Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct by simplifying the sentence structure. Avoid redundancy and ensure clarity by directly addressing the question with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

例: Honestly, I'm not very good at giving gifts because I often struggle to think of what to buy or what the person might like.

提案: Improve coherence by using linking words and correct vocabulary. Also, clarify your examples and avoid fragmented sentences to make your answer more effective and natural.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as holidays, birthdays, or festivals like Eid. For example, last time I gave a gift to my younger brother during Eid, which is a tradition in our community.

提案: Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. Also, try to be more specific and concise in your explanation to enhance clarity and naturalness.

例: When choosing a gift, I consider the person's interests. For instance, my brother is passionate about gaming and fitness, so I decided to gift him a PlayStation.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use past tense consistently and provide clearer details to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Yes, when I was a child, I made handmade cards for my parents and decorated them with colours to make them look special.

提案: Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases. Structure your answer with a clear opinion followed by reasons and examples. Use appropriate vocabulary to express your ideas naturally and effectively.

例: I don't believe expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better. What matters more is the thought behind the gift; even a simple, inexpensive present can be very meaningful if it shows you care.

× there is nothing goes into my mind like what to buy, which thing to buy or what they like.

✓ there is nothing that goes into my mind like what to buy, which thing to buy or what they like.

The original sentence incorrectly combines 'there is' with 'nothing goes', which causes a subject-verb agreement error. The phrase should be 'there is nothing that goes' to correctly link the subject 'nothing' with the verb 'goes'. Adding 'that' clarifies the relative clause and corrects the agreement.

× I usually give gifts to someone on special occasions or suppose on holidays, on birthdays or on festivals like Eid.

✓ I usually give gifts to someone on special occasions, such as holidays, birthdays or festivals like Eid.

The phrase 'suppose on holidays' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'such as' to introduce examples. Also, the preposition 'on' is correctly used with 'holidays', 'birthdays', and 'festivals'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Last time I gifted my younger brother Edie, which is a tradition in slum.

✓ Last time I gifted my younger brother Edie, which is a tradition in the slum.

The phrase 'in slum' is missing the definite article 'the'. When referring to a specific place like 'the slum', the definite article is necessary. This corrects the article usage and improves the sentence's grammaticality.

× I consider what type of gifts they like.

✓ I consider what type of gifts he likes.

The pronoun 'they' is used incorrectly here because the subject is singular ('my brother'). The correct singular pronoun is 'he'. Also, the verb should agree with the singular subject, so 'likes' is used instead of 'like'.

× he does have a passion for games and working out.

✓ he has a passion for games and working out.

The phrase 'does have' is grammatically correct but unnecessarily emphatic in this context. Using 'he has' is more natural and concise for stating a fact. This improves the sentence's fluency.

× I do make some letters and fill it with colors to make it more significant looking to my parents.

✓ I used to make some letters and fill them with colours to make them look more significant to my parents.

The original sentence has several issues: 'do make' is awkward for past habitual action, so 'used to make' is better; 'letters' is plural, so pronouns should be plural ('them'); 'fill it with colors' should be 'fill them with colours' (British spelling); 'more significant looking to my parents' is awkward, corrected to 'make them look more significant to my parents' for clarity and correctness.

× I don't think so. That's expensive. Gifts make you feel more, uh, pleasurable or mean something to the other person when you give expensive things.

✓ I don't think so. Expensive gifts make you feel more, uh, pleasure or mean something to the other person when you give expensive things.

The word 'pleasurable' is an adjective and incorrectly used here; the noun 'pleasure' fits better after 'feel'. Also, 'That's expensive.' is a fragment and unclear; it is better to integrate the idea into the next sentence for clarity.