Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and has minor grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural by avoiding redundancy and structuring sentences clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: My favorite colour is white because it symbolizes peace and harmony. Additionally, in our culture, white represents prosperity. Moreover, it conveys a sense of calmness and purity, which I find very appealing.

提案: Your answer is too long and repetitive with some grammatical mistakes. Try to be concise and use linking words to connect your reasons logically. Also, avoid repeating the word 'color' unnecessarily and correct minor errors for clarity.

例: I dislike the colour black because it feels very dark and uncomfortable, especially when wearing black clothes in hot weather. Furthermore, sometimes black strains my eyes, making me feel uneasy whenever I see it.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Please clarify your points and avoid confusing sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Also, ensure your sentences are complete and meaningful.

例: Most of my friends prefer bright colours such as orange, red, and pink because these colours make them feel confident and comfortable. However, some of them also like to try other colours occasionally to match different occasions.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but has some grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating the word 'color' unnecessarily. Also, correct minor errors for better fluency.

例: The colour black makes me uncomfortable in my room because it is very dominant and has a strong reflection, which strains my eyes. Therefore, I find it neither calm nor pleasing, especially for someone like me.

× White also represents very calmness and. Purity.

✓ White also represents calmness and purity.

The phrase 'very calmness' is incorrect because 'calmness' is a noun and cannot be modified by 'very' which is an adverb. Instead, simply use 'calmness' without 'very'. Also, the period after 'and' is misplaced and should be removed to connect the two nouns properly.

× The color I dislike is black color because black color is very dark and it is very uncomfortable to wear black color clothes in certain hat hot atmosphere and a black color really pinches in my eyes sometimes and I feel very uncomfortable whenever I see that color.

✓ The color I dislike is black because black is very dark and it is very uncomfortable to wear black clothes in certain hot atmospheres. Also, black really pinches my eyes sometimes and I feel very uncomfortable whenever I see that color.

The repeated use of 'color' after 'black' is redundant and incorrect. 'Black' alone suffices as an adjective or noun. The phrase 'hat hot atmosphere' is incorrect; it should be 'hot atmospheres'. Also, 'a black color really pinches in my eyes' is incorrect; it should be 'black really pinches my eyes'. The sentence is long and run-on; splitting improves clarity.

× Most of my friends like dark colors like orange, red or pink. They feel very confident and comfortable wearing these colors. However, they also have desire of a bearing or liking other colors. For these three were there most priorities?

✓ Most of my friends like dark colors like orange, red, or pink. They feel very confident and comfortable wearing these colors. However, they also have a desire to wear or like other colors. These three were their top priorities.

The phrase 'have desire of a bearing or liking other colors' is incorrect; it should be 'have a desire to wear or like other colors'. The question 'For these three were there most priorities?' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'These three were their top priorities.' Also, 'there' is incorrectly used instead of 'their'.

× The color which makes me uncomfortable whenever I see that color in my room is black color because black is very dominant color, it has a high a reflection power and it is very pinching to the eye.

✓ The color which makes me uncomfortable whenever I see it in my room is black because black is a very dominant color, it has a high reflection power and it is very pinching to the eye.

The phrase 'black color' is redundant; 'black' alone is sufficient. 'Black is very dominant color' is missing an article; it should be 'a very dominant color'. The phrase 'a high a reflection power' has an extra article 'a'; it should be 'a high reflection power'. Also, 'whenever I see that color' can be simplified to 'whenever I see it' for clarity.