Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and grammatical: state the reason in one concise topic sentence then add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words (because, and) and correct collocations (e.g., ‘stands out’ → ‘doesn’t fade’ is wrong; say ‘shows dirt less’ or ‘looks elegant’). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words like ‘No.’

例: My favorite colour is black because it looks elegant and is easy to match with other clothes. For example, I often choose black jackets since they hide stains and suit many occasions.

提案: Give a full explanation: start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason and an example using a linking word (because, so, for instance). Avoid fragments and unclear pronouns (e.g., ‘they’ without a clear noun).

例: I dislike red because it feels too intense and can be overwhelming. For instance, bright red walls make a room feel smaller and more agitated, so I prefer softer tones.

提案: Respond directly and avoid conversational fillers. Use a clear topic sentence, then explain with a reason and an example connected by linking words (for example, because, so). Make sure sentence structure is complete.

例: My friends usually prefer intense colours like red and purple because those shades feel bold and lively. For example, one friend wears purple to stand out at parties, while another chooses red to express confidence.

提案: Give a complete, grammatical answer: state the colour and a clear reason, then provide a brief example or result. Use linking words (because, when) and correct phrases (e.g., ‘overly energetic’ not ‘over energetic’). Avoid sentence fragments.

例: Pink makes me uncomfortable in my room because I find it overly energetic and distracting. When the walls are painted bright pink, I struggle to relax and concentrate on studying.

× My favorite color is black because it is not easy to stay.

✓ My favorite color is black because it is not easy to stain.

The student used 'stay' which is incorrect here. The intended meaning likely relates to 'stain' or 'show dirt' — an adjective/adverb misuse. Replace with 'stain' to convey that black does not show stains easily. Suggestion: choose the correct verb that matches the intended idea (e.g., 'stain' or 'show dirt').

× It also is a simple. No.

✓ It is also simple.

The sentence contains awkward word order and an unnecessary fragment 'No.' Reordering to 'It is also simple.' fixes adjective usage and sentence flow. Avoid short, unclear tags like 'No.' in this context.

× I dislike red because it is too strong and bright.

✓ I dislike red because it is too strong and too bright.

This sentence is mostly correct but for emphasis and parallel structure add 'too' before both adjectives. This improves clarity and parallel adjective usage.

× This also.

✓ It is also overwhelming.

'This also.' is a fragment and unclear. Provide a full clause that connects to the previous idea. Use a subject and verb to form a complete sentence, e.g., 'It is also overwhelming.'

× They easily.

✓ It affects me easily.

'They easily.' is a fragment and unclear pronoun reference. Use a complete clause with a clear subject and verb. If referring to colors affecting emotions, say 'They affect me easily' or 'It affects me easily.'

× My friends are usually like intense colors such as red and purple because.

✓ My friends usually like intense colors such as red and purple because they are energetic.

Incorrect verb construction 'are usually like' should be 'usually like' (adverb placement) and the sentence ends abruptly. Complete the clause by explaining why: 'because they are energetic.' Ensure correct verb form 'like' for preference.

× They are energetic, no?

✓ They are energetic, right?

Using 'no?' as a tag question is nonstandard in English. Use 'right?' or 'aren't they?' for a natural tag question. If using a tag question with 'they are', the standard is 'aren't they?'.

× I have to say it is pink because.

✓ I have to say it is pink because it feels too feminine for me.

The sentence is incomplete and uses 'because' without a clause. Provide a reason clause after 'because' and choose appropriate adjectives. 'Feels too feminine' is an example; adjust to intended meaning.

× It is over energetic and I find it overwhelming when.

✓ It is overly energetic, and I find it overwhelming.

'Over energetic' is incorrect; use the adverb 'overly' before the adjective: 'overly energetic.' Also remove the trailing 'when' fragment. Keep clauses complete and parallel.

× It is in larger.

✓ It is overwhelming when it is used in larger areas.

'It is in larger.' is ungrammatical. Use a complete comparative phrase such as 'used in larger areas' or 'in larger quantities.' Ensure preposition and noun choice fit the meaning.