Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains hesitations. Try to give a direct response first, then support it with specific examples. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences to sound more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I think I am good at giving gifts because I always try to choose something meaningful for my family and friends on their birthdays or during Christmas.

提案: Your answer has many hesitations and is a bit repetitive. Try to organize your answer with linking words and avoid filler sounds. Be more concise and clear in your explanation.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions like Christmas or birthdays. However, sometimes I give gifts spontaneously to show my feelings or appreciation.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains many fillers and some grammatical errors. Try to use linking words and correct grammar to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: When choosing a gift, I consider the person's taste and hobbies because I usually buy gifts for people I know well, so I try to match their interests.

提案: Your answer is unclear and fragmented. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with examples. Avoid negative contractions and incomplete sentences.

例: I have never given a handmade gift because I don't think I have the skills. However, I have baked cakes or cooked meals for others on their birthdays.

提案: Your answer conveys a good opinion but could be clearer with better sentence structure and linking words. Try to organize your ideas logically and avoid repetition.

例: I believe that expensive gifts do not necessarily express feelings better. What matters most is choosing a gift thoughtfully based on the person's preferences, not the price.

× Not sure what exactly means to be good at giving gifts, but I try to buy some gifts for my family members and friends when they have a birthday or during the Christmas. Yeah I I.

✓ I'm not sure what exactly it means to be good at giving gifts, but I try to buy some gifts for my family members and friends when they have a birthday or during Christmas. Yeah, I do.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb in the first clause, making it incomplete. Adding 'I'm' and 'it' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'the Christmas' is incorrect; 'Christmas' does not need a definite article. The phrase 'Yeah I I' is incomplete and unclear; correcting to 'Yeah, I do' completes the thought.

× As I already mentioned, I buy some gifts for another person umm, if it's Christmas or umm their birthday, uh, but but umm, sometimes I buy just no reason if I want to express my my feeling or umm just umm umm, if I love this person to express.

✓ As I already mentioned, I buy some gifts for other people, umm, if it's Christmas or their birthday, but sometimes I buy gifts for no reason if I want to express my feelings or if I love this person.

The phrase 'another person' is incorrect when referring generally; 'other people' is more appropriate. 'My my feeling' is repetitive and should be 'my feelings'. The sentence is also fragmented and unclear; restructuring improves clarity and grammar.

× Umm so I always consider their taste to what they like, umm, what their hobbies is umm and umm.

✓ Umm, so I always consider their taste, what they like, and what their hobbies are.

The phrase 'what their hobbies is' has a subject-verb agreement error; 'hobbies' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and can be combined for clarity.

× It's usually I buy gifts for people who I know well, so I try to buy some gifts based on their taste and interests.

✓ Usually, I buy gifts for people whom I know well, so I try to choose gifts based on their tastes and interests.

The original sentence has awkward word order. Starting with 'Usually' and using 'whom' for the object of 'know' improves formality and clarity. Also, 'taste' should be plural 'tastes' to match 'interests'.

× I'm not really. I don't think I can do some gifts. I baked a cake for other people's birthday or cooked something but handmade gift and I don't think so. Never.

✓ I'm not really. I don't think I can make handmade gifts. I have baked a cake for other people's birthdays or cooked something, but I don't think I've ever given a handmade gift.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Do some gifts' is incorrect; 'make handmade gifts' is appropriate. Also, 'baked a cake for other people's birthday' should be plural 'birthdays'. The last sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?

The adverb 'better' should be placed after the verb phrase 'express your feelings' to correctly modify it. The original placement is awkward.

× It's not about the money if it's expensive or cheap, but if you just go random shop and just choose something without any thinking if this person likes or not.

✓ It's not about the money, whether it's expensive or cheap, but if you just go to a random shop and choose something without thinking about whether this person likes it or not.

The original sentence is missing prepositions ('to a random shop') and articles ('a random shop'). Also, 'without any thinking if this person likes or not' is awkward; it should be 'without thinking about whether this person likes it or not'.

× I think it's the most important not price how much this gift costs.

✓ I think the most important thing is not the price, but how much this gift costs.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing words. Adding 'thing is' and rearranging the sentence clarifies the meaning.