Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: My favorite color is black because it is versatile and matches well with many outfits. Additionally, black is considered elegant and timeless, which makes it popular among many people.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Focus on giving a clear opinion with reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid filler words and incomplete thoughts.

例: I dislike the color red because it feels too intense and makes me uncomfortable. For example, when I see bright red, it strains my eyes and doesn't appeal to my sense of beauty.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Provide a direct response with supporting details and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid uncertain phrases like 'I don't know'.

例: Most of my friends like blue because it reminds them of the sea and feels calming. For instance, they often choose blue clothes or accessories because it represents cleanliness and tranquility.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific cultural reasons using linking words for coherence.

例: The color white makes me uncomfortable in my room because, in our culture, white is associated with mourning. Therefore, we prefer calm colors like blue or gray to create a peaceful atmosphere.

× My favorite color is black. You know, black is a common color for everyone and it also doesn't have to worry about and the colors of the sympathy. There's.

✓ My favorite color is black. You know, black is a common color for everyone and it also doesn't have to worry about the colors of sympathy.

The phrase 'the colors of the sympathy' is incorrect because 'sympathy' is an uncountable noun and does not require 'the' before it. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; removing 'and' before 'the colors of sympathy' improves clarity.

× I was seeing rat because the red is I don't know why I don't like it. It it make me it make my eyes not good and and it's not gorgeous to me like it's more comfort.

✓ I was seeing red because I don't know why I don't like it. It makes my eyes feel uncomfortable and it's not gorgeous to me; it's less comfortable.

The phrase 'I was seeing rat' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I was seeing red'. Also, 'It it make me it make my eyes not good' has subject-verb agreement errors and awkward phrasing. 'It makes my eyes feel uncomfortable' is correct. The sentence also needs clearer expression of discomfort and preference.

× I think the blue blue color represents like a clean and like a sea. I don't know. Is this guy? My friend.

✓ I think blue color represents cleanliness and the sea. I don't know. Is this guy my friend?

The phrase 'the blue blue color' is redundant; 'blue color' suffices. Also, 'like a clean and like a sea' is incorrect; 'represents cleanliness and the sea' is clearer. The question 'Is this guy? My friend.' is fragmented and should be combined for clarity.

× And I would say white in our cultures, white is represented there. So we don't we don't agree with the white colors. We use blue or Gray or something that the icon we use the calm colors like blue or grey.

✓ I would say white. In our culture, white is represented differently. So we don't agree with white colors. We use blue or gray or something like that; we use calm colors like blue or gray.

The phrase 'white in our cultures, white is represented there' is awkward and unclear. 'In our culture, white is represented differently' is clearer. Also, 'something that the icon' is unclear and likely a misuse of prepositions and articles. Simplifying to 'something like that' improves clarity.