Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在较多犹豫词和重复，表达不够流畅自然。建议减少填充词，使用更简洁明确的句子结构，并直接回答问题。

例: I'm not very good at giving gifts because I always think carefully about the recipient's personality and preferences. Therefore, I usually ask them what they want to make sure the gift is suitable.

提案: 回答内容较为笼统，缺少具体细节和连贯的表达。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并具体说明节日和生日送礼的原因。

例: I usually give gifts during special festivals like the Spring Festival and Mid Autumn Festival because these occasions are important for family gatherings. Additionally, I also give gifts on birthdays to celebrate the person's special day.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不完整。建议简洁明了地说明考虑因素，并举具体例子。

例: When choosing a gift, I first consider the occasion. For example, for a birthday, I try to select something meaningful that suits the person's interests.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用完整句子，清楚表达制作手工礼物的原因和意义。

例: Yes, I made a handmade calendar for my girlfriend on New Year's Day because I wanted to wish her happiness throughout the year and help her keep track of important dates.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，语法和用词有误。建议明确表达观点，使用恰当的词汇和句式。

例: I believe that expensive gifts can sometimes show respect and feelings, but handmade gifts often express emotions more sincerely.

× I'm not very good at uh, giving gifts because I always consider a lot about the uh, recipients personalities and, uh, something else, umm, moral, uh.

✓ I'm not very good at uh, giving gifts because I always consider a lot about the uh, recipients' personalities and, uh, something else, umm, moral, uh.

这里'recipients personalities'缺少所有格，应为'recipients' personalities'，表示“收礼人的个性”。所有格需要加撇号。

× There are many occasions in their lives that you could give.

✓ There are many occasions in their lives when you could give gifts.

句子中缺少宾语，且表达不完整。'occasions'是复数，后面应接完整的表达。这里补充了'when you could give gifts'使句子完整。

× Many things needs needs to be considered uh during choosing a gift, first you need to think about the the occasion.

✓ Many things need to be considered uh during choosing a gift, first you need to think about the occasion.

主语'Many things'是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式'need'，而不是'sneeds'。另外，'the the'重复，应去掉一个。

× Many things needs needs to be considered uh during choosing a gift, first you need to think about the the occasion.

✓ Many things need to be considered uh when choosing a gift, first you need to think about the occasion.

'during choosing a gift'用法不正确，'during'后应接名词，'choosing'是动名词，但更自然的表达是'when choosing a gift'。

× For example, in the birthday you may choose something meaningful to some, someone or.

✓ For example, on a birthday you may choose something meaningful to someone.

'in the birthday'错误，正确用法是'on a birthday'。'some, someone or'表达不完整，应为'someone'。

× There are many occasions in their lives that you could give.

✓ There are many occasions in their lives when you could give gifts.

句子结构不完整，缺少宾语，导致表达不清晰。补充宾语使句子完整。

× Uh, is a definitely made, uh, a calendar for my girlfriend because, uh, in the New Year's Day because I hope that could, uh, give her the whole year happiness and help her regular everyday.

✓ Uh, I definitely made a calendar for my girlfriend on New Year's Day because I hope it could give her happiness throughout the whole year and help her have a regular everyday life.

句子缺少主语'I'，时态应为过去式'made'。'in the New Year's Day'应为'on New Year's Day'。表达不完整，需调整句子结构使其通顺。

× Uh, is a definitely made, uh, a calendar for my girlfriend because, uh, in the New Year's Day because I hope that could, uh, give her the whole year happiness and help her regular everyday.

✓ Uh, I definitely made a calendar for my girlfriend on New Year's Day because I hope it could give her happiness throughout the whole year and help her have a regular everyday life.

'in the New Year's Day'用法错误，正确用法是'on New Year's Day'。

× However that could not represent for every for more things because maybe handmade give this better.

✓ However, that could not represent everything because maybe handmade gifts express feelings better.

'represent for every for more things'表达混乱，'represent'后不接'for'，应为'represent everything'。'handmade give this better'语法错误，应为'handmade gifts express feelings better'。