Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan dengan kalimat topik yang kuat, lalu berikan detail pendukung yang relevan tanpa pengulangan. Hindari kesalahan tata bahasa dan gunakan kata ganti yang tepat.

例: Yes, I believe I am good at giving gifts because I enjoy expressing my love through them. I usually give gifts to my family and friends to show how much I care. Moreover, I always consider the quality of the gift to make it meaningful.

提案: Jawaban perlu lebih terstruktur dan jelas. Gunakan kalimat yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan dan jelaskan dengan detail kapan biasanya memberikan hadiah. Hindari pengulangan dan kesalahan tata bahasa.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions like birthdays or holidays. However, sometimes I give gifts spontaneously when I feel like surprising someone without any special reason.

提案: Perbaiki penggunaan tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Jelaskan dengan spesifik faktor-faktor yang dipertimbangkan saat memilih hadiah dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

例: When choosing a gift, I first consider the recipient's preferences. For example, if they don't like books, I avoid giving them one. Secondly, I pay attention to the quality of the gift to ensure it is meaningful.

提案: Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan tata bahasa yang benar. Ceritakan pengalaman dengan detail yang spesifik dan gunakan kalimat yang koheren.

例: Yes, about ten years ago, I made a handmade scrapbook for my best friend. It contained our photos and memories, which made it a very special gift.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami. Jelaskan pendapat dengan alasan yang spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts better express feelings. The value of a gift depends on its meaning, not its price. Even handmade gifts can be very valuable because of the effort and thought behind them.

× Since my love language is the top of them is giving gifts.

✓ Since my love language is giving gifts, which is the top among them.

The original sentence uses incorrect conjunction and structure, making it unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning by properly connecting the ideas using 'which is' and reordering the sentence for clarity.

× So I think that yes, I'm really good at giving gifts.

✓ So I think that, yes, I'm really good at giving gifts.

A comma is needed after 'that' to separate the clauses properly and improve sentence flow.

× I give my giving gift to my friends or my family as a sign that I love him, how much I love him.

✓ I give gifts to my friends or my family as a sign of how much I love them.

The pronouns 'him' are incorrect because the recipients can be multiple people of any gender. 'Them' is the correct plural pronoun. Also, 'my giving gift' is awkward; 'gifts' is clearer.

× And when I give them, I just I should know that the quality of them.

✓ And when I give them, I should know their quality.

The original sentence is awkward and redundant. The correction simplifies the sentence and uses the possessive pronoun 'their' correctly.

× Actually it depends on my mood but when Yeah, sometimes I just giving them in there is no day, there is no special day for giving gift to others.

✓ Actually, it depends on my mood, but sometimes I just give them when there is no special day for giving gifts to others.

The verb 'giving' is incorrectly used instead of the base form 'give' after 'I just'. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× But sometimes I give my give giving gift to my friends in her special day or our.

✓ But sometimes I give gifts to my friends on their special day or ours.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect; 'on' is used for days. Also, 'her' should be 'their' to match plural 'friends', and 'give giving gift' is incorrect; 'give gifts' is correct.

× The first thing is details of that person I would to give the gift and I mean like if if the person didn't like books or I didn't give them a book.

✓ The first thing is the details of the person I want to give the gift to. I mean, if the person doesn't like books, I don't give them a book.

The sentence is fragmented and has incorrect verb forms. 'Would to give' is incorrect; 'want to give' is correct. Also, tense consistency is improved.

× And for the 2nd I'll to say that the quality of the gift I would hike.

✓ And secondly, I would say that the quality of the gift is important.

The phrase 'I'll to say' is incorrect; 'I would say' is correct. 'I would hike' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'I would like' or 'is important'. The correction clarifies the meaning.

× I ever given my best friend from I think that was in 10 years ago I made a square book and that consist of our photos and yeah, et cetera.

✓ I gave my best friend a handmade gift about 10 years ago. I made a scrapbook that consisted of our photos and so on.

'I ever given' is incorrect; past simple 'I gave' is correct. 'That consist' should be past tense 'consisted'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.

× I just I give them.

✓ I just gave it to them.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. The correction uses past tense 'gave' to match the context and clarifies the object.

× No expense, more expensive gifts are not in line with the quality of the of its gift and the gift are not depend on of its price.

✓ No, more expensive gifts do not necessarily reflect the quality of the gift, and gifts do not depend on their price.

The sentence has quantifier and article errors. 'No expense' is incorrect; 'No' is appropriate. 'Are not depend' is incorrect; 'do not depend' is correct. Also, 'of its price' is incorrect; 'on their price' is correct.

× It depends or it values.

✓ It depends on its value.

The phrase 'or it values' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'depends on its value'.

× Even if our gift are a just a handmade gift, it's still valuable for.

✓ Even if our gift is just a handmade gift, it's still valuable.

'Gift are' should be 'gift is' to agree in number. 'A just' is incorrect order; 'just a' is correct. The sentence ends abruptly; 'valuable for' is incomplete and removed.