Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более чётко: начните с одного основного утверждения (например, «My favorite colour is white»), затем дайте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретными причинами и приведите короткое связующее слово. Избегайте повторов и неверной грамматики (например, «I feel calm» вместо «I feel myself calm»).

例: My favorite colour is white because it makes me feel calm and peaceful. I also like purple sometimes, as it feels strong and feminine, which matches my personality.

提案: Дайте чёткий ответ прямо с топик‑предложением (например, «I don't like pink»), затем объясните причину конкретно и коротко. Уберите междометия («um», «uh») и повторения; используйте связку («because» или «as») и конкретные слова для описания впечатления.

例: I don't like pink because I find it too sweet and childish for my taste. For example, most pink items look overly cute rather than elegant, so I avoid wearing that colour.

提案: Начните с общего утверждения, затем приведите конкретные примеры с правильной грамматикой и связкой. Используйте множественное число и согласование глаголов (например, «my best friend likes»). Можно добавить короткое объяснение, почему они выбирают эти цвета.

例: My friends like many different colours. For example, my best friend likes pink because she loves cute things, while my boyfriend prefers white and green because they feel fresh and natural to him.

提案: Дайте чёткое топик‑предложение («Yellow makes me uncomfortable»), затем объясните конкретно, почему (например, «too bright», «overstimulating»). Избегайте бессвязных фрагментов и неверной лексики («uncountable», «I feel myself»). Используйте 1–2 связующих слова и краткие полные предложения.

例: Yellow makes me uncomfortable in my room because it is too bright and overstimulating. When the walls are yellow I find it hard to relax and I don't sleep well.

× My favorite color is white because I feel myself calm, interested, but also my favorite color is purple.

✓ My favorite color is white because it makes me feel calm and interested, but my other favorite color is purple.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is used incorrectly here; English uses 'feel' with an adjective or 'make me feel'. Use 'it makes me feel' or 'I feel' + adjective. Also remove repetition 'my favorite color is' for clarity. Use conjunction 'but' to contrast. Suggestion: say 'it makes me feel calm' or 'I feel calm when I see it.'

× Umm, I think I don't have, uh, the finite color, but I don't like pink.

✓ Umm, I think I don't have a definite favorite color, but I don't like pink.

'The finite color' is incorrect collocation. The correct phrase is 'a definite favorite color' or 'a single favorite color'. 'A' is needed because we refer to one unspecified item. Suggestion: use 'definite' or 'single' with 'favorite color.'

× It's like, uh, uh, so friendly and uh, so cute.

✓ It seems very friendly and cute.

Redundant fillers 'uh' should be omitted; 'so' can be used but 'very' is more natural in this context. Use 'seems' to express opinion. Keep concise: 'very friendly and cute.'

× I have a lot of friends and everyone likes different colors like my best friend like pink or my boyfriend white green.

✓ I have a lot of friends and everyone likes different colors, for example my best friend likes pink and my boyfriend likes white and green.

Subjects 'my best friend' and 'my boyfriend' are third person singular, so verbs must be 'likes' not 'like'. Also list items clearly with conjunctions and commas. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and add conjunctions for clarity.

× I think yellow color makes me uncountable in my room because it's so. White and I feel myself. Not good.

✓ I think yellow in my room makes me uncomfortable because it's too bright, and I don't feel good.

'Uncountable' is wrong meaning; correct adjective is 'uncomfortable'. 'Yellow color' should be 'yellow' or 'yellow in my room'. Sentence fragments 'it's so.' and 'White and I feel myself. Not good.' are incorrect. Use 'too bright' or another adjective and 'I don't feel good.' Replace 'myself' with 'I'. Suggestion: form full sentences: '...makes me uncomfortable because it is too bright, and I don't feel good.'