Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In your answer, try to be more clear and natural. Avoid confusing phrases like "giving the girlfriend" and focus on directly answering the question. Use simple, correct sentences and limit your answer to 3-4 sentences. For example, say who you like to give gifts to and why, with clear reasons.

例: Yes, I am good at giving gifts. I like to give presents to my friends and family on special occasions because it makes them happy and shows I care about them.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Try to avoid repetition and use more precise vocabulary. Also, keep your answer concise and organized.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, childbirths, engagement parties, and weddings. These moments are important to celebrate and share happiness with others.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use correct vocabulary. Explain clearly what factors you consider when choosing a gift, such as the person's preferences or the occasion.

例: When I choose a gift, I think about what the person likes and the type of occasion. For example, I often choose chocolates because many people enjoy them, but I also consider the event to select a suitable present.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about your experience. Avoid double negatives like "I haven't given so many."

例: Yes, I have given handmade gifts to others. For example, I made handbags, traditional shirts, and scarves by myself. It usually takes me 5 to 8 days to complete them before giving to my friends.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but can be improved by clearer sentence structure and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. What matters is the care and love behind the gift, not its price. Even small gifts can be precious if they show how much you care.

× I'm good at giving the girlfriend and I like it to give the gifts on the special occasion of the my friends and relatives and neighborhood anyone who related to me and my friend list.

✓ I'm good at giving gifts to my girlfriend and I like to give gifts on special occasions to my friends, relatives, neighbors, and anyone related to me or on my friend list.

The original sentence incorrectly uses prepositions such as 'giving the girlfriend' instead of 'giving gifts to my girlfriend' and 'on the special occasion of the my friends' instead of 'on special occasions to my friends'. Correct preposition usage is essential for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So gift is one of the precious moments and thanks to bring happiness.

✓ So gifts are precious moments and bring happiness.

The word 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match 'precious moments' and the verb agreement. Also, 'thanks to bring happiness' is incorrect; it should be 'bring happiness' to express the intended meaning.

× I give the gifts to others on special occasional for example like on their birthdays are like on childbirth, like on some parties, engagement party, wedding parties and so these are the special moments that I prefer to give to them on their special occasions.

✓ I give gifts to others on special occasions, for example, on their birthdays, childbirth, parties, engagement parties, and weddings. These are special moments when I prefer to give gifts.

The phrase 'on special occasional' is incorrect; it should be 'on special occasions'. Also, 'like on some parties' is redundant with 'for example'. Prepositions and article usage are corrected for clarity.

× When I choose the gifts, I do mostly prefer to consider chocolates and as well depending on auction or party or occasions on the people's what they do like what kind of party is it so I select accounting to account.

✓ When I choose gifts, I mostly prefer chocolates and also consider the type of event or party, depending on what people like. So, I select according to the occasion.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has unclear phrasing like 'depending on auction or party or occasions on the people's what they do like'. Correct preposition use and clearer sentence structure improve understanding.

× Yes, I haven't given so many handmade gift to others such as a handbag and traditional shirts and also scarf which I made it on my own handmade for almost work on that from 5 to 8 days and then give them to my friends and it's really.

✓ Yes, I haven't given many handmade gifts to others, such as handbags, traditional shirts, and scarves which I made myself. I worked on them for about 5 to 8 days and then gave them to my friends.

The sentence has tense errors and incorrect plural forms. 'Gift' should be 'gifts', 'made it on my own handmade' is incorrect and replaced with 'made myself'. Also, past tense 'gave' is used for completed actions.

× No, I don't think so. This way gift is all about care and love and the one you show to others. So it doesn't it doesn't depend on the expensive or cheap gifts. It's the things that like how much you care and giving time. So it's the precious things the if it is small or good.

✓ No, I don't think so. A gift is all about care and love that you show to others. So it doesn't depend on whether the gift is expensive or cheap. It's about how much you care and the time you give. So, it's precious whether it is small or big.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has awkward phrasing like 'This way gift' and 'the one you show to others'. Correct pronoun use and clearer sentence structure improve meaning and grammar.