Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and redundancy by planning your answer before speaking. Use clear and correct grammar, and keep your sentences concise and coherent. For example, say "My favorite colour is red because it is vibrant and suits my personal style and skin tone. For instance, I wear red on special occasions like anniversaries, birthday parties, and weddings."

例: My favorite colour is red because it is vibrant and suits my personal style and skin tone. For instance, I wear red on special occasions like anniversaries, birthday parties, and weddings.

提案: Avoid unclear or incorrect vocabulary such as "onion colour" and "new colours". Use precise terms like "neon colours". Also, reduce redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, "I dislike neon colours because they don't suit my skin tone, make me feel less confident and energetic, and strain my eyes."

例: I dislike neon colours because they don't suit my skin tone, make me feel less confident and energetic, and strain my eyes.

提案: Work on sentence fluency by using linking words properly and avoiding filler words. Also, improve grammar by saying "more suitable for matching" or "better match". For example, "My friends prefer bright colours like red, green, and yellow because these colours help them feel confident and stand out. They also better match their personal style and skin tone than neutral colours."

例: My friends prefer bright colours like red, green, and yellow because these colours help them feel confident and stand out. They also better match their personal style and skin tone than neutral colours.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use correct adjectives and adverbs, for example, "soothing" instead of "sooth". A clearer answer would be: "I feel uncomfortable with dark colours in my room because they make it hard to relax and the space feels cramped. I prefer neutral colours because they create a calm and soothing atmosphere."

例: I feel uncomfortable with dark colours in my room because they make it hard to relax and the space feels cramped. I prefer neutral colours because they create a calm and soothing atmosphere.

× My favorite colour is red because it is because it is it is a vibrant color and and it is suit for my personal style and my skin tone.

✓ My favorite colour is red because it is a vibrant color and it suits my personal style and my skin tone.

The sentence contains repeated phrases and incorrect verb form 'suit' instead of 'suits'. The conjunction 'and' is repeated unnecessarily. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× For instance, I wear red colour in special occasions such as anniversaries, birthday party and wedding.

✓ For instance, I wear red colour on special occasions such as anniversaries, birthday parties, and weddings.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'on' is used for specific days or occasions. Also, plural forms 'birthday parties' and 'weddings' are appropriate when referring to general events.

× Onion colour.

✓ Neon colour.

The student likely meant 'neon colour' instead of 'onion colour', which is not a recognized color term. Correct adjective usage is important for clarity.

× I don't like new colours, it is not my cup of tea because it is not suitable for my skin tone and and it makes me less confident and less energetic and it and more over it strain more my eyes so I I don't prefer the neon colors.

✓ I don't like neon colours; they are not my cup of tea because they are not suitable for my skin tone, and they make me less confident and less energetic. Moreover, they strain my eyes, so I don't prefer neon colors.

Pronouns must agree in number with their antecedents. 'Colours' is plural, so 'it' should be 'they'. Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into clearer sentences and correcting verb forms like 'strain' to 'strain' (plural subject with base verb).

× My friends like most bright colors such as red or green and yellow and it helps them to feel more confident and and stand out in a crowd so and these colors are more suitable matching their personal style and their skin tone than the neutral colors.

✓ My friends mostly like bright colors such as red, green, and yellow, and these colors help them feel more confident and stand out in a crowd. These colors suit their personal style and skin tone better than neutral colors.

The phrase 'like most bright colors' is awkward; 'mostly like bright colors' is clearer. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with plural subject 'colors'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct quantifier use.

× I am I'm uncomfortable with the dark colors for my room because it is very hard to relax, hard to relax and my room become very cramped.

✓ I am uncomfortable with dark colors in my room because it is very hard to relax, and my room becomes very cramped.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect; 'in' is appropriate for location inside a room. Also, 'become' should be 'becomes' to agree with singular subject 'my room'. Repetition 'hard to relax' is removed for conciseness.

× I feel more more cramped.

✓ I feel more cramped.

The word 'more' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the duplicate improves sentence correctness.

× I like I would prefer the neutral colors because it it it gives me sooth calm and soothing atmosphere.

✓ I would prefer neutral colors because they give me a smooth, calm, and soothing atmosphere.

Pronoun 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'colors'. Also, 'sooth' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'smooth'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.