Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt không chính xác như "which parents made by blue" và câu cuối không hoàn chỉnh. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích cảm xúc của bạn về màu xanh một cách cụ thể và logic, đồng thời tránh lặp từ và câu quá dài.

例: My favorite color is blue because it reminds me of the sky and the ocean. I find that blue makes me feel calm and refreshed, especially after a long day at work. Seeing blue helps me relax and boosts my confidence.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "it's make me feel" nên là "it makes me feel". Ngoài ra, hãy tránh dùng những câu không rõ nghĩa như "have maybe have very gloomy and have ghost". Hãy trình bày rõ ràng lý do bạn không thích màu đen và đưa ra ví dụ cụ thể, mạch lạc.

例: I dislike the color black because it often makes me feel uneasy and unsafe, especially in dark rooms. For instance, if a room is painted black, I might feel gloomy and imagine scary things, which makes me uncomfortable.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi thì và cấu trúc câu. Hãy trình bày rõ ràng về sở thích màu sắc của bạn bè và lý do họ thích màu đó, đồng thời dùng liên từ để kết nối ý tưởng.

例: Most of my friends like the color blue because it reminds them of the peaceful sky and ocean. They say that blue helps them feel calm and relaxed after a busy day. I also enjoy blue for the same reasons.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "it's often make me feel" nên là "it often makes me feel". Ngoài ra, tránh dùng những cụm từ không rõ nghĩa như "black ghost or no light". Hãy trình bày rõ ràng cảm xúc của bạn khi nhìn thấy màu đen trong phòng và lý do cụ thể.

例: The color black makes me feel uncomfortable in my room because it often creates a sense of insecurity, especially in dark spaces. For example, when I enter a room painted black with little light, I feel gloomy and uneasy, as if something bad might happen.

× I usually love which parents made by blue because this make me feel confident, relaxed and helps me feel more refreshed after a long working day.

✓ I usually love clothes made by my parents in blue because this makes me feel confident, relaxed and helps me feel more refreshed after a long working day.

The original sentence has unclear phrasing and missing words. 'Which parents made by blue' is incorrect; it should be 'clothes made by my parents in blue'. Also, 'this make' should be 'this makes' to agree with singular subject 'this'. The verb 'made' is used correctly as past participle here.

× When I see the blue, I'm feeling that I'm stand in the.

✓ When I see blue, I feel like I am standing in it.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and incomplete structure. 'I'm feeling' should be 'I feel' for simple present tense. 'I'm stand' is incorrect; it should be 'I am standing'. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; 'in the' is incomplete, so 'in it' is used to complete the thought.

× Well I don't like black the most because it's make me feel very careful and unsafe especially when I am enter a dark room.

✓ Well, I don't like black the most because it makes me feel very cautious and unsafe, especially when I enter a dark room.

'It's make' is incorrect; it should be 'it makes' for third person singular present tense. 'I am enter' is incorrect; it should be 'I enter' for simple present tense. Also, 'careful' is better replaced with 'cautious' in this context.

× For example if a room was painted black, I usually feel that it have maybe have very gloomy and have ghost that's really scary.

✓ For example, if a room is painted black, I usually feel that it may be very gloomy and have ghosts, which is really scary.

'Was painted' suggests past tense, but the sentence is about a general condition, so 'is painted' (present tense) is better. 'It have maybe have' is incorrect; it should be 'it may be'. 'Have ghost' should be plural 'have ghosts'. 'That's' should be 'which is' to connect the clause properly.

× Well, all of my friends like blue because it's reminds them and me of the sky and the ocean was a very peaceful when we were able close.

✓ Well, all of my friends like blue because it reminds them and me of the sky and the ocean, which is very peaceful when we are close.

'It's reminds' is incorrect; it should be 'it reminds' (no contraction with 's' for third person singular). 'Was a very peaceful' is incorrect; it should be 'which is very peaceful'. 'We were able close' is incorrect; it should be 'we are close'.

× We feel very confident and relaxed after a long hard day of walking.

✓ We feel very confident and relaxed after a long hard day of working.

'Day of walking' is unusual in this context; 'day of working' fits better with the context of feeling refreshed after work.

× Seeing a blue skies or seeing the color blue ocean helped me really fresh.

✓ Seeing blue skies or the color blue ocean helps me feel really refreshed.

'Seeing a blue skies' is incorrect; 'skies' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Helped me really fresh' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me feel really refreshed'. Present tense 'helps' is used for general truths.

× Well, the color that makes me feel most uncomfortable in my room is the black, because it's often make me feel unsafe and answers, especially when enter a room full of darkness.

✓ Well, the color that makes me feel most uncomfortable in my room is black, because it often makes me feel unsafe and anxious, especially when I enter a room full of darkness.

'It's often make' should be 'it often makes' for third person singular present tense. 'Answers' is incorrect; likely intended 'anxious'. 'When enter' should be 'when I enter'.

× For example, when I entered room with a black ghost or no light, I feel very gloomy and something bad might happen in my mind.

✓ For example, when I enter a room with black walls or no light, I feel very gloomy and think that something bad might happen.

'Entered room' needs an article: 'entered a room'. 'Black ghost' is unclear; likely meant 'black walls'. 'I feel' is present tense, which is appropriate for habitual feelings. 'Something bad might happen in my mind' is awkward; better to say 'think that something bad might happen'.