Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making the response more concise. For example, instead of repeating 'I love' and 'which makes me feel', try to combine ideas smoothly using linking words. Also, try to keep the answer within 4-5 sentences for better effectiveness.

例: My favorite colors are white and green because white feels calm and pure, helping me relax, while green refreshes any space and brings a natural vibe.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to avoid unnecessary phrases like 'some But' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly. Also, be more specific about why you dislike red beyond just the association with blood.

例: I don't like red because it reminds me of blood, which makes me uncomfortable. Although red clothes sometimes look good on me, I generally prefer other colors that feel calmer and more pleasant.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid repeating 'find' and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, clarify your points with more precise vocabulary and structure.

例: Most of my friends like pink because, in Mongolia, many girls consider it attractive and girly, which makes pink a very popular color in the country.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I rather than I rather' and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about how colors affect your mood.

例: Red makes me uncomfortable in my room because it reminds me of blood, which I dislike. Therefore, I prefer using green or blue, as these colors help reduce stress and create a calm atmosphere.

× My favorite colors are white and green.

✓ My favorite colors are white and green.

No correction needed here as 'colors' is correctly plural to match multiple colors.

× Sometimes the red clothes are really looks good on me but some But in general I don't prefer red over any colors.

✓ Sometimes red clothes really look good on me, but in general I don't prefer red over any other colors.

The phrase 'red clothes are really looks good' has a subject-verb agreement error and redundancy. 'Clothes' is plural, so the verb should be 'look' not 'looks'. Also, 'some But' is incorrect and should be removed. Added 'other' before 'colors' for clarity.

× Sometimes the red clothes are really looks good on me but some But in general I don't prefer red over any colors.

✓ Sometimes red clothes really look good on me, but in general I don't prefer red over any other colors.

The sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary words like 'some But'. It needs restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I believe most of my friends love the color of pink because they find because in Mongolia a lot of girls find it to be attractive and girly which makes the color very popular in the country.

✓ I believe most of my friends love the color pink because in Mongolia many girls find it attractive and girly, which makes the color very popular in the country.

The sentence has redundant 'because' and awkward phrasing. Removing the extra 'because' and rephrasing improves clarity and flow.

× Probably the red as I said because I don't like the blood vibe in my personal space so I rather than I rather use green or blue which can make reduce stress.

✓ Probably red, as I said, because I don't like the blood vibe in my personal space, so I would rather use green or blue, which can reduce stress.

The phrase 'I rather than I rather use' is incorrect and redundant. 'Would rather' is the correct modal verb phrase. Also, 'make reduce stress' is incorrect; it should be 'reduce stress'. Added commas for clarity.