Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct vocabulary, avoid hesitations and filler words, and give one clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct word choice (e.g., "beige" not "page") and reduce repetition to sound more natural.

例: I don't have a single favourite colour; I prefer warm tones such as orange and red. For example, orange reminds me of summertime and red feels cosy in autumn, so those colours make me feel cheerful and relaxed.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, use correct grammar (e.g., "I dislike grey"), avoid repetition, and provide specific reasons with linking words. Use precise vocabulary and reduce hesitations.

例: I dislike grey because it feels dull and uninviting. Although many people choose grey for a modern look, I find it too neutral and it makes rooms feel cold rather than cosy.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, correct incorrect words ("primary colours" or "bright colours" instead of "pyramid colors"), and group examples logically. Use linking words to connect general statement and examples, and avoid fillers.

例: Most of my friends prefer bright colours, especially primary shades like red, yellow and blue. For instance, one friend loves orange because it feels energetic, while another prefers purple because it looks elegant.

提案: Answer directly then give one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar and pronunciation issues ("grey" consistently) and avoid repeating the same adjective. Use linking words like "because" and "so" for clarity.

例: Grey would make me uncomfortable in my room because it feels depressing and lifeless. Therefore I prefer to decorate with warm, vibrant colours that create a cheerful atmosphere.

× I don't have a favorite color.

✓ I don't have a favorite colour.

The original sentence uses American spelling 'color' while the rest of the transcript uses British spelling 'colour'. This is not a grammatical error per se but for consistency with the examiner's spelling you should use 'colour'. Ensure consistent variant of English throughout the response.

× Uh, I really like warm colors like orange or red or just page, uh, colors that make me feel like I'm in a summertime or fall time.

✓ I really like warm colours like orange or red, or just pale colours that make me feel like I'm in summer or autumn.

The sentence has several issues: 'page' is likely a mispronunciation of 'pale'; 'summertime or fall time' is awkward and inconsistent with British spelling. Also word order and redundant fillers make the sentence unclear. Use 'pale colours' and the proper nouns 'summer' and 'autumn' (or 'fall') without 'time' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× I think one color I dislike it's a Gray because for me it's very boring.

✓ I think one colour I dislike is grey because, for me, it is very boring.

There is a sentence-structure problem and article/word form issues: 'one color I dislike it's a Gray' incorrectly repeats subjects and uses 'a Gray' which incorrectly treats 'grey' as a countable noun. Use 'is grey' and do not capitalise colour names; include commas for clarity.

× I was watching that many people use uh Cray for decorating houses.

✓ I have noticed that many people use grey for decorating houses.

The original mixes tenses and has mis-spelled words: 'I was watching that many people use' is awkward; 'Cray' is likely 'grey'. Use present perfect 'I have noticed' to convey a general observation about recent trends, and 'use grey for decorating houses' is the correct phrase.

× Don't get me wrong, looks like a formal color, but I don't like it at all.

✓ Don't get me wrong; it looks like a formal colour, but I don't like it at all.

The clause lacks an explicit subject. Add 'it' as the subject ('it looks like') and use consistent spelling 'colour'. Semicolon or comma with conjunction improves sentence flow.

× For me it's very boring.

✓ For me, it is very boring.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable but in formal spoken answers 'it is' clarifies meaning. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase 'For me' for clarity. Subject-verb agreement is correct but punctuation and register improvements are suggested.

× OK, I have many friends, I think, uh, most of them like pyramid colors, like, you know, red or yellow or orange, purple, like light colors.

✓ I have many friends. I think most of them like primary colours, such as red, yellow, orange, purple, and other light colours.

The original has fillers and the word 'pyramid' is incorrect for 'primary'. Use separate sentences to reduce run-ons, replace 'pyramid' with 'primary', add 'such as' to introduce examples, and ensure consistent plural forms and spelling.

× For example, uh, I have a friend that, uh, her favorite color is, uh, orange.

✓ For example, I have a friend whose favourite colour is orange.

Using 'a friend that, her' is redundant and ungrammatical: combine into a relative clause with 'whose' to show possession ('friend whose favourite colour is orange'). Also use consistent spelling 'favourite colour'.

× Like I said, I don't like Gray so I think grade can. I can be feeling uncomfortable using Gray in my bedroom or in my house in general.

✓ Like I said, I don't like grey, so I would feel uncomfortable using it in my bedroom or in my house in general.

The original contains transcription errors: 'grade can' is meaningless; 'I can be feeling uncomfortable' is awkward. Use 'so I would feel uncomfortable using it' to express conditional feeling. Replace 'Gray' with lowercase 'grey' and use 'it' to refer to the colour.

× I don't like that color and for me it's boring, it's depressing and I prefer more vibrant or warm colors.

✓ I don't like that colour; for me it's boring and depressing, so I prefer more vibrant or warm colours.

Use a semicolon or conjunctions to join ideas properly; remove comma splice. Use consistent spelling 'colour' and parallel structure ('boring and depressing'). 'So' clarifies the conclusion about preference.