Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, explain why green reminds you of nature and freshness in a coherent way.

例: My favorite color is green because it reminds me of nature and freshness. I associate green with new beginnings and growth, which makes me feel calm and relaxed.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. Also, be careful with word choice and grammar to make your answer more natural.

例: I don't like gray because I find it dull and unimpressive. When I see gray objects, they seem gloomy and sad to me, which makes me feel unhappy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, use appropriate vocabulary to describe colors and opinions.

例: Most of my friends prefer dark colors, while some like bright colors. They believe that colors reflect their personality and identity.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to explain why dark colors make you uncomfortable in a small room. Also, choose better vocabulary to express your feelings.

例: Dark colors make me uncomfortable in my room because it is small. Since the space is limited, dark colors make the room feel even smaller and gloomy, which I don't like.

× My favorite color is green because when I say green things are natures I have association with fresh and I think everything is fresh new and also when I.

✓ My favorite color is green because when I see green things in nature, I associate them with freshness and I think everything is fresh and new.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'say' instead of 'see' and 'natures' instead of 'nature'. Also, the phrase 'I have association with fresh' is awkward and ungrammatical. Correct pronouns and nouns should be used to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× My favorite color is green because when I say green things are natures I have association with fresh and I think everything is fresh new and also when I.

✓ My favorite color is green because when I see green things in nature, I associate them with freshness and I think everything is fresh and new.

The word 'things' is plural, so the verb should agree accordingly. Also, 'natures' is incorrect; the singular 'nature' should be used here.

× My favorite color is green because when I say green things are natures I have association with fresh and I think everything is fresh new and also when I.

✓ My favorite color is green because when I see green things in nature, I associate them with freshness and I think everything is fresh and new.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks proper structure, making it difficult to understand. It needs to be rephrased for clarity and completeness.

× I am. I don't like Gray because I think Gray things is not impressive for for me. And when I saw grace, I think it's unhappy and poor to some.

✓ I don't like gray because I think gray things are not impressive to me. And when I see gray, I think it looks unhappy and dull to some.

The pronoun 'I am.' is incomplete and unnecessary. 'Gray things is' should be 'gray things are' to agree in number. 'For for me' is redundant and incorrect preposition use. 'Saw grace' is likely a mishearing of 'saw gray' and should be 'see gray'. 'Poor' is not appropriate here; 'dull' or 'unhappy' better conveys the intended meaning.

× I don't like Gray because I think Gray things is not impressive for for me.

✓ I don't like gray because I think gray things are not impressive to me.

'Things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× I don't like Gray because I think Gray things is not impressive for for me.

✓ I don't like gray because I think gray things are not impressive to me.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used twice; the correct preposition here is 'to' when expressing impression or opinion.

× And when I saw grace, I think it's unhappy and poor to some.

✓ And when I see gray, I think it looks unhappy and dull to some.

The verb tense is inconsistent; 'saw' is past tense but the rest of the sentence is present tense. Also, 'grace' is likely a mispronunciation of 'gray'. The verb should be present tense 'see' to match the present tense 'think'. 'Poor' is not appropriate; 'dull' better fits the context.

× My friends one parts like dark colors and affecting parts like colorist colors and they say color is very personality and identity.

✓ Some of my friends like dark colors and others like colorful colors, and they say color reflects personality and identity.

'My friends one parts' is incorrect; 'some of my friends' is appropriate. 'Colorist colors' is unclear; likely meant 'colorful colors'. 'Color is very personality and identity' is ungrammatical; 'color reflects personality and identity' is correct.

× My friends one parts like dark colors and affecting parts like colorist colors and they say color is very personality and identity.

✓ Some of my friends like dark colors and others like colorful colors, and they say color reflects personality and identity.

The phrase 'color is very personality and identity' misuses nouns as adjectives. The correct expression is that color 'reflects' or 'shows' personality and identity.

× Dark is color which uncomfortable for me in my room because my room is small and this color is not comfortable when place is not big and also it's very unhappy.

✓ Dark is a color which is uncomfortable for me in my room because my room is small, and this color is not comfortable when the place is small; also, it feels very gloomy.

'Dark is color' lacks an article; it should be 'Dark is a color'. 'Which uncomfortable' needs the verb 'is'. 'When place is not big' lacks the article 'the'. 'It's very unhappy' is incorrect; colors cannot be unhappy, so 'gloomy' or 'depressing' is more appropriate.