Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons or examples. For instance, say "I believe I'm good at giving gifts because I enjoy surprising my friends and family even on ordinary days, which shows my affection."

例: I believe I'm good at giving gifts because I enjoy surprising my friends and family even on ordinary days, which shows my affection. For example, I often give small presents just to make them smile, not only on special occasions.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, "I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays or holidays. Additionally, I sometimes bring gifts when visiting friends' homes."

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays or holidays. Additionally, I sometimes bring gifts when visiting friends' homes to show my appreciation.

提案: Your answer has good content but some parts are unclear or incorrect. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and clarify your points. For example, say "I consider the recipient's interests and preferences to choose a meaningful gift. For instance, if they like reading, I select a book by their favorite author. Also, I think about how to present the gift nicely."

例: I consider the recipient's interests and preferences to choose a meaningful gift. For instance, if they like reading, I select a book by their favorite author. Also, I think about how to present the gift nicely, such as wrapping it attractively.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details. For example, "Yes, I have given handmade gifts to my friends. I made necklaces and accessories myself, which they appreciated."

例: Yes, I have given handmade gifts to my friends. I made necklaces and accessories myself, which they appreciated because they were unique and personal.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear due to grammar mistakes. Use a clear topic sentence and supporting details with linking words. For example, "I believe the value of a gift is not about its price. Handmade gifts can express feelings better because they show effort and thoughtfulness."

例: I believe the value of a gift is not about its price. Handmade gifts can express feelings better because they show effort and thoughtfulness, which I appreciate more than expensive items.

× I think I'm good in giving gifts because every time I give my friends my family, even if they don't have a special a moment, I give them because I love them.

✓ I think I'm good at giving gifts because every time I give my friends and my family gifts, even if they don't have a special moment, I give them because I love them.

The phrase 'good in giving gifts' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'good at'. Also, 'give my friends my family' is unclear and should be 'give my friends and my family gifts' to clarify the recipients. The phrase 'a special a moment' contains an extra article 'a' and should be 'a special moment'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× When they have a special a oxidation I give them and also in it's their birthday.

✓ When they have a special occasion, I give them gifts, and also on their birthday.

The word 'oxidation' is a mishearing or typo for 'occasion'. The phrase 'in it's their birthday' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' and the phrase should be 'on their birthday'. Also, 'a special a oxidation' has an extra article 'a' and should be 'a special occasion'. These corrections fix preposition misuse and article errors.

× Or something like this. But, uh, you do it. I give gifts, uh. When I go to to their home, would I go to my friend's home with me?

✓ Or something like that. But, uh, I give gifts when I go to their home. Would my friend come with me?

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Or something like this' should be 'Or something like that' for natural phrasing. The phrase 'you do it' is unclear and removed. The repeated 'to to' is a typo and corrected to 'to'. The question 'would I go to my friend's home with me?' is incorrect; it should be 'Would my friend come with me?' to make sense. These corrections improve sentence clarity and structure.

× When choosing a gift, are usually considered that exceptions, interests, and preferences to ensure their present is made for and appreciated.

✓ When choosing a gift, I usually consider the recipient's expectations, interests, and preferences to ensure their present is suitable and appreciated.

The original sentence lacks a subject ('I') and uses 'are usually considered that exceptions' which is incorrect. It should be 'I usually consider the recipient's expectations'. Also, 'made for' is awkward; 'suitable' fits better. These corrections fix pronoun use and sentence structure.

× Additionally, I think about the oceans and the approaches of the gift.

✓ Additionally, I think about the occasions and the appropriateness of the gift.

The words 'oceans' and 'approaches' are incorrect in this context; the intended words are likely 'occasions' and 'appropriateness'. This correction fixes the misuse of adjectives and nouns to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I give my friends a gift by my hand made.

✓ Yes, I give my friends handmade gifts.

The phrase 'a gift by my hand made' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'handmade gifts'. This fixes the preposition misuse and awkward phrasing.

× I was doing a Nicholas and accessories by my hand.

✓ I made necklaces and accessories by hand.

The phrase 'I was doing a Nicholas' is incorrect; likely intended 'necklaces'. Also, 'by my hand' should be 'by hand'. The past continuous 'was doing' is less appropriate than simple past 'made' for completed actions. These corrections fix vocabulary, preposition, and tense errors.

× It is my hand made and I give my friends like a gift for them.

✓ They are handmade, and I give them to my friends as gifts.

'It is my hand made' is incorrect; 'They are handmade' correctly refers to the gifts. 'I give my friends like a gift for them' is awkward; 'I give them to my friends as gifts' is correct. This fixes pronoun and sentence structure errors.

× It's not on that price the gift it to.

✓ It's not about the price of the gift.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The corrected sentence uses proper pronouns and prepositions to express the intended meaning.

× It's not on their price.

✓ It's not about the price.

'On their price' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'about'. This fixes preposition and pronoun usage.

× In my opinion, it's not a not the price we.

✓ In my opinion, it's not about the price.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains repeated negatives. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning.

× I can enjoy if my friend give me a hand made gift.

✓ I can enjoy it if my friend gives me a handmade gift.

The sentence lacks the object pronoun 'it' after 'enjoy'. Also, 'friend give' should be 'friend gives' to agree with third person singular. 'Hand made' should be one word 'handmade'. These corrections fix pronoun use, subject-verb agreement, and word form.

× I will enjoy and like it.

✓ I will enjoy and like it.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.