Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite colours, then give two short, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition. Also use precise vocabulary (e.g., “calm” instead of “relaxed and straight”).

例: My favourite colours are white and green. I like white because it looks clean and makes a room feel calm, while green reminds me of nature — seeing plants helps me relax and feel refreshed.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and two concise, specific reasons connected with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and hesitation. Use accurate adjectives (e.g., “dreary”, “oppressive”) and complete your final thought.

例: I dislike black because it can make a space feel small and oppressive. For example, rooms with a lot of black furniture often seem cold and unwelcoming, which makes me uncomfortable.

提案: Answer directly and give specific examples. Start by naming the colours your friends prefer, then explain briefly why those colours suit them. Reduce hesitations and use simple descriptive language (e.g., “cheerful”, “soft pink”).

例: My friends prefer colours like green, pink and purple. For instance, one friend likes green because she enjoys nature, while another prefers pink because it feels cheerful and friendly.

提案: First give a clear direct answer naming the colour(s) that make you uncomfortable, then explain why with one or two specific reasons and an example. Keep sentences short and avoid unclear phrases like “leaning toward Muni toys.”

例: Dark colours like black make me uncomfortable in my room because they make the space feel smaller and less inviting. For example, black walls or dark curtains make it hard for me to relax at night.

× Uh, let me think of my favorite color is white and green because, you know, white is very clean that, that can make make people feel relaxed and, uh, straight.

✓ Uh, let me think. My favorite colors are white and green because white looks very clean and can make people feel relaxed and calm.

This sentence has multiple structure errors (type 26) and subject-verb agreement/plural issues (type 1/27). It improperly combines 'let me think of' with a statement and uses singular 'color' while listing two colors. Repeating words ('make make') and 'straight' is the wrong adjective. Correction splits into two sentences, uses plural 'colors', corrects verb forms, removes repetition, and replaces 'straight' with 'calm' which fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: keep one main clause per sentence, ensure noun number matches list, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× And in addition, in the green, uh, is from more nature.

✓ In addition, green comes from nature and feels natural.

This is primarily a sentence structure problem (type 26) with incorrect preposition/phrase order (type 11). 'In the green' and 'is from more nature' are ungrammatical. The correction rephrases to a clear subject-verb structure and uses correct prepositions. Suggestion: identify the noun subject then add a clear verb phrase (e.g., 'green comes from nature').

× So if you can look some great plants, you can feel.

✓ So if you look at some plants, you will feel more relaxed.

This is a sentence structure error (type 26) and incorrect preposition/verb use (type 11). 'Look some great plants' is missing the preposition 'at' and 'you can feel' is incomplete. The correction adds 'at', makes the verb phrase complete, and clarifies the result. Suggestion: use 'look at' for viewing and complete result clauses (e.g., 'you will feel relaxed').

× I don't like the color black.

✓ I don't like the colour black.

This is mainly a spelling/variant issue but structurally fine; however to match the examiner's spelling 'colour' is used. No grammar type from the list directly addresses British/American spelling; we keep sentence identical aside from consistent spelling. Suggestion: use consistent variant of English throughout the response.

× I feel black is so sad that it can make people feel upset and a room feel small, smaller and less investing.

✓ I feel black is very sad; it can make people feel upset and make a room feel smaller and less inviting.

This contains incorrect adjective/adverb choices (type 13) and comparative inconsistency (type 25). 'So sad' is acceptable but 'less investing' is wrong word choice; should be 'less inviting'. Also 'a room feel small, smaller' is redundant. Correction fixes word choice and parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'invite'/'inviting' for warmth and keep comparisons consistent (just 'smaller').

× For example when all the umm something is dark, also black something filled uh cold and unfriendly so I pretty.

✓ For example, when everything is dark, black objects can feel cold and unfriendly, so I dislike it.

This sentence has major structure issues (type 26), pronoun/reference problems (type 12), and incorrect adjective use (type 13). 'All the umm something' is vague, 'black something filled uh cold' is ungrammatical, and 'so I pretty' is incomplete. The correction clarifies the subject, uses proper verbs, and completes the idea. Suggestion: replace vague words with 'everything' or 'objects', use clear verb forms, and finish the clause (e.g., 'so I dislike it').

× Umm, and let me, let me think my friends are like, uh, umm, such as greens and uh wink and purple and she's very friendly.

✓ Let me think. My friends like colors such as green, pink, and purple, and they are very friendly.

This has sentence structure errors (type 26), singular/plural mismatch (type 1), and pronoun issues (type 12). 'My friends are like... such as greens' is awkward; 'wink' is likely 'pink' and 'she's very friendly' mismatches plural 'friends'. Correction sets clear sentence boundaries, uses plural agreement, corrects color names, and aligns pronouns. Suggestion: ensure verb and pronoun number agree with the subject and use correct color names.

× So uh, the color just like her future and very happy and uh, bubble.

✓ So the colors suit their personalities; they seem cheerful and bubbly.

This contains incorrect adjective use and unclear metaphor (type 13). 'Just like her future' and 'bubble' are unclear. Correction offers a natural expression: 'suit their personalities' and 'cheerful and bubbly'. Suggestion: use established adjectives and idioms to describe personality ('bubbly' means lively).

× I think the color is leaning toward Muni toys that can make people feel comfortable and relaxing.

✓ I think the colors that lean toward muted tones or pastel shades can make people feel comfortable and relaxed.

This sentence has structure errors (type 26) and incorrect word choice (type 13). 'Muni toys' is unintelligible; likely intended 'muted tones' or 'many tones'. 'Relaxing' should be 'relaxed' when describing a person. Correction clarifies meaning and uses correct adjective form. Suggestion: choose accurate vocabulary ('muted', 'pastel') and match adjective/adverb forms to the subject (feel comfortable and relaxed).

× And so, uh, for instance, the, the black or higher pink, green pop people, purple can people.

✓ For instance, very dark black or very bright pink, green, or purple can make people uncomfortable.

This original is largely unintelligible and has sentence structure problems (type 26), incorrect comparative/adverb placement (type 20), and incorrect word order. 'Higher pink, green pop people' is meaningless. The correction interprets intent: contrast very dark vs very bright colors and states the effect clearly. Suggestion: simplify and use adjectives like 'very dark' or 'very bright' before color nouns and complete the clause with the effect ('can make people uncomfortable').