Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và súc tích. Tránh lặp từ và ngắt quãng bằng tiếng lề, dùng câu chủ đề rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với ví dụ cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'choose the debt' không đúng), dùng từ phù hợp (gift, present), và giới hạn trong tối đa 3–4 câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: No, I'm not very good at giving gifts. I usually choose presents at random without thinking much about the recipient's preferences, so they aren't always suitable. For example, I once bought a book for a friend who prefers movies, which she appreciated but didn't really use.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp về thời điểm rồi nêu vài ví dụ cụ thể và liên kết bằng từ nối (for example, also). Tránh ngắt quãng và dùng từ sai (suggests). Giữ 2–4 câu, rõ ràng và mạch lạc.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays and anniversaries. I also buy souvenirs when I travel and bring them back for friends; for example, I once brought handmade ceramics from Hoi An for my sister.

提案: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần diễn đạt rõ ràng, dùng từ chính xác và liên kết hợp lý (firstly, secondly, because). Nên bổ sung ví dụ cụ thể để minh họa cách bạn kiểm tra giá và chất lượng. Giữ câu ngắn, tránh lặp từ như 'uh'.

例: I consider two main factors when choosing a gift. Firstly, the price — I check my budget to make sure the present is affordable. Secondly, I focus on quality because I want the gift to be useful and last a long time; for example, I prefer buying a well-made wallet rather than a cheap one.

提案: Cần câu trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn. Tránh ngắt quãng, sửa ngữ pháp (hand skill → craft skills; handwriting → handwriting is different). Nên đưa ví dụ thay thế (e.g., I buy handmade items from markets) để thể hiện rõ ý.

例: No, I haven't made many handmade gifts because I'm not good at crafts. Instead, I sometimes buy handmade items from local markets or ask a friend who is crafty to make something special for the person.

提案: Câu trả lời có quan điểm rõ nhưng diễn đạt lủng củng và thiếu hoàn chỉnh. Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No/It depends) rồi giải thích lý do kèm ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và filler. Kết thúc câu hoàn chỉnh trong 2–3 câu.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts are necessary to show feelings. I value the thought and effort behind a gift more than its price; for instance, a thoughtful handwritten letter means more to me than an expensive gadget.

× Wow. For myself, I consider myself that I'm not good at, uh, giving gift, uh, 'cause I just choose the debt, choose something that, that people I want to go to give the present day like, and then I just choose randomly. So are therefore I'm not good at that.

✓ Wow. For myself, I consider that I'm not good at giving gifts, because I just choose something randomly for the person I want to give a present to. Therefore, I'm not good at that.

Student used incorrect and redundant pronouns and word order issues (e.g., 'consider myself that I'm', 'giving gift', 'people I want to go to give the present day like'). Use 'consider that' or 'consider myself to be', plural 'gifts', and place phrases in correct order. Suggestion: simplify the sentence: 'I consider that I'm not good at giving gifts' and use 'gifts' for general reference. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× What are it's very simple. I suggest, like suggests are on their birthday, are the anniversary or I when I go to travel somewhere that I want by that I want to buy something for a souvenir to, uh, give them. So I don't have any, uh, event to give them.

✓ It's very simple. I usually give gifts on their birthday or anniversary, or when I travel somewhere and want to buy a souvenir for them. I don't have any other specific event to give gifts.

Errors include wrong or missing prepositions and awkward word order (e.g., 'suggests are on', 'when I go to travel', 'buy something for a souvenir to give them'). Use 'on' for occasions ('on their birthday'), 'when I travel' (no 'go to'), and 'buy a souvenir for them'. Suggestion: use clear time/place prepositions and concise clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Well, I have two factors that I uh, buy that I am choose a present uh. Firstly, it's about the price that I have to uh, double check about that and then see does this work or not. Secondly, it's about the quality of the products that I want to buy.

✓ Well, I consider two factors when I choose a present. Firstly, the price — I check it and see whether the gift will be useful. Secondly, I consider the quality of the product I want to buy.

Pronoun and phrasing issues: 'I have two factors that I buy that I am choose a present' is ungrammatical. Use 'consider two factors when I choose' and replace 'does this work or not' with 'whether the gift will be useful'. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'consider' and 'check' and proper relative clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Well, I'm, I'm not the person that has the hand skill, so I usually buy something that they, umm, available or I ask about it to, uh, do something handmade, but, uh, handmade, uh, I can do for them. It's just about the handwriting and another thing I'm not good at.

✓ Well, I'm not someone skilled with my hands, so I usually buy something that's available or ask someone to make a handmade item for them. I can only do handwriting, which is something else I'm not good at.

Awkward adjective/noun usage: 'the person that has the hand skill' should be 'someone skilled with my hands' or 'someone with crafting skills'. 'Handwriting' was confused with 'handmade' crafts; clarify that 'handwriting' refers to writing by hand. Suggestion: use 'skilled' as adjective and 'handmade item' as noun, and avoid repeating fillers. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Well, umm, I'm a, I'm a very, uh, simple person, so even, umm, expensive are not specific. I always, uh, express my, uh, appreciate for, for that person because they have the time and then, uh, they purchase to give me, to give me a gift. So I really.

✓ Well, I'm a very simple person, so expensive gifts do not matter to me. I always express my appreciation to the person because they took the time and bought a gift for me.

Several sentence structure and word choice errors: 'expensive are not specific' is incorrect; use 'expensive gifts do not matter' or 'expensive gifts are not necessary'. 'Express my appreciate' should be 'express my appreciation'. 'They purchase to give me' should be 'they bought a gift for me' or 'they purchased a gift for me'. Suggestion: use noun 'appreciation' and correct verb phrases like 'bought a gift for'. Grammar problem type ID: 26