情节，再说明写作的动机或感受，使用连接词让句子流畅。

例: Yes, I wrote a story when I was a child about a frog who tried to catch a butterfly. He couldn't chase it at first, so he trained and tried different ways to improve himself, and the story taught me about perseverance.

提案: 用更自然的搭配和词汇表达喜好，并提供具体原因或例子说明为何喜欢恐怖故事。注意形容词和名词搭配（如 ‘excited’ 或 ‘a sense of thrill’），并保持句子简洁。

例: I enjoy horror stories because they give me a thrill and spark my imagination. For example, a well-written ghost story can make ordinary places seem mysterious and keep me thinking about the plot long after I finish.

× I love story in my childhood, especially, uh, Barbie and cartoons in Disney.

✓ I loved stories in my childhood, especially Barbie and Disney cartoons.

原句中“story”應為複數“stories”，因為說的是童年期間喜歡多個故事；此外將時態改為過去式（loved）更符合“in my childhood（在我童年）”的時間背景；“cartoons in Disney” 語序不自然，應為“Disney cartoons（迪士尼卡通）”。建议：注意名詞是否表示多個項目用複數，並使動詞時態與時間狀語一致。

× I love them because it brings me a lot of sense of excitement in eye stimulation.

✓ I loved them because they brought me a strong sense of excitement and visual stimulation.

原句人稱和數不一致：主語為複數“them”，應用複數動詞“brought”。“a lot of sense of excitement” 表達冗長且不自然，改為“a strong sense of excitement”；“in eye stimulation” 用法錯誤，應為“visual stimulation（視覺刺激）”。建议：主謂數一致，使用更自然的短語表達感受。

× I wonder that how beautiful the world is from the picture of the.

✓ I wondered how beautiful the world looked from those pictures.

原句結構混亂：‘I wonder that how...’ 不正確，應為‘I wonder how...’或過去時‘I wondered how...’；‘from the picture of the.’ 不完整且定冠詞用法錯誤，需指明複數或具體名詞，改為“from those pictures”。建议：整理句子結構，去掉多餘連詞，確保名詞短語完整。

× I prefer to listening to stories instead of reading them because I refuse to read words since I easily feel sleepy when reading a spate of English words.

✓ I prefer listening to stories instead of reading them because I avoid reading words since I easily feel sleepy when reading a lot of English words.

‘prefer to listening’ 動詞形式錯誤，動詞 prefer 後可接動名詞（listening）或不帶 to 的不定式，應為‘I prefer listening’或‘I prefer to listen’。‘I refuse to read words’ 用詞不當，refuse 表示拒絕做某事，改為更自然的‘avoid reading words’（不喜歡/避免閱讀）。‘a spate of English words’ 不地道，改為‘a lot of English words’。建议：注意 prefer 後的動詞形式，選擇自然詞彙表達習慣。

× Yes, I have write a story when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I wrote a story when I was a child.

‘have write’ 時態和動詞形式錯誤。若時間點已明確（when I was a child），應使用一般過去時 wrote，而非現在完成時。建议：遇到明確過去時間狀語（when ...）使用一般過去時，並使用動詞的過去式。

× The story is about a frog chasing a butterfly and he found that he can't chase a flying butterfly so that he do a lot of things to improve oneself.

✓ The story was about a frog chasing a butterfly. He found that he couldn't catch the flying butterfly, so he did many things to improve himself.

原句中人稱和時態不一致：前句建議用過去時（was）；‘he can't’ 應用過去式 couldn't；‘chase a flying butterfly’ 更自然為 ‘catch the flying butterfly’；‘so that he do a lot of things’ 動詞形式錯誤，應為 did；最後‘to improve oneself’ 人稱不明，應使用與主語一致的反身代詞 ‘himself’。建议：保持人稱和時態一致，反身代詞與主語一致，使用合適的動詞。

× I like horror stories because every time I read horror stories, I have a sense of excitement and thrilling.

✓ I like horror stories because every time I read them, I feel excited and thrilled.

‘I have a sense of excitement and thrilling’ 結構混雜，‘thrilling’ 為現在分詞用於修飾事物，不應與 have 連用描述人的感受。改為‘I feel excited and thrilled’ 更自然。建议：區分形容詞和現在分詞的用法，用 'feel + 形容詞' 來表達情緒。

× I really love the stimulation and imagination by reading the horror.

✓ I really love the stimulation and imagination that come from reading horror stories.

‘reading the horror’ 表達不清且定冠詞使用不當，應為 ‘reading horror stories’ 或加關係從句說明來源。‘stimulation and imagination’ 後應有動詞或關係詞連接，改為 ‘that come from’。建议：使名詞短語完整，使用關係從句連接來源，避免不自然的定冠詞使用。