Colours— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь давать более чёткие и связные предложения: избегайте лишних слов и исправьте грамматические ошибки (например, «reminds me of the sky and the sea, giving me a sense of calm and openness»). Используйте связки для плавного перехода между идеями и ограничьтесь 2–4 предложениями.

例: I prefer soft colours, and my favourite is blue because it reminds me of the sky and the sea, giving me a sense of calm and openness. For example, I often wear blue clothes and use blue tones in my study area.

提案: Избегайте эмоционально заряжённых слов вроде «hate» и «scary» без объяснения; также исправьте согласование глаголов и пунктуацию. Постарайтесь дать более вежную формулировку и привести конкретную причину или пример.

例: I tend to dislike dark colours such as grey and black because they can feel gloomy to me. For instance, wearing black clothing or being in a dim room sometimes makes me feel less energetic.

提案: Исправьте согласование и избыточные фразы (например, «Dasha really likes pink»). Уточните связь между вашими чувствами и примером, используйте связки для плавного объяснения.

例: My best friend Dasha really likes pink because she finds it vivid and attractive. I also like pink because it reminds me of her — she often wears it, so the colour feels warm and friendly to me.

提案: Исправьте грамматику и выбор слов («intensity» → «intense», «rotated» неуместно). Дайте ясный пример с описанием чувств и последствий для расслабления. Используйте связки для логики ответа.

例: I find very bright colours, such as neon yellow, uncomfortable in my room because they feel too intense and make it hard to relax. For example, when I stayed in a hostel with bright yellow walls, I felt restless and had trouble sleeping.

× Actually, I really like soft colors and my favorite one is blue because it reminds me of the sky and the sea walking, a sense of calm and openness.

✓ Actually, I really like soft colors and my favorite one is blue because it reminds me of the sky and the sea, giving a sense of calm and openness.

The original sentence misuses 'walking' after 'sea', which is incorrect contextually and grammatically. 'Giving' is the present participle that correctly links the clause to the effect (a sense of calm and openness). Use 'giving' to indicate that something produces an effect. Также необходимо добавить запятую перед деепричастным оборотом для ясности.

× Actually I hate dark colors like Gray and black because they are so scary and makes me feel fear so I don't like them at all.

✓ Actually, I hate dark colors like gray and black because they are so scary and make me feel afraid, so I don't like them at all.

'Gray' should not be capitalized in this context; color names are common nouns. There is a subject-verb agreement error: 'they' with plural subject requires 'make' not 'makes'. 'Feel fear' is unnatural; use 'feel afraid'. Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× In fact, my best friend Dasha really like pink color because this color is so vivid and attractive.

✓ In fact, my best friend Dasha really likes the color pink because it is so vivid and attractive.

With third person singular subject 'my best friend Dasha', the verb requires an -s: 'likes'. Also use 'the color pink' or 'the color is' for natural phrasing; 'this color' can be replaced with 'it' to avoid repetition.

× I actually really like this color because it reminds me about her and thanks to the fact that she usually wears pink.

✓ I actually really like this color because it reminds me of her, and because she usually wears pink.

English uses 'remind of', not 'remind about'. The phrase 'thanks to the fact that' is wordy and awkward here; replace with 'because' for clarity and natural flow.

× Actually, I find bright colors like neon yellow uncomfortable in my room because it is intensity feels overwhelming and makes it hard to relax.

✓ Actually, I find bright colors like neon yellow uncomfortable in my room because their intensity feels overwhelming and makes it hard to relax.

'It is intensity' is ungrammatical; the correct noun is 'intensity' and it must be referred to with a plural possessive 'their' (referring to 'colors') or 'its' if referring to a single color. Use 'their intensity feels overwhelming' to match the plural noun 'colors' or 'its intensity' for singular. Also remove extra 'is'.

× For instance, when I stayed in a hostel with yellow walls, I noticed I became easily rotated.

✓ For instance, when I stayed in a hostel with yellow walls, I noticed I became easily irritated.

'Rotated' is the wrong word; it means 'turned around'. The intended meaning is likely 'irritated' or 'agitated'. Choose a verb that correctly expresses feeling upset or uncomfortable. Also 'easily irritated' is the correct adjective phrase to describe the emotional reaction.