Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "I think I'm really an expert" which sounds a bit informal and exaggerated. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts, especially souvenirs from my travels, because it allows me to share the joy of my experiences with my friends.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar words like "beautiful pretty."

例: I usually give gifts to my friends after I return from a trip. If I find a souvenir that suits their tastes, I definitely buy it for them.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more fluent and precise. Avoid filler words like "Uh" and use more natural expressions. Also, "banquet of flowers" is incorrect; use "bouquet of flowers."

例: When choosing a gift, I first consider the occasion. For example, I would buy a birthday cake for a birthday and a bouquet of flowers for Mother's Day.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and clarify your ideas. For example, "I made a ceramic cup for my friend Jamie because she said she didn't have one to drink coffee."

例: Yes, I once made a ceramic cup for my friend Jamie because she mentioned she didn't have a cup to drink coffee.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly.

例: I don't believe expensive gifts express my feelings better. Sometimes, I prefer giving handmade gifts, like ceramic cups, because they show more thought and care.

× I really enjoy buying very beautiful pretty souvenirs and for my friends and if I see the presence which is very suitable for some of my friends are definitely by them.

✓ I really enjoy buying very beautiful, pretty souvenirs for my friends, and if I see a present which is very suitable for some of my friends, I definitely buy it for them.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction use and awkward sentence structure, making it confusing. The conjunction 'and' is used improperly, and the sentence lacks clarity. The correction separates ideas properly with commas and conjunctions, and corrects 'presence' to 'present' to fit the context.

× However, if it's for Mother's Day, maybe I'll buy a banquet of flowers to my mother.

✓ However, if it's for Mother's Day, maybe I'll buy a bouquet of flowers for my mother.

The phrase 'banquet of flowers' is incorrect; the correct term is 'bouquet of flowers'. Also, the preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'for' is the proper preposition to indicate the recipient of the flowers.

× Yes, I have made a pottery to one of my best friends.

✓ Yes, I have made a piece of pottery for one of my best friends.

'Pottery' is an uncountable noun referring to ceramic ware in general, so it needs a quantifier like 'a piece of' when referring to a single item. Also, the preposition 'to' is incorrect; 'for' is appropriate when indicating the recipient.

× Jamie is a ceramics cups because at that time she said she didn't have a cup to drink coffee, so I just made a cup for her.

✓ Jamie likes ceramic cups because at that time she said she didn't have a cup to drink coffee, so I just made a cup for her.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Ceramics cups' is incorrect; it should be 'ceramic cups'. Also, the sentence lacks a proper verb to connect the ideas. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the adjective form.

× I don't think expensive gifts better express my gratitude towards the person that I give the gifts.

✓ I don't think expensive gifts better express my gratitude towards the person to whom I give the gifts.

The sentence is missing the comparative structure 'better express' needs an object or clearer phrasing. Also, 'that I give the gifts' is awkward; 'to whom I give the gifts' is more grammatically correct. The correction improves clarity and grammatical correctness.