Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'giving' multiple times, you can use synonyms or rephrase. Also, ensure your sentences are complete and clear.

例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts because it is one of my love languages. I believe that giving brings blessings, and through my generosity, I have built strong relationships with many people.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be more concise and natural. Avoid filler words like 'OK' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and wedding anniversaries. Additionally, I sometimes give gifts spontaneously when I feel happy, to show my appreciation for those around me.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to use correct grammar and complete your thoughts. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: When choosing a gift, I consider my budget and the recipient's needs. I make sure not to spend beyond my means, and I select gifts that the person will truly appreciate and find useful.

提案: Good answer with clear details. To improve, try to link your sentences better and avoid short, choppy sentences.

例: Yes, I have given handmade gifts. For example, two years ago, I learned knitting and made a dress which I gifted to my friend's daughter on her birthday. She really appreciated the thoughtful present.

提案: Your answer is meaningful but contains some grammar errors and repetition. Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I don't think expensive gifts express my feelings better. Instead, I focus on the thoughtfulness behind the gift and consider the needs of my close friends and family, which makes both them and me feel appreciated.

× Have actually helped a lot of people and this has made me to be loved by many people.

✓ I have actually helped a lot of people and this has made me loved by many people.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'I' before 'have actually helped'. Also, 'made me to be loved' is incorrect; the correct form is 'made me loved'. This correction improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I usually give gifts to others on special occasions like birthdays, wedding anniversary and sometimes I give gifts based on how happy I am.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on special occasions like birthdays, wedding anniversaries and sometimes I give gifts based on how happy I am.

The phrase 'wedding anniversary' should be plural 'wedding anniversaries' to match the plural 'birthdays' and indicate multiple occasions. This ensures consistency in listing multiple events.

× When choosing a gift, I consider my finance and also the needs of the person I intend gifting.

✓ When choosing a gift, I consider my finances and also the needs of the person I intend to gift.

'Finance' should be plural 'finances' when referring to personal monetary resources. Also, 'intend gifting' is incorrect; the correct form is 'intend to gift'. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I do not spend above my means and I also ensure that whatever gives am gifting the person is well appreciated and needed at that moment and this kind of make me feel very.

✓ I do not spend beyond my means and I also ensure that whatever gift I am giving the person is well appreciated and needed at that moment, and this kind of makes me feel very good.

The phrase 'spend above my means' is better expressed as 'spend beyond my means'. 'Whatever gives am gifting' is incorrect; it should be 'whatever gift I am giving'. Also, 'this kind of make me feel very' is incomplete and should be 'this kind of makes me feel very good'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Last two years I learnt about knitting.

✓ Two years ago, I learnt about knitting.

The phrase 'Last two years' is incorrect for indicating a point in the past; 'Two years ago' is the correct expression. This correction aligns with standard English usage for past time references.

× So I had this perfectly knitted dress that I gifted to my friend's daughter on the occasion of her birthday.

✓ So I had this perfectly knitted dress which I gifted to my friend's daughter on the occasion of her birthday.

Using 'which' instead of 'that' is more appropriate here to introduce a non-restrictive clause describing the dress. This improves sentence flow and clarity.

× Expensive gifts do not express my feelings in a better way because I believe is the thoughtfulness towards gifting that counts.

✓ Expensive gifts do not express my feelings better because I believe it is the thoughtfulness towards gifting that counts.

The phrase 'in a better way' is unnecessary; 'better' suffices. Also, the sentence is missing the subject 'it' before 'is the thoughtfulness'. Adding 'it' corrects the sentence structure.

× I put my close friends and family's needs whenever I am gifting and this has also also helped to make me feel very appreciated.

✓ I consider my close friends' and family's needs whenever I am gifting, and this has also helped me feel very appreciated.

'Put' is better replaced with 'consider' for clarity. The possessive form 'friends'' is needed to show ownership. The repeated 'also' is corrected to a single 'also'. 'Helped to make me feel' is simplified to 'helped me feel' for smoother expression.