Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use accurate grammar. Use linking words briefly to add one specific detail (e.g., why purple feels peaceful or a short example of an item you own). Also correct plural and article errors (e.g., "purple clothes" not "this colors clothes").

例: My favourite colour is purple because it feels bright and calming. For example, I have a purple scarf that always makes me feel relaxed when I wear it. I would like more purple clothes, but I don't have many at the moment.

提案: Give a clearer reason and avoid contradictory or vague statements. Start with a topic sentence stating dislike, then give one concrete reason or short example. Remove unnecessary sentences about others unless relevant. Use accurate adjectives ("harsh on my eyes" rather than "dark for the eyes").

例: I dislike yellow because it feels harsh on my eyes and can be overwhelming in large amounts. For instance, bright yellow walls make me feel uncomfortable after a while, so I prefer softer tones. However, I understand some people like it for its cheerfulness.

提案: Be more natural and varied in vocabulary; combine sentences and add a brief reason with a linking word. Correct small phrasing errors ("goes with" instead of "suits with"). Limit to three sentences max.

例: Most of my friends prefer black; they often wear black clothes because it’s practical and easy to match. For example, black jackets go with almost anything and look smart for different occasions.

提案: Organise the answer with a clear topic sentence: state whether any colour makes you uncomfortable, then give one supporting detail. Avoid irrelevant information (e.g., cost) unless it explains discomfort. Use correct tense and grammar ("back in India" -> "back in India, I had purple walls").

例: No colour makes me uncomfortable in my current room because the walls are white. Back in India, I had purple walls in my bedroom, but I didn't find them unpleasant — so at the moment there’s nothing that bothers me.

× Umm I like purple color, it is bright and I always feel peaceful whenever I see this color.

✓ Umm I like the colour purple; it is bright and I always feel peaceful whenever I see this colour.

Use of adjective order and articles: 'purple color' is non-idiomatic in English; native phrasing is 'the colour purple' or 'purple colour'. Also the original sentence is a comma splice; join clauses with a semicolon or conjunction. Use consistent spelling (colour). Improve fluency by using 'the' before a specific colour reference.

× I love to wear this colors clothes everyday.

✓ I love to wear clothes in this colour every day.

'This colors clothes' mixes demonstrative with plural incorrectly. Use 'this colour' (singular) and 'clothes' already plural. 'Every day' should be two words when meaning each day. 'Wear clothes in this colour' is natural word order.

× However, it's not possible because I do not have a variety of full clothes in this color.

✓ However, it's not possible because I do not have a variety of clothes in this colour.

Redundant word 'full' is unclear and unnecessary. Use consistent spelling 'colour'. The present simple tense is fine; only remove extraneous word to improve grammar and clarity.

× But still I love this colour.

✓ But still I love this colour.

No grammatical correction needed for number; sentence is fine. Included here to show no change required.

× I do not like yellow color.

✓ I do not like the colour yellow.

Prefer 'the colour yellow' rather than 'yellow color' for natural English word order and consistent spelling.

× I have no specific reason.

✓ I don't have a specific reason.

Both forms are grammatical; contracting 'do not' to 'don't' is more natural in spoken responses. No tense change needed.

× However, I feel it is very dark for the eyes.

✓ However, I feel it is harsh on the eyes.

'Dark for the eyes' is non-idiomatic. Use idiomatic expression 'harsh on the eyes' or 'hard on the eyes' to convey discomfort. The verb 'feel' with adjective is correct.

× I always get my eyes hurt whenever I see this color.

✓ My eyes always hurt whenever I see this colour.

Original uses causative-like structure 'get my eyes hurt' which is awkward. Use 'my eyes hurt' or 'I get a headache' for natural English. Also use 'colour' spelling.

× I believe that some people prefer this color.

✓ I believe that some people prefer this colour.

Verb tense is fine; only change 'color' to 'colour' for consistency.

× I respect their feelings.

✓ I respect their feelings.

Sentence is correct; pronoun usage is appropriate. No change needed.

× Most of my friends prefer black colour.

✓ Most of my friends prefer the colour black.

Use 'the colour black' rather than 'black colour' for natural order and include 'the' when speaking about a colour in general.

× They always wear clothes in black.

✓ They always wear black clothes.

More natural word order is 'black clothes' rather than 'clothes in black'. Both are understandable but latter is less idiomatic.

× I believe that it is a good choice because you can wear any cloth in black.

✓ I believe it is a good choice because you can wear any clothes in black.

'Cloth' refers to fabric; use 'clothes' for garments. Also omit redundant 'that' for natural speech. Word order adjusted.

× It suits with every colour.

✓ It suits every colour.

Verb 'suit' does not take 'with' in this context. Use 'suits every colour' or 'goes with every colour'.

× Fortunately, my room walls are white in colour where I live at the moment.

✓ Fortunately, the walls of my room where I live at the moment are white.

Word order and article: 'my room walls' is awkward; 'the walls of my room' or 'my room's walls' is more natural. 'White in colour' is wordy; 'are white' suffices. Tense 'live at the moment' is fine but move phrase for clarity.

× However, in my home in back in India, I used to have purple colour in my own room, which is very expensive to get in here.

✓ However, back home in India, I used to have purple in my own room, which is very expensive to get here.

Word order and redundancy: 'in my home in back in India' is incorrect; use 'back home in India'. 'Purple colour' should be 'purple' or 'the colour purple'. 'Get in here' -> 'get here'. Past habitual 'used to have' is correct.

× So I believe that at the moment there is nothing that make me uncomfortable in my home.

✓ So I believe that at the moment there is nothing that makes me uncomfortable in my home.

Subject-verb agreement: 'nothing' is singular so verb should be 'makes' not 'make'. Keep present simple tense 'makes'.