Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe I'm good at giving gifts because I pay close attention to my friends' and boyfriend's interests. For example, I observe their hobbies and needs carefully, which helps me choose presents they truly appreciate.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains unclear phrases and some mistakes. Please clarify your ideas and avoid confusing words. Also, use linking words to organize your answer logically.

例: I usually give gifts to my close friends and family on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries. Additionally, during major festivals like Christmas, exchanging gifts is a common tradition.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to complete your thoughts and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words to explain your points and avoid vague expressions.

例: When choosing a gift, I consider how close I am to the person. For close family members, I don't mind spending more time or money to find the perfect present. However, for acquaintances, I usually choose something simple and convenient.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense correctly and avoid filler words like 'stuff'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I have. In high school, my classmates and I made handmade gifts for our teachers, such as clipboards and photo albums. I also made some DIY gifts for my boyfriend, which took a lot of time but were very meaningful.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Please complete your answer and use clear examples. Avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Not necessarily. The value of a gift depends on the recipient's needs and preferences. For instance, young children are often happy with simple items like notebooks or pens, rather than expensive gifts. On the other hand, adults might appreciate more thoughtful presents.

× I think I'm quite good at giving gifts cause first I'm a good observers for my friends and my boyfriend.

✓ I think I'm quite good at giving gifts because first I'm a good observer for my friends and my boyfriend.

The word 'observers' is plural but the subject 'I' is singular, so it should be 'observer' to agree in number. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context.

× I'm good at observing their needs and their hobbies which made me good at buying something they really like and they really wanted to.

✓ I'm good at observing their needs and their hobbies which makes me good at buying something they really like and really want.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Made' should be 'makes' to match the present tense context. Also, 'wanted to' is incomplete; 'really want' fits better here.

× For my close friends and families, I give them in special occasions like their birthday anniversaries or Baptist baptisms earn.

✓ For my close friends and family, I give them gifts on special occasions like their birthdays, anniversaries, or baptisms.

'Families' should be 'family' as a collective noun here. 'Birthday anniversaries' is redundant; 'birthdays' or 'anniversaries' is sufficient. 'Baptist baptisms earn' is incorrect; 'baptisms' is correct and 'earn' is unnecessary.

× For big festivals like Christmas, gift exchange is a must.

✓ For big festivals like Christmas, gift exchange is a must.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× It really depends on what person I'm giving the gift to.

✓ It really depends on the person I'm giving the gift to.

'What person' is incorrect; 'the person' is the correct phrase here.

× If the person is more important and related to me, which is closer to me, the consideration will not be that much no matter the money or like the length of ordering or where should I order it from.

✓ If the person is more important and closer to me, the consideration will not be much, regardless of the money, the ordering time, or where I should order it from.

The sentence is awkward and has redundant phrases. 'Related to me, which is closer to me' is repetitive; 'closer to me' suffices. 'Not be that much' should be 'not be much'. 'Length of ordering' is better expressed as 'ordering time'. The question form 'where should I order it from' should be a statement 'where I should order it from'.

× However, if there are if the gift is for.

✓ However, if the gift is for someone less close, the considerations might be different.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing it clarifies the meaning.

× Yes sure I do. I had a couple of experience on handmade gifts in high school I we used to make handmade gifts for our teachers like the clipboard, photo album and stuff.

✓ Yes, sure I do. I had a couple of experiences with handmade gifts in high school. We used to make handmade gifts for our teachers like clipboards, photo albums, and stuff.

'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match 'a couple of'. The sentence is run-on and needs to be split. 'I we' is a typo; 'we' is correct. 'Clipboard' and 'photo album' should be plural to match the context.

× For my boyfriend I did made him a couple of DIY things which is really time consuming but it is really meaningful.

✓ For my boyfriend, I made him a couple of DIY things which were really time-consuming but really meaningful.

'Did made' is incorrect; it should be 'made'. 'Is' should be 'were' to agree with plural 'things' in past tense. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'.

× Not really. It really depends on the needs and desire of the receivers.

✓ Not really. It really depends on the needs and desires of the receivers.

'Desire' should be plural 'desires' to agree with plural 'needs' and 'receivers'.

× For example if you give a gift to a young children which they don't really need much expensive items, all they need is maybe like a notebook or a pen or erasers which really make them really satisfied.

✓ For example, if you give a gift to a young child who doesn't really need expensive items, all they need is maybe a notebook, a pen, or erasers which really make them satisfied.

'A young children' is incorrect; 'a young child' is singular. 'Which they don't really need much expensive items' is awkward; 'who doesn't really need expensive items' is correct. 'Make them really satisfied' is better as 'make them satisfied'.