Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons with correct grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and irrelevant words. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite colour is black because it is very versatile and elegant. For example, I often wear black clothes when I want to look stylish yet simple. Additionally, most of my accessories and gadgets are black, which matches well with everything.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to directly state the colour you dislike and give clear reasons. Use simple sentences and linking words to explain your opinion logically. Avoid repetition and incomplete thoughts.

例: I dislike very light colours like neon because they do not suit me. Also, such bright colours can be too flashy and uncomfortable to look at for a long time.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Make sure to answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to add supporting details and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases. Check your grammar and pronunciation to improve clarity.

例: Most of my friends prefer dark colours. For instance, one friend often wears maroon clothes and accessories because she believes dark colours look more elegant and suit her personality.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear sentence structure and grammar errors. Try to clearly state which colour makes you uncomfortable and explain why. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your answer concise.

例: My room is mostly painted golden, but the ceiling is brown, which makes me feel uncomfortable because it looks dark and gloomy. Therefore, I decided to repaint the ceiling to a lighter colour to make the room feel brighter.

× I often choose length loads when I want to address simply but want to look stylish and luxurious.

✓ I often choose long clothes when I want to dress simply but want to look stylish and luxurious.

The phrase 'length loads' is incorrect; it should be 'long clothes' to correctly express the idea of clothing length. 'Length loads' is not a proper quantifier or phrase in English.

× Also most of my accessories and gadgets for flag and whenever I want to buy a things I.

✓ Also, most of my accessories and gadgets are black, and whenever I want to buy things, I choose black.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses incorrect pronouns and structure. 'For flag' is unclear and likely a mishearing of 'are black'. 'A things' is incorrect; 'things' is plural and does not need 'a'. The sentence needs to be completed properly with correct pronouns and verb forms.

× I usually don't like the color which is pretty light like neon an oh some of the color which is not dark but it was too late.

✓ I usually don't like colors that are very light, like neon, or some colors that are not dark but too light.

The sentence uses 'pretty light' which is informal but acceptable; however, 'an oh' is unclear and likely a mishearing of 'and also'. 'It was too late' is incorrect; it should be 'too light' to describe color. The sentence structure is confusing and needs clarification.

× It's because it it is because that color doesn't suit me an also it choose.

✓ It's because that color doesn't suit me, and also I don't choose it.

The sentence repeats 'it it is because' unnecessarily and ends abruptly with 'it choose' which is incorrect. The subject should be 'I' when referring to choosing, and the sentence needs to be completed properly.

× One of my friend choose to Tuesday we're or dark colors, dark colors and also she always choose a big ol head.

✓ One of my friends chooses to wear dark colors, and she also always chooses a big old hat.

'One of my friend' should be 'One of my friends' because 'one of' is followed by plural noun. 'Choose' should be 'chooses' for third person singular. 'Tuesday we're' is likely a mishearing of 'to wear'. 'Big ol head' should be 'big old hat' to make sense.

× Things are in excess cerise in that same color that was the maroon It is because of the perception yes of course yeah.

✓ She likes things in excess cerise, in that same color which is maroon. It is because of perception, yes of course.

The sentence is confusing and uses 'things are in excess cerise' which is unclear. 'That was the maroon' should be 'which is maroon'. The sentence needs to be restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× Basically my room surrounded with a golden color.

✓ Basically, my room is surrounded by a golden color.

The verb 'surrounded' requires the preposition 'by' to indicate what surrounds the room. 'Surrounded with' is incorrect in this context.

× When I look at the upside, it was painted in brown that was so disturbed, disturbed to see and then was very uncomfortable to watch so and I decided to paint it that.

✓ When I looked at the ceiling, it was painted brown, which was disturbing to see and made me very uncomfortable, so I decided to paint it.

The sentence mixes present tense 'look' with past tense 'was painted'. It should be consistent in past tense. 'Upside' is incorrect; 'ceiling' is the correct term. 'Disturbed' should be 'disturbing' to describe the effect. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.