Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use more natural expressions and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I believe I am good at choosing gifts because I always select practical ones within my budget."

例: Yes, I believe I am good at choosing gifts because I always select practical ones that the receiver can use, and I keep my budget in mind.

提案: Make your answer more concise and coherent. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Avoid irrelevant phrases like "I would love to answer these questions."

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, or when a friend has a baby or leaves their job. For example, I recently gave a gift when my mother came to Canada.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence completeness. Use linking words to organize your points clearly. For example, "Firstly, I consider my budget to avoid overspending. Secondly, I choose practical gifts. Lastly, I ensure the gift is of good quality."

例: When choosing a gift, I first consider my budget to avoid overspending. Then, I select a practical gift that the receiver can use. Finally, I make sure the gift is of good quality.

提案: Use more natural phrasing and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and clarify your ideas. For example, "Yes, when I was 10, I made a handmade birthday card for my best friend Riya. I was shy to ask my parents for money, so I created the card myself with various decorations."

例: Yes, when I was 10, I made a handmade birthday card for my best friend Riya. Since I was shy to ask my parents for money, I decorated the card myself with different arts.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. For example, "I don't think expensive gifts always express feelings better. What matters more is the thought behind the gift."

例: I don't think expensive gifts always express feelings better. What matters more is the thought and care behind the gift.

× I believe that I am best at choosing gift.

✓ I believe that I am best at choosing gifts.

The noun 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' because the context implies a general ability to choose multiple gifts, not just one.

× I always buy gifts that are usable to the receiver.

✓ I always buy gifts that are usable for the receiver.

The correct preposition to use with 'usable' in this context is 'for' rather than 'to'.

× I always take care about my budget.

✓ I always take care of my budget.

The correct phrase is 'take care of' not 'take care about'.

× I believe that quantity matter of work over and quality.

✓ I believe that quantity matters less than quality.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'quantity' is singular and needs 'matters' (third person singular verb), and the phrase 'matter of work over and quality' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'quantity matters less than quality'.

× I would love to answer these questions because I like giving gifts on people's birthdays, anniversaries, special occasions such as if a movement or my friend accepting a baby or leaving work.

✓ I would love to answer these questions because I like giving gifts on people's birthdays, anniversaries, and special occasions such as a wedding, a friend having a baby, or leaving work.

The phrase 'if a movement or my friend accepting a baby' is incorrect and unclear. It should be replaced with correct expressions for special occasions. Also, 'would love to answer' is acceptable but the sentence needed clarity and correct nouns.

× I always take care about my budget.

✓ I always take care of my budget.

The phrase 'take care about' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'take care of'.

× I don't spend a enough money on the gift.

✓ I don't spend enough money on the gift.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'enough money' because 'enough' already quantifies the noun.

× I always take care about my savings.

✓ I always take care of my savings.

The correct phrase is 'take care of' not 'take care about'.

× Secondly, I take in mind to give a usable and practical gift for the receiver.

✓ Secondly, I keep in mind to give a usable and practical gift to the receiver.

The phrase 'take in mind' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'keep in mind'. Also, 'gift for the receiver' should be 'gift to the receiver'.

× Lastly, I always take care about the quality of the.

✓ Lastly, I always take care of the quality.

The sentence is incomplete and 'take care about' is incorrect; it should be 'take care of'. Also, 'the' is unnecessary without a following noun.

× At that time, I was so shy to ask for asked for the money to my parents.

✓ At that time, I was so shy to ask for money from my parents.

The phrase 'ask for asked for' is redundant and incorrect. Also, the correct preposition is 'from' when referring to receiving money from someone.

× I remember that it was a beautiful birthday card including the various arts.

✓ I remember that it was a beautiful birthday card including various artworks.

The phrase 'including the various arts' is awkward; 'various artworks' is more natural. Also, 'the' is unnecessary here.

× To be very honest, I don't believe that always costly gifts can express your feelings.

✓ To be very honest, I don't believe that costly gifts always can express your feelings.

The adverb 'always' is misplaced; it should be placed before the verb 'can' for correct emphasis.

× I believe that the feelings behind your gift mattress more than the cost of the gift.

✓ I believe that the feelings behind your gift matter more than the cost of the gift.

The word 'mattress' is a typo and should be 'matter'.

× In my case, I always give the person.

✓ In my case, I always give gifts personally.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs an object and clearer structure.

× I always give the gifts to the person with the my bottom all of my.

✓ I always give gifts to the person with all of my heart.

The phrase 'with the my bottom all of my' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'with all of my heart' to express sincerity.