Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but it has some incomplete and unclear parts, such as 'de' and 'Depending on the seed'. To improve, make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' properly to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite colour is blue because it reminds me of the sky and ocean, which I find very calm and peaceful. Moreover, blue is versatile; for example, light blue feels cheerful, while dark blue seems serious. I often wear blue clothes because they suit many occasions.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by using better linking words and completing your last sentence. Instead of 'firstly' and 'secondly', you can use 'because' and 'also' for smoother flow. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and add more specific details.

例: I dislike the colour brown because it doesn't suit my skin tone and also feels quite dull and uninspiring. It often reminds me of muddy or dirty things, which I find unappealing. For example, I prefer brighter colours like yellow or orange that feel lively and cheerful.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more natural. For example, use 'likes' instead of 'like' for singular subjects, and avoid awkward phrases like 'influences that favorite colors'. Also, use linking words like 'for example' and 'while' properly.

例: My friends have different colour preferences based on their tastes. For example, many of my female friends like bright and vibrant colours such as pink, while my male friends usually prefer darker colours like black or navy blue. This shows how personal choice influences favourite colours.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. For example, 'This color help me' should be 'These colours help me'. Also, avoid incomplete phrases like 'in my personal'. Try to use linking words like 'because' and 'which is why' correctly to make your answer coherent.

例: I feel uncomfortable with the colour red in my room because it is very intense and can make me anxious. For instance, bright red walls might be overwhelming and disturb my peace. That is why I prefer softer, calming colours such as blue or green, which help me relax and feel comfortable in my personal space.

× I also like how versatile it is de.

✓ I also like how versatile it is.

The word 'de' is incorrectly used here and does not fit the sentence structure. It appears to be a typographical error or an incorrect preposition. Removing 'de' corrects the sentence.

× Depending on the seed, blue can be either bright and cheerful or it can be dark and serious.

✓ Depending on the shade, blue can be either bright and cheerful or dark and serious.

The word 'seed' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'shade' when referring to variations of color. Also, the phrase 'or it can be' is redundant; simplifying to 'or dark and serious' improves sentence flow.

× For instance, I often wear.

✓ For instance, I often wear blue clothes.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after the verb 'wear'. Adding 'blue clothes' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× I dislike the color brown because firstly, it doesn't suit my skin tone, Secondly, I find it quite dull and uninspiring as it often reminds me of muddy or dirty things which I don't find appealing.

✓ I dislike the color brown because, firstly, it doesn't suit my skin tone; secondly, I find it quite dull and uninspiring as it often reminds me of muddy or dirty things which I don't find appealing.

The words 'firstly' and 'Secondly' should be consistently capitalized and separated properly. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses for clarity.

× For example, I prefer brighter colors that feel more like lively and cheerful.

✓ For example, I prefer brighter colors that feel more lively and cheerful.

The phrase 'more like lively and cheerful' is incorrect. 'More' should directly modify the adjectives 'lively and cheerful' without 'like' to correctly express the comparison.

× while my male friend usually like darker colors such as black or Navy blue.

✓ while my male friend usually likes darker colors such as black or navy blue.

The subject 'my male friend' is singular, so the verb should be 'likes' to agree in number. Also, 'Navy' should not be capitalized unless it is part of a proper noun.

× These varieties show how personal choice influences that favorite colors.

✓ These varieties show how personal choice influences favorite colors.

The pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used here. It should be removed to correctly link 'personal choice' with 'favorite colors'.

× This color help me relax and feel more comfortable in my personal.

✓ This color helps me relax and feel more comfortable in my personal space.

The singular subject 'This color' requires the verb 'helps' with an 's' for subject-verb agreement. Also, the phrase 'in my personal' is incomplete; adding 'space' completes the meaning.