Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve net yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları kaldırmalı ve bağlaçları kullanarak cümleleri birbirine bağlamalısınız.

例: Yes, I am good at giving gifts, especially to my parents, because knowing someone well helps me choose gifts that suit their preferences. Moreover, seeing their happiness when they receive birthday presents motivates me to give thoughtful gifts.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı kelime hataları ve anlam belirsizlikleri var. Daha spesifik ve doğru kelimeler kullanarak, cümlelerinizi bağlaçlarla daha tutarlı hale getirmelisiniz.

例: I usually give gifts on birthdays because it's a special occasion to celebrate someone's life. Additionally, I give presents on important events like graduations or other significant milestones to show my appreciation.

提案: Cevabınızda belirsizlik ve eksik ifadeler var. Daha açık ve detaylı açıklamalar yapmalı, gereksiz duraklamalardan kaçınmalısınız. Ayrıca cümlelerinizi bağlaçlarla daha akıcı hale getirin.

例: When choosing a gift, I consider the person's hobbies and preferences. For example, I think about their clothing style or the type of shoes they like, which helps me select a suitable present.

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımı hataları mevcut. Cümlelerinizi daha doğru ve anlamlı kurmak için pratik yapmalı, ayrıca bağlaçlar kullanarak ifadelerinizi geliştirmelisiniz.

例: Yes, I have given handmade gifts to my parents, such as homemade cups and drawings on paper. They really appreciate these gifts, which is why I enjoy making them.

提案: Cümlelerinizde tekrarlar ve anlam bozuklukları var. Daha net ve akıcı cümleler kurmak için gereksiz tekrarları kaldırmalı ve doğru kelimeleri kullanmalısınız.

例: No, I believe that thoughtful gifts express feelings better than expensive ones. For instance, when someone buys me something I truly need, it makes me happier because it shows they understand and care about me.

× Yes, especially for for my parents because when you know someone very well you can give them gifts very properly and you can understand what they want from you as a gift.

✓ Yes, especially for my parents because when you know someone very well you can give them gifts very appropriately and you can understand what they want from you as a gift.

The phrase 'very properly' is not the best collocation here; 'very appropriately' fits better when talking about giving gifts in a suitable manner. Also, the repeated word 'for' is a typographical error and should be corrected.

× Secondly you can see their happiness from a birthdays gifts.

✓ Secondly, you can see their happiness from birthday gifts.

The phrase 'a birthdays gifts' is incorrect because 'birthdays' is plural and 'a' is singular. The correct form is 'birthday gifts' without 'a' and with 'birthday' as an adjective.

× I usually give gifts on birthdays because it is special accusations to celebrate someone's life sometimes, and I also give presents on other important events like their graduation or their happiest day in their lives.

✓ I usually give gifts on birthdays because it is a special occasion to celebrate someone's life sometimes, and I also give presents on other important events like their graduation or their happiest day in their lives.

The word 'accusations' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'occasion'. Also, 'a special occasion' requires the article 'a' before 'special occasion'.

× Yes, especially give my parents homemade cups or homemade beef marks.

✓ Yes, especially I give my parents homemade cups or homemade beef jerky.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' before 'give'. Also, 'beef marks' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'beef jerky' is a common homemade gift.

× I sometimes drawing a something in a paper and give them they they love it a lot actually that's why I do it.

✓ I sometimes draw something on paper and give it to them; they love it a lot actually, that's why I do it.

The verb 'drawing' should be in base form 'draw' after 'sometimes'. Also, 'a something' is incorrect; 'something' does not need an article. 'In a paper' should be 'on paper'. The sentence structure is improved by splitting into two clauses and correcting pronouns.

× No, actually when I need something, if you buy me something, especially when I need it, I I feel more happier than ever because of that, because you saw my need and you bath for me.

✓ No, actually when I need something, if you buy me something, especially when I need it, I feel happier than ever because of that, because you saw my need and you bought it for me.

'More happier' is incorrect; 'happier' is the comparative form and does not need 'more'. 'Bath' is a typo and should be 'bought'. The modal verb 'feel' is correctly used but the sentence needs correction for clarity and tense consistency.